讀后續(xù)寫速成:

“天龍八步”法

目錄：

第1部分

第2部分八步法實(shí)戰(zhàn)應(yīng)用：高考真題講解

但是問題還過段時(shí)間，

點(diǎn)題，

未解決或出事情有了

個(gè)人的努力呼應(yīng)前文

現(xiàn)了新問題最后的轉(zhuǎn)折

或借型外界

突然有了一個(gè)

進(jìn)一步想法(一句話S

解釋描寫說明這個(gè)想法)

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情緒描寫

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情緒細(xì)節(jié)轉(zhuǎn)折轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)失望想法結(jié)局總結(jié)

注意：這八步并不是固定的，可以不按這個(gè)順序，也可以省略一些環(huán)節(jié)。

讀后續(xù)寫，大部分都是圍繞conflict,solution來運(yùn)轉(zhuǎn)的，首先你能看懂材料，如果這一步無法完成,

那這篇文章并不適合你。然后，你要找到文章到底提出什么沖突或問題。大部分文章都是這個(gè)模式:

(1)情緒：消極情緒

(2)細(xì)節(jié)：進(jìn)一步解釋描寫

⑶轉(zhuǎn)折：個(gè)人的努力或借助外界

(4)轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：事情似乎有了轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)，并抱有希望，感到欣慰

⑸失望：但是問題還是沒有解決或出現(xiàn)了新問題

⑹新法：突然有了一個(gè)想法(一句話說明這個(gè)想法)

⑺結(jié)局：過了一段時(shí)間；事情有了最后的轉(zhuǎn)折

(8)總結(jié)：點(diǎn)題，呼應(yīng)前文

第1步情緒：情緒描寫

第2步細(xì)節(jié)：進(jìn)一步解釋描寫

[例1]

smilebrightly;laugh;beam;light(sth)up;lightupwith;burstintolaughter;burstout

laughing;wearabright/broadsmile;givesbasmile

細(xì)節(jié)描寫：笑

看到直升飛機(jī)，Jane高興地笑了起來。

(l)Atthesightofthehelicopter,Janebeamedwithwildjoy.

(2)Seeingthehelicopter,Janebeamedwithwildjoy.

(3)Themomentshecaughtsightofthehelicopter,Jane'seays/facelitupwithdelight.

(4)Themomentshecaughtsightofthehelicopter,abrightsmilelitupJane'sfaceleyes.

[例2]

情緒描寫：哭

cry;sob;weep;burstintotears;burstoutcrying;(one'seyes)brimwith/befullof/befilled

withtears

細(xì)節(jié)描寫：哭

(1)Alumpcametohisthroat.他哽咽欲哭。

(2)Hereyeswereredfromcrying.她的雙眼哭得通紅。

(3)Hereyesbrimmedwithtears.她的眼里滿含淚水。

(4)Tearscoursed/trickled/streamed/randownhercheeks.眼淚沿著她的面頰流下來。

[例3]

情緒描寫：害怕

frightened;panicked;scared;speechless;in(a)panic;inacoldsweat;befulloffear;be

filledwithterror;berootedtothespot;freeze;runaway;flee;one^kneesfeelweak;

(hands)sweat

細(xì)節(jié)描寫：害怕

我感到很害怕。

(1)1feltveryfrightened/scared/panicked.

(2)Iwasin(a)panic/wasfulloffear.

(3)1stoodrootedtothespot,brimmingwithfear/filledwithfear.

(4)1feltsoscaredthatmythroattightenedandmykneesfeltweak.

(5)1frozewithterror,tooscaredtomove.

(6)1wasseizedbyastrongsenseofhorror;mypalmssweating.

[例4]

情緒描寫：高興激動(dòng)

v.dance;jump/leapwithjoy;feelasurgeofhappiness/delightJoyexcitement;whistle;be

overewithhappiness/delightjoy/excitement;(one1seyes)twinkle;(one'sheart)beat/pound

wildly

adj.happy;delighted;oveqoyed;excited;thrilled;wildwithjoy

細(xì)節(jié)描寫：高興激動(dòng)

當(dāng)她知道考試結(jié)果時(shí)，她興奮極了。

(l)Whensheknewtheresultofthetest,shefeltexcited/thrilled.

(2)Whensheknewtheresultofthetest,hereyestwinkledwithexcitement.

(3)Whensheknewtheresultofthetest,herheartwaspoundingwithwildjoy.

(4))Whensheknewtheresultofthetest,awildexcitementtookholdofher.

(5)Knowingtheresultofthetest,shefeltasurgeofexcitement.

(6)Knowingtheresultofthetest,shewasoverewithexcitement.

[例5]

情緒描寫：傷心痛苦

sad;bitter;sorrowful;feelasurgeofsadness;(sadness)surgewithinsb;one'sheartache;be

overewithsadness

細(xì)節(jié)描寫：傷心痛苦她傷心不已。

(1)Samfeltextremelysad.

(2)Asadnesscameoverher.

(3)Herheartached,tearsstreamingdownhercheeks.

(4)Numbwithgrief,shebecamespeechless.

(5)Feelingasurgeofsadness,shecouldn'thelpcryingbitterly.

(6)Sadnesssurgingwithinher,sheburstintotears.

[例6]

情緒描寫：生氣憤怒

felt/getangry/furious;feelasurgeofanger/rage/fury;eyesblaze;stormoutof/into/off;

storm/sayangrily;sthmakessbbloodboil;sthmakessbextremelyangry;claspone's

fists/teeth;speechless

細(xì)節(jié)描寫：生氣憤怒

Sam感到非常生氣。

(1)Samfeltveryangry.

(2)Samstoodrootedtothespot,hiseyesblazingwithanger.

(3)Samfeltsoangrythathestormedoutoftheroom,slammingthedoor

furiouslybehindhim.

(4)Boilingwithrage,Samshookhisfistatme.

(5)Filledwithfury,Samwasunabletoutterasingleword.

第3步轉(zhuǎn)折：個(gè)人努力或借助外界

【例7】

鼓起勇氣；他人的鼓勵(lì)pluckup/take/gatherone'scourage(todo....)

(l)sbcouldhardlywaittodosth

(2)withoutasecondthought

毫不猶豫(3)withouteventhinking

(4)withoutdelay

(5)withouthesitation

第4步轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：事情似乎有了轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)，并抱有希望，感到欣慰

[例8]

似乎(1)Itwaslikedoingsth

(2)ItseemedasifVthat

希望that..pingthat..

(2)see/feelaglimmerofhope

(3)tryinghardtodosth

欣慰(1)....breathedasighofreliefsighedwithrelief松了一口氣

(2)(awaveofrelieffloodedthrough/washedoversb

(3)toonefsrelief...使人欣慰的/放心的是...

第5步失望：但是問題還未解決或出現(xiàn)了新問題

【例9】

不幸的是(l)butbadluckforsb,.....(2),butinvain

(3),butwithoutsuccess(4),butnouse

不知道做什(l)sbdidsth,wonderingwhattodonext.(2)sbdidsth,notknowingwhattodonext.

么(3)sbdidsth,unsureofwhattodonext.(4)sbwasatalosswhattodo.

(5)sbwasinadilemmaaboutwhethertodoornot.

第6步想法：突然有了一個(gè)想法（一句話說明這個(gè)想法）

【例10]

(l)Itsuddenlyoccurredtosbthat+從句Ithitsbthat+從句

Itstrucksbthat+從句Itdawnedonsbthat+從句

(2)(idea,thought..)occurred/cametosb=..came/flashedintoone's

某人想到/明白/有了主意mind...crowdedinone'smind

(3)one!smindbegantorace

第7步結(jié)局：過段時(shí)間，事情有了最后的轉(zhuǎn)折

【例11]

過了一段時(shí)間(l)notlongafterthat,,=shortlyafterwards,....befbrelong,...=It

didn'ttakelongbefore+從句=Ittooksometimebefore+從句(2)foran

instant/moment

事情有了轉(zhuǎn)折(l)Toone'ssurprise(delight)/Strangelyenough,itturnedoutthat+從句

(2)Butonsecondthoughts,....

(3)Butwhathappenednextwaspuremagic.

第8步總結(jié)：點(diǎn)題，呼應(yīng)前文

例12

直到……才意識(shí)到(1)倒裝句：Notuntil+時(shí)間狀語+didsbrealize/noticethat+

從句

(2)強(qiáng)調(diào)句：Itwasonly+時(shí)間狀語+thatsbrealizedthat+從句

還記得某人的話；還在某(1)One'swords(echoed/rangout)inone'sears.

人的腦海中(2)One'swords/voice/songlingered/whisperedinone'smind/head.

(3)One'sheadwasstillfullof..

經(jīng)歷與教訓(xùn)(l)Whata/anvaluable/useful/great/painfullessonsbtaught

me/sblearnedfromsb!

(2)Whata/anenjoyable/pleasant/wonderful/unforgettable/

memorable/interesting/valuableexperiencesbhad!

(3)Downdeepinone'sheat....在某人的內(nèi)心深處

第二部分“八步法”實(shí)戰(zhàn)應(yīng)用：高考真題講解

故事梗概：夫妻旅游途中吵架，妻子獨(dú)自離開，述路在樹林里，直升飛機(jī)來了幾次授救但沒有

看見她。她感到很失望。

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeinthe

forest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimethey

reachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.'Tmgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp"and

walkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,she

turnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcapped

mountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

"Tom!"shecried.nHelp!H

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershe

walked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthe

night.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimand

tellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling（滴落）somewhereatadistance.

Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandatea

fewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow.Janebegantowalkalongthe

streamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetrees

madeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Jane

tookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.

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Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

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ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

第一段：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.（但是沒有直升機(jī)來了，天又黑

To）

讀后續(xù)寫續(xù)寫

l.Awaveofterrorsweptoverher.一陣恐怖的浪潮席卷了1.情緒

她。

2.Herheartpoundingfiercelyandherpalm她的心劇烈地跳動(dòng)著，手心冒2.細(xì)節(jié)：詳述

sweating,aninnervoicetoldherthatshehadto汗，一個(gè)內(nèi)在的聲音告訴她，情緒

findasafeplace.她必須找到一個(gè)安全的地方。

3.TiredandterrifiedasshewasJaneplucked雖然她很累，也很害怕，但3.轉(zhuǎn)折：個(gè)

hercouragetofeeltheway.簡(jiǎn)鼓起勇氣去感受這條路。人努力

4.Luckily,itdidn'ttakelongbeforeshefounda4.幸運(yùn)的是，沒過多久她就找轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：成功、

cave.到了一個(gè)洞穴。希望來了。

5.Sighingwithrelief,shefeltaglimmerof5.松了一口氣，她感到了一絲希

hope,sayingtoherself."Tomorrowisanother望。對(duì)自己說?！懊魈煊质切碌?/p>

day?一天」

Withthat,shewenttosleep,inwhosedream說完，她就去睡覺了，她丈銜接句