讀后續(xù)寫原題閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。TheTurningPointIusedtobeacold-heartedindividualwholivedinnothingbutaworldofmyown.Unexpectedly,therewasatimeinmylifewheneverythingchanged.Sunshinesuddenlyarosefrommyheart,openingitsdoortoanewworldwhereIwasthekeyinhelpingthoseinneedofahand.IwasafreshmaninhighschoolwhenIsteppedinourlocalnursinghome,complainingabouthavingtovolunteerthereonweekendsbecausemymomhadaskedmeto.Anyway,whenIpulledintotheparkinglot,Irealizedhowdifferenttheplacewas.Itwasniceandcleanwithelderseverywhere.AsIcheckedinatthefrontdeskformyfirstservicehours,Ireceivedastreamofgreetingsfromthesurroundingpeople.Itfeltasgoodasbreathinginlove,whichfilledmewithsuddenwarmth.Shelby,theladyinchargeofcommunityservice,assignedmetowatchfortheelderinroom111.Myjobwastohelpwithanythingsheneeded.AtfirstIthoughtthiswasthebeginningofanightmare,butitturnedouttobesomethingcompletelydifferent.AfterlisteningtoShelby’sinstructions,Iwalkedtowardmydestinationandknockedsoftlyatthedoor,askingifIcouldcomein.Avoicecamefrominsideansweringyes.Isteppedinsideandintroducedmyself,withanexplanationofwhyIwasthere.Meanwhile,Itookalookaround.Thewhitewallswerealmostcoveredinpictureframes.Icouldtellfromthepicturesshemusthavebeenateacherbefore.WhileIwaslookingaround,sheintroducedherselfasMarieBrown,goingtobe80intwomonths.Herfacemarkedbywrinklesofwisdomcouldreallytellmeherlifestory.“Soyou’vebeenhereforawhile?”Iasked.Foraminuteitwasallsilent,andthensheansweredyeswithaverysadvoice,addingthatshehadnofamily.RealizingIhadaskedthewrongquestion,Ifeltbad,forthefirsttime,forhurtingsomeone’sfeelings,especiallythislonelyelder’s.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Seeingmyembarrassment,Mariesmiledatmeandsignedtometositbyher.Paragraph2:Touchedbyherstories,IdeterminedtogiveMariecare,companyandevensurprises.寫作思路分析本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者曾經(jīng)是一個(gè)冷血的人，只活在自己的世界里。有一次作者在媽媽的要求下周末去當(dāng)?shù)仞B(yǎng)老院做志愿者，認(rèn)識(shí)了一個(gè)名叫MarieBrown的老人，她沒有家人。作者在和Marie相處的過程中，和她建立了友誼，改變了自己。由第一段首句內(nèi)容“看到我的尷尬，Marie對(duì)我笑了笑，示意我坐在她旁邊?！币约坝傻诙问拙鋬?nèi)容“被她的故事感動(dòng)了，我決定照顧Marie，陪伴她，甚至給她驚喜。”可知，第一段可描寫作者和Marie相處的經(jīng)過，以及Marie講述自己的過去。第二段可描寫作者怎樣陪伴Marie，怎樣給Marie驚喜。Marie的心情，我的感悟。參考范文Para1:Seeingmyembarrassment,Mariesmiledatmeandsignedtometositbyher.

Sayingsoftly,“Nevermind,I’vebeenusedtoit,”shepattedmeonthearm,attemptingtocheermeup.LearningIwasinhighschool,Mariewaslostinthoughtandstartedtotalkaboutherolddaysasateacher,fromwhichIcouldsenseherdeeploveforherstudents.Thensheshowedthepictureshangingonthewalls,excitedlysharingherstoriesconcerningherstudentsandproudlyintroducingwhateachofthemwasupto.Para2:Touchedbyherstories,IdeterminedtogiveMariecare,companyandevensurprises.I’dcallonMarie,chattingwithheranddoingeverythingIcouldforher.Onher80th

birthday,withthehelpofShelbyandotherelders,Iheldagrandpartyandmanagedtoinvitesomeofherstudentstocome.WhenIaccompaniedMarieintotheparty,allpresentrose,clappingsmilinglyandwishingherhappybirthday.Thebigsurprisebroughtexcitedtearstohereyes,herwrinkledfaceglowingwithhappiness.Bathedintheheart-warmingatmosphere,Ifeltsodelightedtohavelitupanoldteacher’slifeandmadeadifferencetoher.讀后續(xù)寫素材積累與拓展——極限運(yùn)動(dòng)Skiing通過課程中所學(xué)的續(xù)寫技能請(qǐng)用4-5句話續(xù)寫一個(gè)微場景描寫“我”在高山滑雪時(shí)意外摔倒的場面。①Ablastofadrenaline(N.

腎上腺素)

charged(V.

充電)

throughoutmybodyasIexperienced

theinitialdrop.(as

引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語從句)翻譯：在我經(jīng)歷第一個(gè)下落時(shí)，我的腎上腺素瞬間貫穿了我身體每一個(gè)角落.(整體句式結(jié)構(gòu)由as

引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語從句，這里用到了一個(gè)醫(yī)學(xué)類詞匯，一般Phill是很少在課堂上讓學(xué)生使用醫(yī)學(xué)類詞匯的，因?yàn)橐愿呖嫉那闆r而言，第一必要性不大，其二，醫(yī)學(xué)類詞匯基本出現(xiàn)都是標(biāo)注詞.

但這個(gè)詞真的很好用，可以說背一個(gè)它，省了很多事.

因?yàn)槔m(xù)寫中基本情感都是起伏較大的，興奮激動(dòng)、驚嚇恐慌等，都可以用到：“Ablastofadrenalinecharged

throughoutmybody”；所以推薦給你)②Afterovercompensating(V.

過度補(bǔ)償)

fromanearlydisastrous(Adj.

糟糕的)

slip(N.滑倒)

,Ilostmy

balance

,

mykneesbuckling

helplessly.

(獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu))翻譯：在差點(diǎn)摔倒之后，我失去了平衡感，我的膝蓋開始不由自主地發(fā)軟.

③Mylefthandplowed(V.

耕地；犁地----深深扎進(jìn))

forcefullyintoice,cracking(V.噼啪作響)

painfullyatthewrist.

(分詞做狀語)翻譯：我的左手狠狠地扎進(jìn)了雪地里，手腕因?yàn)閯×覜_撞發(fā)出了響亮的摩擦聲.(進(jìn)一步對(duì)于動(dòng)作進(jìn)行刻畫，通過"plow"一詞，形象生動(dòng)地體現(xiàn)出手與雪之間的摩擦和狀態(tài)、疊加副詞"forcefully"的修飾體現(xiàn)摔倒的不可控和嚴(yán)重

、而動(dòng)詞"cracked"是一個(gè)擬聲詞，該詞的使用讓人物在整體動(dòng)作刻畫上，擁有了視覺和聲感的雙重沖擊，更好體現(xiàn)出了“摔倒”的程度和人物狀態(tài).)④Foraneternityof30seconds,mybodysomersaulted

downward,mogulsoficetoying

withmyheadandfurtheragonizing(V

折磨)

mybrokenwrist.

（獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)——構(gòu)建自身狀態(tài)、疊加擬人修辭）(“Foraneternityof30seconds”/r