Unit1ScienceandScientists單元寫作深度指導(dǎo)（人教版2019）

（讀后續(xù)寫）

三年考情（20222024）解題技巧

1.從原文中整理出3?5個小的情節(jié)，從中推理出續(xù)寫的主要情節(jié)。情節(jié)不能

自己讀后憑空想象，要合理推理。

2.根據(jù)兩個段首語來推理情節(jié).段首語往往決定著一整段話的走向，要銜接

2024：新高考I卷&H卷：自然、順暢、合理。

人與社會（打車費）3.根據(jù)關(guān)鍵詞來推理情節(jié)發(fā)展。原文中關(guān)鍵詞一般會在十個左右，也并不是

浙江1月：人與自我（校都能用上。有一部分關(guān)鍵詞對于預(yù)測下面的情節(jié)是有導(dǎo)向意義的，因而可以用

園話題）在續(xù)寫之中。關(guān)鍵詞中，有關(guān)于情感的連接的，有關(guān)于時間的指向的，有關(guān)

2023新高考I卷&H卷：人鍵句線索反復(fù)出現(xiàn)的。同學(xué)們要注意的是：前面的伏筆后面是否有所體現(xiàn)，前

與自我（老師幫助作者培養(yǎng)文的人物關(guān)系是否把握，以及把握后是否在續(xù)寫中使矛盾凸現(xiàn)進(jìn)而解決，這些

寫作興趣）都是決定分?jǐn)?shù)高低的因素，一般答案是可以體現(xiàn)這些伏筆與連接的，如果嚴(yán)

2022新高考I卷&II卷;重偏題，首先要考慮是否讀懂文章，其次，杜絕天馬行空的續(xù)寫，需要回歸文

人與臼我（鼓勵殘疾學(xué)生參本，不需要與標(biāo)準(zhǔn)答案一致，但要體現(xiàn)前文的伏筆、線索、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系，這方面

加越野賽跑）考查的是理解能力與閱讀預(yù)判能力，需多練習(xí)加以提升。

浙江1月：人與自我（與4.根據(jù)故事需要，合理地豐富、有條理地增加一些次要的情節(jié)。比如人物的

隊友互助完成任％）表情、動作、心理活動等細(xì)節(jié)描寫。

浙江6月：人與社會5.根據(jù)生活常識或者社會經(jīng)驗，豐富文章的細(xì)節(jié)。不可鬧出不合常理的笑話，

（參加社區(qū)服務(wù)）成為改卷老師緊張改卷期間的談資。

6.平時多練習(xí)續(xù)寫微作文，找到自己所能掌控的語句長度。7句*20詞=140

詞，8句*20詞=160詞，1（）句*15詞=150詞。其實續(xù)寫并不是很可怕，一篇

讀后續(xù)寫1（）?15句，就可以達(dá)到字?jǐn)?shù)。然后分開兩段，每段也就5?8句話。

7.多種句型反復(fù)練習(xí)、嘗試，找到自己能夠駕馭的句子類型。這樣的好句可

以加分不少。簡單句、并列句、復(fù)合句。當(dāng)然建議復(fù)合句也只是基礎(chǔ)的復(fù)合句，

無需過于復(fù)雜，有時候牽強用上反而礙事。

8.平時注意多積累記敘文、故事方面的詞匯、句型和句段，豐富自己的記敘文

類英語語言的語料庫。考試中用出地道的英語句子，老師一定會很欣貪。腦

中先成文，落筆就一氣呵成。相對簡單的部分，可以直接書寫在答卷上：重點

部分可以先在草稿紙上寫一下，陽酌一下詞句的使用，然后譽抄上去。

一.高頻寫作例句

腳部動作：

1.ThenLisastoodupandmadeherwaythroughthecrowdtowardme.

2.Lisaplantedherfeetfirmlyinfrontofme.

3.Shemanagedtoclimbontoitandwailedpatiently.

4.Reubenran/rusheddownWaterStreet,tremblingwithgreatpanic.

5.TheshadowswerelengtheningwhenReubenarrivedatthefactory.

6.Then,clutchingthetincan,heheadedfortheshop.

7.Racinghome,Reubenburstthroughthefrontdoor.

8.Disappointedandfrustrated,thepoormanmadehiswaybacktohisfamily.

9.Suddenly,thewomanstoodupandenteredthehouseintears.

10.Andyet,theyalljuststoodtherestaringatme,motionless.

11.BelleRingernoddedthoughtfully,andFranniehurriedofftowaitontherestofhertables.

12.1ledthemtowardalargecornerbooth.Icouldfeeltherestofthestafffollowingbehindaswemarched

throughthediningroom.

13.Idraggedmyselfthroughdailychores,feelingexhausted.

14.Theelderlymanfledawaywithgreatpanic.

15.Themansteppedback/steppedonto(heplatformtotakeagoodlookatthepaintings.

16.Heleapt(ohisfeetandrushedoutofthelivingroom.

17.Hesprungfromhischairandnishedtopickupthetelephone.

18.Hejumpedupandrushedoutcfthelivingroom.

19.Shejustsattherestaringintospace.

20.Thekidssataroundacampfire.

21.Pleaseremainseateduntilyournameiscalled.

22.Heseatedhimselffortablyatthefootof(hebed.

23.Hetookhisusualseatalthefrontoftheclassroom.

24.Thatmanishurt.He'slimping.

25.Hewassodrunkthathestaggeredallthewayhome.

26.Shestumbledupstairsandintobed.

27.Shetiptoedtothebedsoasnottowakethebaby.

28.Theystrolledaroundthepark.

29.Theyenjoywanderingthroughthecountryside.

30.Hepacedupanddowntheplatform,waitingforthetrain.

31.Demonstratorsmarchedthroughthestreetsofthecity.

32.Ababycrawlsbeforehecanwalk.

33.Pauldecidedtoedgeawayfromthecrowd.

34.Thecatcreptsilentlytowardsthebird.

35.Theboysneakedinwithoutpaying.

36.1mustdashorI'llmissthetrain.

37.Shegoesjoggingeveryday.

38.Hetrippedoverthestepandfell.

39.Thegrouphikeduptothetopofthehill.

40.AsIwassittinginthepark,Iwatchedascouplesseemedtomeanderaroundhappily.

手上動作：

1.Stunned,Istoodupandgaveheranawkwardhug/huggedherinanawkwardway.

2.Speechless,shesmiledradiantlyandgatheredhersonintoherarms.

3.Theneareritgot,(hemoreshewavediheyellowblousewildly.

4.Themantookthesacks,reachedintohispocketandplacedfourcoinsinReuben'shand.

losttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestnigglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachother

meetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.She

knewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicine

tothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickin

bed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,and（heirlittleboy.Thelittleboyhisnamewas

Bernardhadinterestedherverymuch.

“Iwishyoucouldseeshesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara."Heissuchahelptohis

mother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,but1don'tseewhathecando.^^

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard."Iwishwccouldhephimtocam

money,“saidClara."Hisfamilyissufteringsomuch.''

“SodoI,“saidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.M

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,haveagreatidea!I

haveasolutionthatwecanallhelpacplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone."Itell

youwhatwccando,“saidJohn.4tYouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wccanmake

popcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

精講精析：

本題屬于“問題解決型”續(xù)寫，即材料文本設(shè)立了一個“問題”，而把“解決問題”的方法和過程作為情節(jié)構(gòu)思的

核心。

文章主旨

讀后續(xù)寫所給原文的體裁是記敘文，主要涉及五位主人公：Mrs.Meredith,John,Harry,Clara以及Bernardo

在社會經(jīng)濟(jì)蕭條的大環(huán)境下，Mrs.Meredith一直樂于助人。她的行為對她的三個孩子產(chǎn)生了積極的影響，

在他們的心中播種了愛和善良的種子。所以當(dāng)她向孩子們介紹Bernard一家的情況時，三個孩『非常渴望幫

助這一家人，并且想出了制作爆米花讓Bernard在社區(qū)售賣的好主意。

文章線索

文章暗藏了兩條線索：一條是明線，即主人公們做了什么，構(gòu)成了短文的情節(jié)發(fā)展；另一條是暗線，即主

人公們的感覺。明線中，心地善良、樂于助人的Mrs.Meredith告訴自己的三個孩子Bernard家的情況，三

個孩子決定幫助這一家人，兩家人產(chǎn)生交集，交匯點是孩子們的互動：即三個孩子積極思考，想出售賣爆

米花來幫助Bernard的辦法。暗線中，Meredith一家人樂于助人，而Bernard一家人恰好需要幫助，雙方最

終都得償所愿，情感自然是激動、感激相互交織。

續(xù)寫難點

情節(jié)比較簡單，但想象的空間很大，須設(shè)定波折。一般的處理方法是側(cè)重細(xì)節(jié)描寫，心理活動與情感描寫,

平時需要積累一定量的能表現(xiàn)人物情緒與心理的具體動作詞匯。

續(xù)寫方向

角度1：將情節(jié)的高潮放在第一段中。可著重描寫孩子們?nèi)绾蜗敕皆O(shè)法幫助Bernard弄到爆米花機(jī)、如何克

服困難學(xué)習(xí)制作爆米花等情節(jié)，通過動作、語言等描寫，來體現(xiàn)孩子們熱心、聰明、能干的特點，從而在

續(xù)寫第二段中，通過描寫B(tài)ernard的爆米花被一搶而空，孩子們非常欣慰等情節(jié)，將文章結(jié)局的主題處理為

“孩子們年紀(jì)雖小，但幫助他人時的智慧、熱情、能力等，一點也不比大人差”或“孩子們同樣可以為鄰里友

善、互幫互助作出巨大貢獻(xiàn)''等。

角度2:將情節(jié)的高潮放在第二段中?？芍孛鑼懞⒆觽?nèi)绾味贾鶥ernard銷售爆米花，通過語言、心理等描

寫，來體現(xiàn)孩子們熱心、勤勞、勇于面對挑戰(zhàn)的特點。此處可設(shè)置一些在銷售過程中“遇到困難一解決困難

一達(dá)到目的''的情節(jié)，來表現(xiàn)孩子們通過幫助他人獲得了成長，或突出彼此之間的情誼羈絆，將文章結(jié)局的

主題處理為“事在人為”“遠(yuǎn)親不如近鄰”或“與人玫瑰，手留余香”等。

另外，無論情節(jié)側(cè)重如何，續(xù)寫文章都需要有?個好的結(jié)尾。這種結(jié)尾可以是情節(jié)自然推動帶來的結(jié)尾，

比如可以用Mrs.Meredith的鼓勵或者Bernard的感謝與作為結(jié)尾，或者孩子們“相視一笑，感受到助人為

樂的喜悅，鄰里之情的溫暖'?等等作為結(jié)尾。同樣地，我們也可以采用點題或議論升華的方式結(jié)尾，比如可

以感嘆“助人為樂不分年齡，重點在于去做”或者“給予是快樂的”等等。

一、翻譯語段

她眉毛粗，眼睛大，聽到我的話，驚訝地?fù)P起眉毛。我揚起眉毛作為回應(yīng)，

揚起眉毛表示我是認(rèn)真的C她垂下眉毛，考慮著我的提議，然后又揚起眉毛，表

示同意。我們相視一笑，揚起眉毛，期待著接下來會發(fā)生什么。

二、讀后續(xù)寫

1.（2324高二下?內(nèi)蒙古興安盟?期中）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成

一篇完整的短文。

In2018,17yearoldHemeshspentalifechangingsummerwithhisgrandmotherAnne,whohadbeen

diagnosedwithAlzheimer'sdisease.Witnessingtheimpactofthediseasefirsthand,Hemeshwasawakenedtothe

seriousnessofthesituation.

Onenight,Hemeshwalkedintothekitchenonlytodiscoverthathisgrandmotherhadleftthegasstove（爐）

onaftermakingtea.ShockedbythedangerousconsequencesAlzheimer'sdiseasecouldbringabout,hecouldn't

helpbutwonderwhatmighthavehappenedifhehadn,tbeenthere.

Hemesh'sworriesincreasedasheobservedhisgrandmother'sbehavior.Shewouldwakeupintheearly

hoursof（hemorning,believingshewasonatrain,andwanderoutsideaimlessly.Thiswanderingtendencycould

potentiallyleadhertogetlostorputherselfinriskysituations.

Detemiinedtomakeadifference,HemeshengagedhimselfinextensiveresearchaboutAlzheimer'sdisease

anditssymptomatic（癥狀的）progression.Throughhisstudies,hediscoveredthatwanderingwasamonproblem

amongdementiapatients,especiallythosewithAlzheimer'sdisease.

Inspiredbyhisnewfoundknowledgeandfueledbyhisdesiretohelp,Hemeshtoldhisfamily,*ican'tjust

standbyandwatch（hishappen.IneedtodosomethingtokeepGrandmasafe.IthinkIhaveanideathatmight

helpnotjusther,butothersinsimilarsituations.,,

Withfirmdetermination,hedevelopedaninventiveanswertothewanderingdilemma,adevicehecalledthe

Guardianpanion.Itwasawearabledevice,similartoasmartwatch,specificallydesignedfbrAlzheimer'spatients.

ItintegratedadvancedGPStechnologyandapanicbuttontoassistthosewhotendedtowander,ensuringtheir

safetyandwellbeing.After（hedevicegotitsofficialapproval,Hemeshhappilywenttotryitonforhis

grandmother.

注意：

I.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

AsAmieputontheGuardianpanion,Hemeshexplainedhowi!worked.

Inthenextfewweeks,thedevicemadeadifferencetoAnneandherfamily.

2.（2324高二上?河南洛陽?期末）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落的開頭續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇

完整的短文。

HenryfinishedrollingcopiesofTheGazette,filledhisbagandtookofftodeliverthenews.

a.m.Mr.Gradya.m.whenhedeliveredthelastnewspaper.HehadputthepaperwhereMr.Gradycouldgetit

withoutstrugglingtothesidewalk.Acrossthestreet,Henry'sdeliveryhadlandedperfectlytoo.Mrs.Burke,with

twinbabies,probablylikedhavingherpaperwithineasyreach.

Henryparkedhisbikeneartheofficebuildingandboundeduptotheeditorinchiefsdoor.Mr.Trottasaid,

"We'reclosingshop,Henry.Advertisingisdown.Televisionishowpeoplegettheirnewstoday.”

'Um,no,“saidHenry.''Fvcincisomanypeopleonmyroute.It'ssad.Peoplewon'tgettheirneighborhood

newsanymore.,,

Mr.Trottanoddedandsighed."Weheldoutaslongaswecould,'*hesaid.uYouwereterrific,Henry—always

dcpcndablc.^^

Aweekafterhislastdeliveries,HenrywonderedifhiscustomersmissedTheGazetteasmuchashedid.He

thoughtofawaytofindout.Hestartedoutonhisoldroutewithanotebook.Firststop:Mr.Jonas,17Oak.Mr.

Jonassaidthathelikedreadingtheweek'shappeningsandhehadapileoficsfromoldcopiesofTheGazette.He

wonderedifanyonewouldwantthem.Henrymadeanoteinhisnotebook.

Mrs.Burkesaidsheneededababysitter.ShewasgoingtoputanadinTheGazette,but...

AsHemymademorenotes,anideastartedforminginhishead.Maybehecouldcreateanewsypageforthe

neighbors.Buthowwouldheprintit?HewenttothelibraryandexplainedeverythingtoMissGinger,thelibrarian.

“Followme,“shesaid.Secondslater,infrontofamachine,MissGingerturnedahandleandapurplcprintcdsheet

rolledout."Willmimeographed（油印的）copieswork?”sheasked.

“Perfect.”

Henryhadaplan.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

CustomerschccrcdHenry'sidea.

Henrytypedthenews,mimeographedpurplecopies,anddeliveredthefirstTreeStreetsNewsonSaturday.

3.（2324高三上?河南鄭州?階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成

一篇完整的短文。

OurscienceteacheralwaysenjoysgivingoutchallengingassignmentstoourGrade10scienceclass.Unlike

otherteacherswhohandoutpageuponpageoftextbookquestions,Mr.Husseyseemstopreferhavingthestudents

learnsciencethroughamorehandson,doityoursclfapproach.

“Today,“saidMr.Hussey,“everyonewillbemakinganicebox!'Aswesatinawe,tryingtoimaginewhatkind

ofdevicehewasreferring（o,Mr.Husseyhandedouttheprojectinstructions.Ingroupsoftwo,wewoulddesigna

storage（貯藏）devicethatwascapableofkeepingitscontentsataconstanttemperatureforacertainperiodoftime,

regardlessoftheoutsidetemperature.Thepetitionwasquitestraightforward：everycontestantwouldreceiveacube

（立方體）ofice.Theteamthathadthebiggestpieceleftthenextdaywouldwin!

Asalways,Ipartneredwithmybestfriend,Vlad.Thatafternoonwewentstraighttothelibrary.Afteran

intensediscussion,\vcagreedonthebasicideaofhavingtheicccubeinsideabox,whichwouldbeputinside

anotherbiggerbox.Betweenthetwoboxeswouldbetheheatinsulator（絕緣體）.

Thefirsttestoftheiceboxwasextremelydisappointing.Sincethiswasourfirstexperiment,webothwanted

goadresultstobuildourconfidenceBeforeIwenttobedthatnight,Icarefullypickedoutahugeblockoficefrom

ourrefrigeratorandplaceditinside:heicebox.WhenIwokeupthenextmomingandlookedintotheicebox,there

wasn'tevenabitoficeleft.Reflectingonthisfailure,weweredeterminedtofindabetterinsulatingmaterial.Then

wetriedthesameexperimentagain.Thistime,wemadeit.Therewas70percentoftheiceleft.

注意：

1.埃寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Thedayofthepetilioncameveryfast.

Thenextday,everybodyrushedtowardstheseworksofart.

（2023?山東濟(jì)寧?三模）閱讀下面對料?，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成?篇完整的短文。

“Anursinghomewouldbesafer,DadJArlyntoldherfather,Jim.

“Noway,“Jiminterrupted.Hiswifepassedawayjustayearbefore.At91,hestillwantedtoremaininthe

cottageheandhiswifehadbuilt.

Jimstartedexperiencinganearlysignof