2023屆高考英語(yǔ)閱讀寫作復(fù)習(xí)備考：再試一次講義

學(xué)院正在舉行畢業(yè)典禮，小女孩與“我”比鄰而坐，她為即將進(jìn)行畢業(yè)演講

的哥哥感到驕傲和自豪，哥哥在家對(duì)著她練習(xí)了很多次，她幾乎都能記住演講詞，

即將輪到哥哥演講了……

litwascommencementatourcollege.PeoplewerepouringintothehallasI

enteredit.Findingthechoiceseatsinthecenterofthehallalreadytaken,Ipressed

forward,lookingtotherightandleftforaseat.Finally,Ifoundoneinthevery

frontrow.

2Herealittlegirlmovedalongtomakeroomforme,lookingintomyfacewith

largegrayeyes.AgainandagainIfoundmyeyesturningtotheroselikeface,and

eachtimethegrayeyesmovedhalfsmilingtomeetmine.Obviously,shewasready

tomakefriendswithme.Andwhen,withabrightsmile,shereturnedmydropped

handkerchief,andIsaid“thankyou"，weseemedgoodfriends.

30therpersonsnowcomingintotheseats,crowdedmequiteclosetothegirl.

Herfacebeamedwithpleasureandprideasshesaid,“Mybrotherisgoingto

graduate.He'sgoingtodeliveraspeech.I'vebroughttheseflowerstosendtohim.”

4"Thatismybrother,Mshewenton,“thathandsomeonewithbrownwavyhair.

There!He'swavinghishandsnow.Youseehim,don'tyou?”“Iseehim,"I

responded."'He'saverringgood-lookingbrother.""Yes,heisbeautiful,vshesaid

withdelight./zAndhe'ssogoodandstudiessohardthathehasanhonortospeak.”

5"Hisspeechisagoodone,andhesaysitbeautifully.Hehassaidittome

manytimesthatIalmostknowitbyheart,"thegirlcontinued/'Whataprettygirl!n

Ithought,lookingdownintoherbrightproudface.

6Astheceremonywenton,mylittlefriendbecameexcitedandrestless.Her

eyesgrewbrighterandbrighter,twodeepredspotsglowedonhercheeks,"Now,

it'shisturn,“shesaid,turningtomewithafaceinwhichpride,delightand

anxietyseemedequallymixed.Sherosetoherfeetandtiptoedforabetterviewof

herbrother.Byherdeepbreathing,Iknewherheartwasthumpinginherthroat.By

theway,herbrothercameupthestepsandontothestage,Ialsoknewhewas

trembling.Hisfacewaspaleandlipswereblueaswithacold.Ifeltanxiousthathe

mighthavebeenseizedbystagefright.Thelittlegirl,too,seemedtorealizethings

werenotwellwithhim.

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閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好。

Paragraph1：

Somethinglikefearshowedinherface.

Paragraph2：

Surprisingly,shecameuptothepresident,asking,Willyouletmybrother

tryagain?

Step1語(yǔ)篇研讀

本文是一篇記敘文，要做到續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給材料內(nèi)容連貫、銜接緊密，必須

分析文本結(jié)構(gòu)、捕捉關(guān)鍵信息并挖掘文本承載的文化與價(jià)值觀。本文解讀如下：

Step2情節(jié)構(gòu)思

根據(jù)所給材料和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息，構(gòu)思續(xù)寫部分的故事情節(jié)，這一

過(guò)程分為四步。

第一步，根據(jù)原文和給出的兩個(gè)段首句領(lǐng)悟文章的主旨大意和作者的情感態(tài)

度。

通過(guò)小女孩與“我”的交流及“我”的觀察，我們可以了解到小女孩為即將

進(jìn)行畢業(yè)演講的哥哥感到驕傲和自豪。她佩服哥哥的成績(jī)，認(rèn)同哥哥的想法，看

到哥哥成功就好像自己獲得了成功一樣。她的哥哥非常優(yōu)秀，非常努力，他的演

講詞非常精彩，他準(zhǔn)備得也非常好，于是她在焦急、興奮和緊張中期待哥哥登臺(tái)

演講。終于輪到哥哥了，小女孩非常興奮和緊張，可是她發(fā)現(xiàn)哥哥有點(diǎn)不對(duì)勁，

哥哥好像特別緊張和害怕……由此，我們可以推斷本文要傳達(dá)的主題為：兄妹情

深和勇氣。

第二步，圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句"Somethinglikefearshowedinher

face.”預(yù)測(cè)故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展，我們可以根據(jù)下面的提問(wèn)進(jìn)行構(gòu)思：

(1)Didherbrotherdeliverthespeechassmoothlyasplanned?

(2)Ifhedid,whatwouldhappennext?Ifnot,whatwouldhappennext?

Clues：Describefearfromtheviewofemotions,actionsandpsychology.

第三步，根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段的內(nèi)容，注意保持

續(xù)寫第一段末尾句與續(xù)寫第二段首句之間語(yǔ)言與情節(jié)的銜接與連貫。例如，根

據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段的段首句“Surprisingly,shecameuptothepresident,asking,'Will

youletmybrothertryagain?可以推斷，在續(xù)寫第一段中應(yīng)該著重描寫小女孩

的哥哥由于緊張，表現(xiàn)不好，可能忘詞了。

第四步，圍繞續(xù)寫第二段的段首句，根據(jù)下面的提問(wèn)進(jìn)行構(gòu)思：

(1)Didthepresidentgivethemasecondtry?

(2)Ifherbrotherwasgiventhechance,whatwouldhedoandhowwould

thegirlandtheaudiencereacttoit?

(3)Howwouldthestoryend?

Step3語(yǔ)后打磨

一、語(yǔ)言特色

1.AgainandagainIfoundmyeyesturningtotheroselikeface?andeachtime

thegrayeyesmovedhalfsmilingtomeetmine.

我的眼睛一次乂一次地瞥向這玫瑰般的臉蛋，而她的灰色眼睛也總會(huì)淺笑著

迎上我的視線。

【點(diǎn)石成金】

本句中的foundmyeyesturningtotherose?Likeface為“動(dòng)詞+賓語(yǔ)+賓補(bǔ)”

結(jié)構(gòu);halfsmiling意為“淺笑”，作伴隨狀語(yǔ);mine在此處指myeyes。

2.“Now,itshisturn,“shesaid,turningtomewithafaceinwhichpride,

delightandanxietyseemedequallymixed.“現(xiàn)在輪到他了?！彼D(zhuǎn)過(guò)身對(duì)我說(shuō),臉

上似乎帶著一種自豪、高興又擔(dān)憂的表情。

【點(diǎn)石成金】

turningtomewithaface…作伴隨狀語(yǔ);inwhichpride,delightandanxiety

seemedequallymixed是限制性定語(yǔ)從句，修飾前面的先行詞aface。

二、語(yǔ)言模式

（一）情感的表達(dá)方式

1.Withabrightsmile,shereturnedmydroppedhandkerchief.

2.Herfacebeamedwithpleasureandpride.

3.“Yes,heisbeautiful,nshesaidwithdelight.

4.uWhataprettygirl!Ithought,lookingdownintoherbrightproudface.

5.Astheceremonywenton，mylittlefriendbecameexcitedandrestless.

6.Hereyesgrev/brighterandbrighter,twodeepredspotsglowedonher

cheeks.

7.“Now,itshisturn,vshesaid?turningtomewithafaceinwhichpride,

delightand

Anxietyseemedequallymixed.

8.Byherdeepbreathing,Iknewherheartwasthumpinginherthroat.

9.Hisfacewaspaleandlipswereblueaswithacold.

10.IfelldnxiuubLhdlheniighlhavebeenseizedbysldgefright.

（二）動(dòng)作的表達(dá)方式

1.PeoplewerepouringintothehallasIenteredit.

2.1pressedforward,lookingtotherightandleftforaseat.

3.Otherpersonsnowcomingintotheseats,crowdedmequiteclosetothe

girl.

4.Sherosetoherfeetandtiptoedforabetterviewofherbrother.

（三）寫作手法

1.AgainandagainIfoundmyeyesturningtotheroselikeface.（simile）

2.Hisfacewaspaleandlipswereblueaswithacold.（comparison）

3.Byherdeepbreathing,Iknewherheartwasthumpinginherthroat.Bythe

wayherbrothercameupthestepsandontothestage,Ialsoknewhewas

trembling,（parallelism）

Step4潤(rùn)色成篇

讀后續(xù)寫是模仿原文語(yǔ)言并進(jìn)行再創(chuàng)造的寫作題型，因此續(xù)寫內(nèi)容應(yīng)該在主

題意義、情節(jié)、語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格、結(jié)構(gòu)邏輯層面與原文保持一致。具體如下：

（1）主題意義：兄妹情深、勇氣。

（2）情節(jié)：續(xù)寫的情節(jié)應(yīng)與原文的情節(jié)發(fā)展吻合，我們要根據(jù)人物的性格

特點(diǎn)和故事發(fā)展的邏輯，進(jìn)行合理的續(xù)寫。

（3）語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格：在寫作手法上，原文通過(guò)情感描寫、動(dòng)作描寫、人物對(duì)話

等刻畫人物性格;在語(yǔ)法和句式上，用非謂語(yǔ)、獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)等來(lái)傳達(dá)文意;在修

辭手法上，用比喻和排比等修辭手法進(jìn)行生動(dòng)形象的描寫。因此，在進(jìn)行續(xù)寫時(shí)

應(yīng)保持以上語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格的統(tǒng)一。

（4）結(jié)構(gòu)邏輯：注意兩個(gè)續(xù)寫段落篇幅的平衡性、語(yǔ)法和銜接詞的準(zhǔn)確性、

詞匯的豐富性、語(yǔ)言的流暢性和得體性。

再試一次答案

Paragraph1：

Somethinglikefearshowedinherface.Afterwhatseemedalongtime,her

brotherbowedtotheaudience.Thenapuzzled,strugglinglookcameuponhisface,

thenahelplesslook,andthenhestoodstaringatthewaitingaudiencelikeone

personinadream."He'sforgottenit,“shesaid.Afterwards,theunhappybrother

wasalreadystaggeringinshameoffthestage.Shecameupto