專題二讀后續(xù)寫第二節(jié)指導(dǎo)篇(本欄目對(duì)應(yīng)學(xué)生用書P383)第1講

如何利用文本特征讀出有效信息讀后續(xù)寫以記敘文為主，記敘文是以記人、敘事、寫景、狀物為主，以寫人物的經(jīng)歷和事物發(fā)展變化為主要內(nèi)容的一種文體形式。要寫好續(xù)寫內(nèi)容，理解文本是第一步。對(duì)于記敘文閱讀，要注意以下幾個(gè)方面。

1.抓住記敘文的六要素即人物、時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、事件的起因、經(jīng)過(guò)和結(jié)果，讀后續(xù)寫所提供的文本除了結(jié)果這一要素之外，其余五個(gè)要素在文本中皆有清楚的呈現(xiàn)。因此閱讀文本時(shí)要緊扣這五個(gè)要素。

2.掌握記敘文的三大線索即時(shí)間線、情節(jié)線和感情線。閱讀文本時(shí)要抓住這三條主線。必要時(shí)可以列出這些線索，以更好地理解文章，為續(xù)寫做好準(zhǔn)備。只有對(duì)原文的脈絡(luò)線索和段落結(jié)構(gòu)有正確的和深刻的理解，續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容才能和原文骨肉相連，契合緊密。

3.把握文章主旨及故事的發(fā)展方向這一點(diǎn)至關(guān)重要。只有把握了文章的主旨意圖，才能很好地完成續(xù)寫。確保續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容和原文要有邏輯上的一致性，并能回應(yīng)原文的信息。4.分析文章的用詞特點(diǎn)和行文風(fēng)格只有這樣才能使續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容在語(yǔ)言色彩上和行文風(fēng)格上與所給文章保持一致。【典例示范】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroutethroughthickevergreenforest.

IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid，whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong？Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent！Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim，”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot，andlethimdecide.”

Ibitbackmyfrustration.Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted，Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme，hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren，butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice，andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren，hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool，IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Wesatdownnexttoeachother，butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Ireachedoutmyhandandpattedhimontheshouldergently，sayingthathewasagreatboywithstrongdeterminationandthatfacedwithdifficultieshealwaystriedhisbesttoovercomethem.Davidgraduallyraisedhishead.Lookinghimintheeye，Itoldhimnottogiveupafterhehadtrainedalot.Henoddedwithgratitudeandstoodup.Ihuggedhimtightlyandthenhewalkedawayslowlybutfirmly.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Whentherunbegan，helookedbackoverhisshoulderandwavedatmewithconfidence.Atthesametime，hisusualbigtoothysmileappearedonhisfaceagain.Thoughheranmoreslowlythanothers，hekeptonrunningandrunning.Nokidsfromotherschoolsmadefunofhim.Instead，allpresentcheeredhimonandadmiredhiscourageandstrongwill.Tomyrelief，

itwasthroughthisrunthatDavidbecamemuchstronger.

【語(yǔ)篇解讀】本題設(shè)置的情境是一名殘疾學(xué)生堅(jiān)持參加越野比賽。試題設(shè)置了考生相對(duì)熟悉的語(yǔ)篇語(yǔ)境，要求考生分析篇章情節(jié)脈絡(luò)，發(fā)揮獨(dú)立思考能力，展開(kāi)合理想象，運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)詞匯、語(yǔ)法等基礎(chǔ)寫作知識(shí)和能力。本題在加強(qiáng)語(yǔ)言表達(dá)能力考查的同時(shí)，引導(dǎo)學(xué)生在語(yǔ)言學(xué)習(xí)過(guò)程中注重辨析語(yǔ)言和文化中的具體現(xiàn)象，梳理和概括信息，從自己的視角正確評(píng)判周圍事物和不同觀念，創(chuàng)造性地表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)和想法?！拘畔⒄稀?/p>

1.人稱：第一人稱、第三人稱

2.時(shí)態(tài)：以一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主

3.故事要素：Whenthedayofthebigcross-countryrunWheretherunningroutethroughthickevergreenforestWhoI，David，theschool’scoachWhatIencouragedDavidtogathercouragetotakepartinthecross-countryrun.4.情節(jié)走向：越野賽場(chǎng)上，運(yùn)動(dòng)員們?cè)诜e極熱身→“我”發(fā)現(xiàn)David獨(dú)自一人悶悶不樂(lè)，因?yàn)樗麤Q定不參加比賽了→經(jīng)過(guò)了解，“我”發(fā)現(xiàn)David因?yàn)榕聞e人笑話，所以才不想?yún)⒓釉揭百?。但是，平日里他?xùn)練刻苦，雖然比別人慢，但是他都能堅(jiān)持完成訓(xùn)練，沒(méi)有人覺(jué)得他“與眾不同”，“我”也深知David訓(xùn)練過(guò)程中遇到的困難，“我”為他堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的毅力感到驕傲→我為他加油鼓勁兒，David重拾勇氣→他又重新站在了起跑線上。

5.發(fā)展方向：

Paragraph1：Wesatdownnexttoeachother，butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段首句“我們坐在一起，但是David不愿意看我?！笨梢缘弥?，在續(xù)寫第一段中應(yīng)描寫“我”如何勸說(shuō)和鼓勵(lì)David改變主意，參加比賽。

Paragraph2：IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段首句“我看著David和其他選手一起走到了起跑線上?！笨梢缘弥?，David改變了主意，決定參加比賽。續(xù)寫第二段應(yīng)著重描寫看到David重新參賽時(shí)“我”的心理活動(dòng)以及David的場(chǎng)上表現(xiàn)。6.用詞行文：文章側(cè)重動(dòng)作描寫，運(yùn)用大量的動(dòng)詞(短語(yǔ))，如warmingup，walkedover，comingtowards，rockingfromsidetoside等，畫面感強(qiáng)。并有一些情感類心理描寫與情節(jié)敘述，續(xù)寫時(shí)要側(cè)重動(dòng)作與心理描寫。【即時(shí)演練】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Theboysintheblockweregoingtohavearoller-skating(滑旱冰)racenextSaturday.Theyweredividedintotwoteams：theSunnysidersandtheShadysiders，withfiveboysoneachteam.AndywasontheSunnysiders.Theylostlastyear，sotheyweredesperatetowinthistime.ButAndyknewhisshortlegsmadeithardforhimtoskatefast.Oneday，Andywasgreetedbyapleasant“Hello”ashewasputtingonhisroller-skates.Helookedupandsawhisnewneighbour，F(xiàn)rancis.“Hello！”herepliedcheerfully，noticinghisneighbour’slonglegs.“Wannaskatewithme？Lookatyourlonglegs！Justtherightkindtomakeyouagoodskater.”“I’dloveto.Youknow，I’mreallygoodatrollerskatingandIusedtohelpmyteamwin.”Francissaid，histonenowheavywithsadness.“ButIlostmyrollerskatesandmymumjustcannotaffordtobuymeanotherpair.”

AndythoughtitwasashameforFrancis.Asanewcomer，therewereundoubtedlymanymomentswhenhemusthavefeltlonely.Andythoughttohimself，wonderingwhathecoulddoforFrancis.Buthehadtosaygoodbyeinahurrysincetheteamweremeetingintheopenspaceonthecornertotalkoversomeplans.

Whentalkingtotheteamcaptain，Andysuggestedaddinganotherboytotheirteam，F(xiàn)rancis.Butthecaptainsaid“No”astheteamknewnothingabouthim.Besides，theShadysiderswouldn’tletthemtakeonanextraplayer.Inthefollowingdays，Andypractisedveryhardwithhisteam.ThencamethedaybeforetheracewhenhesawFrancisonthesidewalk，watchingthemskatepast，hiseyesfilledwithasenseofloss.SomehowitupsetAndy，andhisdesiretohelphisnewneighborresurfaced.Thenhethoughtofawaythatcouldnotonlyhelphisteamwin，buthelpFrancisfitin.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。HerushedtoFrancis，excitedtotellhimhisplan.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“Francis，youcanusemyskatesintheracetomorrow！”Andyyelled，eyesshiningwithhope.Francishesitated.Noticingthat，Andyexplainedthathavinghimontheirteamwouldnotonlyboosttheirchancesofwinningbutalsohelphimmakemorefriends.Eventually，F(xiàn)rancisputontheroller-skatesandskatedaround，histalentinstantlyimpressingthecaptainwhowasnearby.StruckbyFrancis’excellentskills，thecaptainagreedtoincludethenewboy.Atthatmoment，

Andyfeltatouchofemptinessforgivinguphisownchance，butasurgeofexcitementfortheplanaswell.

Thenextday，theracebeganasscheduled._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________