進(jìn)階練19概要寫(xiě)作（滿分范文）專(zhuān)練（解析版）

學(xué)校:姓名：班級(jí)：考號(hào)：

一、概要寫(xiě)作

1.(2023?上海靜安?統(tǒng)考二模)Directions:Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaandthemain

point(s)ofthepassageinnomorethan60words.Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

Second-handfashionstagesacomeback

FewfollowersoffashionwillforgetthemomentwhenasupermodelarrivedataNewYorkfashionweek

dinner,wearinga1950sdress.Thenextday,ahuntforsomethingsimilarbegan.Thatwas2003.Fastforwardto

the2020sandsecond-handfashionisrenewinganewroundofcraze,andthistime,arguably,ifsbackforgood.

Whensupermodelsanddesignerswerebuyingthingsatsecond-handmarketsandmatchingthemwith

expensivepieces,theactwasmorerelatedtotheoldidealofwhatfashionwas-verytrend-basedandvery

season-based.Today,ordinarypeoplealwayswanttohavenewlooksbutthey'rebecomingmoreawareofthe

impactoftheirchoicesontheenvironment,andthebestthingwecandointhisclimatecrisisistolimitthe

resourceswetakeoutoftheplanet.Second-handfashionspeakstowhafshappeningrightnow.Andtheworldis

speakingback.It'sestimatedthatthetotalresaleclothesmarketisexpectedtoriseinvaluefrom$96billionin

2021to$141billionby2023.Morethan"backforgood5,second-handfashionlookssettobecomethenewnorm.

Theincreasedcraftsofrepairandupcyclingofferanothercontemporarydimensiontothetrend.There'sa

riseinyoungpeoplelookingatthingsthatalreadyexist,notonlytotakeinspirationfrom,butalsotouseas

materialfornext-stagecreation.Currentrepairandupcyclingskillsmaketheirwishareality.

Evensocialmediaplatformsareonboard."Onceyoustartfindingheatatthesecond-handfashionshop,it

quicklyturnsintoanever-growingaddiction.Eachpiecehashistorybehindit,“saidanonlinecelebritywith1.7

millionfollowers.He,alongwithothercelebritiespostingvisitstoshopsofthiskind,haspushedupsales.Their

powerinthefieldcan'tbeneglected.

【答案】Onepossibleversion:

Unlikeformerheat,todaysecond-handfashionisbackpermanently.Comparedwithfashion-oriented

professionals,ordinarypeopleturntosecond-handfashionoutofconsiderationforenvironmentprotection.The

hugemarketrisedemonstratesitspopularity.Theupgradedrepairandupcyclingcraftsmakefurthercreation

possible.Socialmediaalsostepin,withonlinecelebritiesinfluencingsalestoaddtothecraze.

【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文是一篇說(shuō)明文。文章介紹說(shuō)，與過(guò)去不同的是，如今二手時(shí)尚永久回歸。相比于以時(shí)尚為導(dǎo)

向的專(zhuān)業(yè)人士，普通人出于環(huán)保的考慮而選擇二手時(shí)尚。巨大的市場(chǎng)上漲表明了它的受歡迎程度。升級(jí)的

維修和升級(jí)回收工藝使進(jìn)一步的創(chuàng)造成為可能。社交媒體也參與進(jìn)來(lái)，網(wǎng)紅影響銷(xiāo)量，助長(zhǎng)了這股熱潮。

【詳解】1.要點(diǎn)摘錄

①Fastforwardtothe2020sandsecond-handfashionisrenewinganewroundofcraze,andthistime,arguably,

ifsbackforgood.

②Whensupermodelsanddesignerswerebuyingthingsatsecond-handmarketsandmatchingthemwith

expensivepieces,theactwasmorerelatedtotheoldidealofwhatfashionwas-verytrend-basedandvery

season-based.Today,ordinarypeoplealwayswanttohavenewlooksbutthey9rebecomingmoreawareofthe

impactoftheirchoicesontheenvironment,andthebestthingwecandointhisclimatecrisisistolimitthe

resourceswetakeoutoftheplanet.Second-handfashionspeakstowhafshappeningrightnow.

③Theincreasedcraftsofrepairandupcyclingofferanothercontemporarydimensiontothetrend.

④Evensocialmediaplatformsareonboard.uOnceyoustartfindingheatatthesecond-handfashionshop,it

quicklyturnsintoanever-growingaddiction.Eachpiecehashistorybehindit,“saidanonlinecelebritywith1.7

millionfollowers.He,alongwithothercelebritiespostingvisitstoshopsofthiskind,haspushedupsales.Their

powerinthefieldcan'tbeneglected.

2.縝密構(gòu)思將第1個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行總說(shuō)，將第2、3、4三個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行分說(shuō)。

3.遣詞造句

Unlikeformerheat,todaysecond-handfashionisgettingbackpermanently.

Comparedwithfashion-orientedprofessionals,commonpeopleturntosecond-handfashionoutofconsideration

forenvironmentprotection.Thehugemarketrisedemonstratesitspopularity.

Theupgradedrepairandupcyclingcraftsmakefurthercreationpossible.

Socialmediaalsostepin,withonlinecelebritiesinfluencingsalestoaddtothecraze.

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]Comparedwithfashion-orientedprofessionals,ordinarypeopleturntosecond-handfashion

outofconsiderationforenvironmentprotection.運(yùn)用過(guò)去分詞作狀語(yǔ)對(duì)第二段進(jìn)行了概括。

[高分句型2]Socialmediaalsostepin,withonlinecelebritiesinfluencingsalestoaddtothecraze.用with的復(fù)合

結(jié)構(gòu)對(duì)最后一段進(jìn)行了概括，表達(dá)非常高級(jí)。

2.（2023?上海徐匯?統(tǒng)考二模）Directions：Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaandthemain

point（s）ofthepassageinnomorethan60words.Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

IsBanningSingle-usePlastictheRightOption?

Theharmfuleffectsofusingplasticarebecomingincreasinglyapparent.Plasticdoesnotdecompose,but

breaksdownintosmallerandsmallerparticles.Itthreatensournatureaswellasourhealth.Onepopularsolution

totheproblemistoprohibitsingle-useplastics.IntheUK,supermarketsarebeingencouragedtosetup

plastic-freeaisles,inwhichthefoodisdisplayedloose,andshoppersareencouragedtomakemore

environmentally-friendlychoicesinpackingandtransportingtheirfood.

Suchplansarewell-intentioned,butitmaynotbebeneficialtoeliminate（清除）theuseofsingle-useplastic

altogether.Oneofthefieldswheresingle-useplastichasavitalroleisthefoodindustry.Whenfoodorfresh

goodsarepackedinplastic,theyareprotectedandpreserved,helpingthemremainfresherandkeepingthemfrom

spoiling.Single-useplasticisalsocrucialinthemedicalindustry.Thisisnotjustbecauseofitslowcost.Ithelps

topreventthespreadofinfectionandthatisthebiggestbenefitofthematerialinthemedicalfield.

Replacingplasticwithothermaterialsisneithersimplenorstraightforward,mainlyduetothechallengeof

findinganalternativethatcombinesallthemostdesirableplasticproperties.Forexample,glassproductsarea

potentialalternative,butcleaningthemwouldbeextremelyexpensivewhileincreasingtherisktohealth.Another

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issueisthatalternativematerialstoplasticareoftenmoreenvironmentallyharmfulthanplastic.Takepaperbags,

forexample.ResearchbytheNorthernIrelandAssemblyshowsfourtimesmoreenergyisrequiredto

manufactureapaperbagthanaplasticbag.Ifpeoplerespondbysimplyusingothermaterials,abanonsingle-use

plasticcanendupmakingtheproblemworse.

Clearlythereisaneedtoreduceplasticwasteanditsimpactontheenvironment.However,simplybanning

theirsingleusemaynotbethebestoption.

【答案】參考答案

Plasticwastecancausegreatharmtobothnatureandourhealth.Banningsingle-useplastic,although

well-intentioned,isnotthebestsolution,becausesingle-useplasticiswidelyusedinfoodandmedicalindustryto

ensuresafetyandsavemoney.Besides,thealternativematerialsmaynothavethedesirableproperties,andcan

causemoreharmtotheenvironment.(57words)

【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文是一篇說(shuō)明文。文章介紹了塑料垃圾會(huì)對(duì)自然和我們的健康造成很大的危害。禁止使用一次

性塑料，雖然是出于好意，但并不是最好的解決方案。替代材料可能沒(méi)有理想的性能，并可能對(duì)環(huán)境造成

更大的危害。

【詳解】1要點(diǎn)摘錄

①Theharmfuleffectsofusingplasticarebecomingincreasinglyapparent.Itthreatensournatureaswellasour

health.

②Onepopularsolutiontotheproblemistoprohibitsingle-useplastics.

③Suchplansarewell-intentioned,butitmaynotbebeneficialtoeliminate(清除)theuseofsingle-useplastic

altogether.

(4)Oneofthefieldswheresingle-useplastichasavitalroleisthefoodindustry.Single-useplasticisalsocrucial

inthemedicalindustry.Thisisnotjustbecauseofitslowcost.

⑤Ifpeoplerespondbysimplyusingothermaterials,abanonsingle-useplasticcanendupmakingtheproblem

worse.

?However,simplybanningtheirsingleusemaynotbethebestoption.

2.縝密構(gòu)思將第1要點(diǎn)單獨(dú)概括，將2、3、4三個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行重組，將第5、6兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行整合。

3.遣詞造句

Plasticwastecancausegreatharmtobothnatureandourhealth.

Banningsingle-useplastic,althoughwell-intentioned,isnotthebestsolution,becausesingle-useplasticiswidely

usedinfoodandmedicalindustrytoensuresafetyandsavemoney.

Besides,thealternativematerialsmaynothavethedesirableproperties,andcancausemoreharmtothe

environment.

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]Banningsingle-useplastic,althoughwell-intentioned,isnotthebestsolution,because

single-useplasticiswidelyusedinfoodandmedicalindustrytoensuresafetyandsavemoney.運(yùn)用一個(gè)復(fù)雜的

主從復(fù)合句對(duì)原文第一段后半部分和第二段進(jìn)行了概括。其中省略的although引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句和

because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句表達(dá)非常高級(jí)。

[高分句型2]：Besides,thealternativematerialsmaynothavethedesirableproperties,andcancausemoreharm

totheenvironment.用文章紐帶連接副詞Besides對(duì)第三段和第四段進(jìn)行了概括，運(yùn)用了并列連詞and連接謂

語(yǔ)，表達(dá)高級(jí)。

3.(2023?上海?上海市建平中學(xué)?？既?Directions:Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaand

themainpoint(s)ofthepassageinnomorethan60words.Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

Multi-tasking

Areyouamultitasker?DoyouwatchTVandcookdinneratthesametime?Doyouofteninterruptyour

worktocheckyouremail?Doyoutalkonyourphonewhileyou'redriving?Ifyoudotheseorsimilarthings,then

youareoneofmanymultitaskers.AccordingtoasurveybythemagazineScientificAmericanMIND,90percent

ofAmericanadultsmultitaskregularly.

Mostpeoplesaytheymultitaskbecausetheyaretoobusy,andmultitaskingsavestime.Popularelectronic

devicesliketabletsandsmartphonesmakeitconvenienttodoseveraltasksatonce,sopeoplefeelliketheyare

gettingmoredone.MelissaBrownofEvanston,Illinois,saysshehasnotroublelisteningtomusic,surfingthe

Internet,andsendingtextmessagestofriendswhileshedoesherhomework.

Recentstudies,however,showthatMelissaandotha*slikeherareperhapsgettinglessdonethantheythink

theyare.Thafsbecausewithmultitasking,thereareactuallymany"microintermptions“inwhichpeoplestopone

task,startanother,andeventuallyreturntothefirstone.Thesestopsandstartsmakeitdifficulttoconcentrate,and

somultitaskersactuallywastetime,accordingtoastudyatMicrosoftCorporation.Inthestudy,workerswho

interruptedtheirworktoansweranemailortextmessagetookanaverageof15minutestoreturntotheworkthey

weredoingbeforetheinterruption.

Somepsychologistssaythatthehumanbrainjustisn'tgoodatconcentratingontwothingsatthesametime.

Thisdoesn'tmatterifyou'reonlypreparingasaladandlisteningtotheradio,theysay.Butifyou'redoinga

difficulttaskthatrequiresthinking,likewritingareport,thenmultitaskingcanslowyoudownandcausemistakes.

Itcanevenbedangerous,asinthecaseofpeoplewhotalkonthephone,eat,orevenapplymakeupwhiledriving.

【答案】Onepossibleversion:

Multitaskinghasbecomeapopularhabitmainlybecausetheyfeeltoobusyandmultitaskinghelpssavetime.

However,studiesshowmultitaskingleadsto“microinterruptionsJmakingitdifficulttoconcentrateandwaste

time,causinglowproductivity.Moreover,ashumansarenotgoodatconcentratingontwothingssimultaneously,

multitaskingcanmakepeopleslowatworkandcausemistakesanddangers.

【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文是一篇說(shuō)明文。文章介紹說(shuō)，多任務(wù)處理已經(jīng)成為一種流行的習(xí)慣，主要是因?yàn)樗麄冇X(jué)得太

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忙了，而多任務(wù)處理有助于節(jié)省時(shí)間。然而，研究表明，多任務(wù)處理會(huì)導(dǎo)致“微干擾”，使人難以集中注意

力，浪費(fèi)時(shí)間，導(dǎo)致效率低下。此外，由于人類(lèi)不擅長(zhǎng)同時(shí)專(zhuān)注于兩件事，多任務(wù)處理會(huì)使人們工作速度

變慢，并導(dǎo)致錯(cuò)誤和危險(xiǎn)。

【詳解】1.要點(diǎn)摘錄

?AccordingtoasurveybythemagazineScientificAmericanMIND,90percentofAmericanadultsmultitask

regularly.Mostpeoplesaytheymultitaskbecausetheyaretoobusy,andmultitaskingsavestime.

②Thesestopsandstartsmakeitdifficulttoconcentrate,andsomultitaskersactuallywastetime,accordingtoa

studyatMicrosoftCorporation.Inthestudy,workerswhointerruptedtheirworktoansweranemailortext

messagetookanaverageof15minutestoreturntotheworktheyweredoingbeforetheinterruption.

③Somepsychologistssaythatthehumanbrainjustisn'tgoodatconcentratingontwothingsatthesametime.

Thisdoesn'tmatterifyou'reonlypreparingasaladandlisteningtotheradio,theysay.Butifyou'redoinga

difficulttaskthatrequiresthinking,likewritingareport,thenmultitaskingcanslowyoudownandcause

mistakes.

2.縝密構(gòu)思

將第1個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行總說(shuō)，將第2、3三個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行分說(shuō)。

3.遣詞造句

Multitaskinghasbecomeapopularhabitmainlysincetheyfeeltoooccupiedandmultitaskinghelpssavetime.

Butstudiesshowmultitaskingcontributesto'"microinterruptions,makingithardtoconcentrateandwastetime,

causinglowproductivity.

Besides,ashumansarenotexpertatfocusingontwothingssimultaneously,multitaskingcanmakepeopleslowat

workandcausemistakesanddangers.

【點(diǎn)目青】[高分句型1]Multitaskinghasbecomeapopularhabitmainlybecausetheyfeeltoobusyand

multitaskinghelpssavetime.運(yùn)用because引導(dǎo)原因狀語(yǔ)從句原文第一段和第二段進(jìn)行了概括。

[高分句型2]Butstudiesshowmultitaskingcontributesto4Cmicrointerruptions,makingithardtoconcentrateand

wastetime,causinglowproductivity.用現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)對(duì)第三段進(jìn)行了概括，表達(dá)非常高級(jí)。

4.(2023?上海浦東新?統(tǒng)考三模)Directions:Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaandthemain

point(s)ofthepassageinnomorethan60words.Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

KeepingtheKidsEatingHealthy

Fruitsandvegetablesaresuperimportantforkidstobeabletogrowuphealthyandstrong.Science

recommendsthatchildrenaged2to18getatleasttwoservingsoffruitandthreeservingsofvegetableseachday.

Butgettingkidstoeattheirfruitsandvegetablesisofteneasiersaidthandone.Ifyouneedadditionalreasonsto

helpyourkidsboosttheirintake,newresearchhasfoundthatstudentswhoeatmorefruitsandvegetablesmight

havebettermentalwell-beingthanthosewhoeatless.

ArecentstudypublishedinBMJNutrition,PreventionandHealthlookedat9,000studentsfromacrossthe

U.K.About7,500wereinsecondaryschool,and1,500wereinprimaryschool.Studentsself-reportedtheirdiet

andweregivenage-appropriatetestsformentalwell-beingthatlookedathappiness,relaxationandhealthy

interpersonalrelationships.Thestudyfoundastrongassociationbetweeneatingmorefruitsandvegetablesand

highermentalwell-beingscores.However,onlyabout25percentofthestudentsmettherecommendationofat

leastfiveservingsofproduceaday.

Anotherinterestingfindingconcernedbreakfast,anespeciallyimportantmealforschool-agekids,asit

providesthefueltheyneedtolearnandfunctioningeneral.However,theresearchfoundthatmorethanonein

fivesecondaryschoolchildrenandonein10primaryschoolchildrendidn'tcatastandardbreakfastatall,and

manyjusthadasnackordrinkinplaceofameal.Thosewhohadafullbreakfasthadsignificantlybettermental

well-beingscoresthanthosewhoskippedthemorningmeal.

Inshort,thefindingssuggestthateatingahealthydietthatincludesafullbreakfastandatleastfiveservings

offruitsandvegetablesadayleadstothebestmental-healthoutcomesforchildren.Unfortunately,manystudents

surveyedweremissingthemarkwitheitherfruitsandvegetables,breakfast,orboth.

【答案】Fruitsandvegetablesareessentialtokids'growth,butitisdifficulttogetthemtoeat.Newresearchfinds

higherintakeoffruitsandvegetablesandafullbreakfastbeneficialtoschoolchildren'smentalwell-being.Despite

researchers5advicetocatahealthydiet,manychildrenfailtoconsumetherecommendedquantityoffruitsor

breakfast.(55words)

【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文是一篇說(shuō)明文。文章介紹說(shuō)，水果和蔬菜對(duì)孩子的成長(zhǎng)是必不可少的，但很難讓他們吃。一

項(xiàng)新研究發(fā)現(xiàn)，多吃水果和蔬菜以及豐盛的早餐有利于學(xué)童的心理健康。盡管研究人員建議保持健康飲食，

但許多兒童沒(méi)有攝入推薦量的水果或早餐。

【詳解】1要點(diǎn)摘錄

①Fruitsandvegetablesaresuperimportantforkidstobeabletogrowuphealthyandstrong.

②Butgettingkidstoeattheirfruitsandvegetablesisofteneasiersaidthandone.

(3)Thestudyfoundastrongassociationbetweeneatingmorefruitsandvegetablesandhighermentalwell-being

scores.

④Inshort,thefindingssuggestthateatingahealthydietthatincludesafullbreakfastandatleastfiveservingsof

fruitsandvegetablesadayleadstothebestmental-healthoutcomesforchildren.

⑤Unfortunately,manystudentssurveyedweremissingthemarkwitheitherfruitsandvegetables,breakfast,or

both.

2.縝密構(gòu)思

將第1、2和4、5幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行重組，將第3要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行整合。

3.遣詞造句

Fruitsandvegetablesareessentialforthegrowthofchildren,butitishardtoletthemeat.

Eatingmorefruitandvegetablesandaheartybreakfastisgoodforthementalhealthofschoolchildren,anew

studyhasfound.

Althoughresearchersrecommendmaintainingahealthydiet,manychildrendonotconsumetherecommended

amountoffruitorbreakfast.

［點(diǎn)曰青］［高分句型1］Fruitsandvegetablesareessentialtokids'growth,butitisdifficulttogetthemtoeat.(運(yùn)

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用it作形式主語(yǔ)，真正主語(yǔ)為不定式的結(jié)構(gòu)）

[高分句型2]Newresearchfindshigherintakeoffruitsandvegetablesandafullbreakfastbeneficialto

schoolchildren^mentalwell-being.（運(yùn)用了"find+賓語(yǔ)+賓補(bǔ)”結(jié)構(gòu)）

5.（2023春?上海楊浦?高三同濟(jì)大學(xué)第一附屬中學(xué)校考階段練習(xí)）Directions:Readthefollowingpassage.

Summarizeinnomorethan60wordsthemainideaofthepassageandhowitisillustrated.Useyourownwords

asfaraspossible.

Learningtowriteeffectively

I'vebeenwritingformostofmylife.ThebookWritingWithoutTeachersintroducedmetoonedistinction

andonepracticethathashelpedmywritingprocessestremendously.Thedistinctionisbetweenthecreativemind

andthecriticalmind.Whileyouneedtoemploybothtogettoafinishedresult,theycannotworkinparallelno

matterhowmuchwemightliketothinkso.

Tryingtocriticizewritingontheflyispossiblythesinglegreatestbarriertowritingthatmostofusencounter

Ifyouarelisteningtothat5thgradeEnglishteachercorrectyourgrammarwhileyouaretryingtocapturea

fleeting（lastingonlyashorttime）thought,thethoughtwilldie.Ifyoucapturethefleetingthoughtandsimply

shareitwiththeworldinrawform,nooneislikelytounderstand.

ThepracticethatcanhelpyoupastyourlearnedbadhabitsoftryingtoeditasyouwriteiswhatElbowcalls

ufreewriting.Infreewriting,theobjectiveistogetwordsdownonpapernon-stop,usuallyfor15-20minutes.

Nostopping,nogoingback,nocriticizing.Thegoalistogetthewordsflowing.Asthewordsbegintoflow,the

ideaswillcomefromtheshadowsandletthemselvesbecapturedonyournotepadoryourscreen.

Nowyouhaverawmaterialsthatyoucanbegintoworkwithusingthecriticalmindthatyou'vepetsuadedto

sitonthesideandwatchquietly.Mostlikely,youwillbelievethatthiswilltakemoretimethanyouactuallyhave

andyouwillendupstaringblanklyatthepagesasthedeadlinedrawsnear.

Insteadofstaringatablank,startfillingitwithwordsnomatterhowbad.Halfwaythroughyouravailable

time,stopandreworkyourrawwritingintosomethingclosertofinishedproduct.Movebackandforthuntilyou

runoutoftimeandthefinalresultwillmostlikelybefarbetterthanyourcurrentpractices.

【答案】Onepossibleversion:

Howcanyoubecomeaneffectivewriter?ThebookWritingWithoutTeachersadvisesthatyoushould

separatecreativewritingfromcriticalwriting.Mixingthetwomeanseitherkillingbrilliantideasorpresenting

somethingincomprehensible.Toacquiretheskill,takedownyourthoughtsfreelytocaptureideasandkeep

revisingyourwritinguntilitbecomesagoodpiece.

【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文是一篇說(shuō)明文。文章介紹了如果你想要成為一名有效的作家，《沒(méi)有老師的寫(xiě)作》一書(shū)建議

你應(yīng)該把創(chuàng)造性寫(xiě)作和批判性寫(xiě)作分開(kāi)。為了獲得這項(xiàng)技能，你可以通過(guò)自由地記下你的想法來(lái)捕捉想法,

并不斷修改你的寫(xiě)作，直到它成為一篇好文章。

【詳解】1.要點(diǎn)摘錄

①ThebookWritingWithoutTeachersintroducedmetoonedistinctionandonepracticethathashelpedmy

writingprocessestremendously.

?Tryingtocriticizewritingontheflyispossiblythesinglegreatestbarriertowriting.

③Thepracticethatcanhelpyoupastyourlearnedbadhabitsoftryingtoeditasyouwriteiscalleda4freewriting.9,

④Whenyouhaverawmaterialsusingthecriticalmindandwatchquietly,youwillendupstaringblanklyatthe

pagesasthedeadlinedrawsnear.

⑤Halfwaythroughyouravailabletime,reworkyourrawwritingintosomethingclosertofinishedproduct.

2.縝密構(gòu)思將第2、3兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行整合，將第4、5兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行整合。

3.遣詞造句Itislikelythatyouwillbelievethiswilltakemoretimethanyouactuallyhaveandyouwillendup

staringblanklyatthepagesasthedeadlinedrawsnear.

Throughthehalfavailabletime,youcanstopandreworkyourrawwritingintosomethingclosertofinished

product.

Ifthefleetingthoughtcanbecapturedandsimplybesharedwiththeworldinrawform,nooneislikelyto

understand.

【,點(diǎn)目青】［高分句型1］：ThebookWritingWithoutTeachersintroducedmetoonedistinctionandonepracticethat

hashelpedmywritingprocessestremendously.運(yùn)用一個(gè)復(fù)雜的主從復(fù)合句對(duì)原文第一段內(nèi)容進(jìn)行了概括。其

中that引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句表達(dá)高級(jí)。

［高分句型2］：Ifyouarelisteningtothat5thgradeEnglishteachercorrectyourgrammarwhileyouaretryingto

captureafleeting(lastingonlyashorttime)thought,thethoughtwilldie.運(yùn)用if弓|導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句和while弓I

導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句對(duì)第二段主題進(jìn)行了舉例說(shuō)明。表達(dá)非常高級(jí)。

6.(2023?上海?南洋中學(xué)校考三模)Directions：Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaandthe

mainpoint(s)ofthepassageinnomorethan60words.Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

TheCrucialRoleofEarlyChildhoodEnvironment

Theenvironmentweareinaffectsourmoods,abilitytoformrelationships,effectivenessinworkorplay——

evenourhealth.Inaddition,theearlychildhoodenvironmenthasaverycrucialroleinchildren'slearningand

developmentfortwoimportantreasons.

First,youngchildrenareintheprocessofrapidbraindevelopment.Intheearlyyears,thebraindevelops

moresynapses(神經(jīng)元的突觸)orconnectionsthanitcanpossiblyuse.Thosethatareusedbythechildform

strongconnections,whilethesynapsesthatarenotusedgraduallydisappear.Children'sexperienceshelptomake

thisdetermination.TheNationalScientificCounciloftheDevelopingChildcomparesthedevelopmentofthe

braintoconstructingahouse,stating,t4Justasalackoftherightmaterialscanresultinblueprintsthatchange,the

lackofappropriateexperiencescanleadtoalterationsingeneticplans."Becausechildren'sexperiencesare

limitedbytheirsurroundings,theenvironmentweprovideforthemhasacrucialimpactonthewaythechild's

braindevelops.

Thesecondreasonthattheearlychildhoodenvironmenthassuchastrongroleinchildren'sdevelopmentis

becauseoftheamountoftimechildrenspendintheseenvironments.Manychildrenspendalargeportionoftheir

wakefulhoursinearlychildhoodsetting.Forexample,ababybeginningchildcarewillspendupto12,000hours

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intheprogram.Thisismoretimethanhewillspendinbothelementaryandsecondaryschools.Childrenwill

typicallyspendanother4,000hoursinkindergartenthroughthirdgradeclassrooms.

AnitaRuiOlds,awell-knownenvironmentaldesigner,believesthatweshoulddesignourearlychildhood

environmentsformiracles,notminimums.Shestates:'"Childrenaremiracles.Believingthateverychildisa

miraclecantransformthewaywedesignforchildren'scare.Whenweinviteamiracleintoourlives,weprepare

ourselvesandtheenvironmentaroundus.Wemakeitourjobtocreate,withgreatrespectandgratitude,aspace

thatisworthyofamiracle!

【答案】Therearetworeasonswhychildren'slearninganddevelopmentdependontheearlychildhood

environment.First,theenvironmentwherechildrengettheirexperiencesdeterminesthewayofchildren'sbrain

development.Second,comparedtootherperiods,childrenspendmoretimeinearlychildhoodsettings.Soabetter

earlychildhoodenvironmentshouldbesetforchildren'sbraindevelopment.

【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文是一篇說(shuō)明文。文章主要講述幼兒環(huán)境對(duì)兒童的學(xué)習(xí)和發(fā)展有著非常關(guān)鍵的兩方面的作用。

【詳角軍】1要點(diǎn)摘錄①I(mǎi)naddition,theearlychildhoodenvironmenthasaverycrucialroleinchildren'slearning

anddevelopmentfortwoimportantreasons.?First,youngchildrenareintheprocessofrapidbrain

development.(§)Thesecondreasonthattheearlychildhoodenvironmenthassuchastrongroleinchildren's

developmentisbecauseoftheamountoftimechildrenspendintheseenvironments.?Whenweinviteamiracle

intoourlives,weprepareourselvesandtheenvironmentaroundus.Wemakeitourjobtocreate,withgreat

respectandgratitude,aspacethatisworthyofamiracle!

2.縝密構(gòu)思全文是“總-分-總”的結(jié)構(gòu)。以上四句話分別描述每一段的主旨大意，因此概括全文內(nèi)容可以使用

它彳門(mén)的組合。3.遣詞造句①Becausechildren'sdevelopmentsarecreatedbyeducation,theenvironmentwe

provideforthemhasacrucialimpactonthem.?Manypeoplespendalargeportionoftheirwakefulhoursin

playingmobilephones.?Believingthateveryeffortwillcreateamiraclecantransformthewayweunderstand

ourselves.

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]：Thosethatareusedbythechildformstrongconnections,whilethesynapsesthatarenot

usedgraduallydisappear.其中兩個(gè)that引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，while連詞功能連接兩個(gè)有從句的分句，表示對(duì)比

關(guān)系，該表達(dá)很高級(jí)。

[高分句型2]：Thesecondreasonthattheearlychildhoodenvironmenthassuchastrongroleinchildren's

developmentisbecauseoftheamountoftimechildrenspendintheseenvironments,that弓|導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句彳修飾

reason并且在主句中作主語(yǔ)，且is后面接becauseof連接的名詞性短語(yǔ)，表達(dá)非常高級(jí)。

7.(2023?上海普陀?統(tǒng)考二模)Directions:Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaandthemain

point(s)ofthepassageinnomorethan60words.Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

HowtoStayHealthyinAutumn

Inrecentdays,theweatherinmostregionsisnolongerhot,andpeoplecanrelaxand