專題二讀后續(xù)寫第二節(jié)指導(dǎo)篇(本欄目對(duì)應(yīng)學(xué)生用書P383)第4講

如何解決續(xù)寫文章中的矛盾沖突

高考讀后續(xù)寫選材應(yīng)體現(xiàn)積極正能量。雖然話題很廣，但是基本圍繞“Conflict&Solution”展開敘述。所涉及的沖突主要有4類

(1)人間自有真情系列(主人公或其周圍的人遇到貧困、殘疾或孤獨(dú)、失敗或自卑等困境)；(2)迷路或苦惱系列；(3)脫險(xiǎn)(擺脫危險(xiǎn)的動(dòng)物、人或環(huán)境)系列；(4)爭(zhēng)吵(誤解、背叛或傷害)系列。解決沖突主要通過4個(gè)途徑

(1)他人的：encouragement，comfort，kindness，love和help等；(2)他物：如河流，太陽等；(3)自己的：courage，effort，calmness和inspiration等；(4)自然：突出和諧，時(shí)間與成長?！镜淅痉丁块喿x下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Onefall，mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal：tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba，Canada.

Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear，Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner，ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed，andsmelledourgarlicbread.

Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp，whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.

Terrified，ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear，hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway，butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇)，Itooksomepicturesofthebear.

ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes，butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence，sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫)，thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Afewminuteslater，thebearheadedbacktoourcamp._______________

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime，hesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence，tryingtotearuswithhissharpclaws.Panickedaswewere，ElliandIscreamedatthetopofourlungs，andwavedourfistsathiminanattempttoscarehimaway.Toourdisappointment，alltheseeffortswereinvain.Thebearviolentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthepointofcollapsing！Chillywindswhippingourfaces，wecouldhearnothingbutthesoundofourheartsbeatingviolentlyinourchests.

Atthatverymoment，thehelicopterarrived.______________________

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehiclesweptawayourfearimmediately.Outofthehelicopterdescendedaropetopullusup.Thrilledyetrelieved，wegrabbedtheropeandeventuallylandedonthehelicoptersafeandsound.Whilelookingatthebearfromhighabove，Iwasamazedtospothimcrushthefenceandrushfortheinvitinggarlicbread.Atthisonce-in-a-lifetimemoment，Ireachedintomybackpackandpulledoutthecamera，photographingthatimpressivescene.

【四步成文】第一步

把握原文大意

明主旨和兩線文本大意作者和妻子待在營地準(zhǔn)備冒險(xiǎn)拍攝北極熊，結(jié)果北極熊闖入，一場(chǎng)人熊大戰(zhàn)即將展開。原文兩情線情節(jié)線：在營地等待拍攝北極熊→一頭北極熊被美味吸引意圖闖入→制造噪音無法嚇退北極熊→向營地經(jīng)理求助→噴胡椒粉噴霧劑暫時(shí)趕走北極熊情感線：excited，nervous→terrified→worried，anxious→anxious，frightened敘事意圖講述人與熊對(duì)抗成功并脫險(xiǎn)，主人公成功拍照達(dá)成旅行目的第二步

據(jù)兩首句信息

確定續(xù)寫方向

1.兩段首句定一框

(1)首句銜接段首語可描寫被噴霧刺痛眼睛的北極熊肯定被激怒了，回來后會(huì)更猛烈地襲擊圍欄，主人公需采取有效辦法避險(xiǎn)，如利用隨身物品應(yīng)對(duì)攻擊，妻子的動(dòng)作和情緒，烘托場(chǎng)面的危急。

(2)尾句可將人與熊的沖突推到最大，營造危急的場(chǎng)景，如北極熊馬上要破欄而入，呼應(yīng)第二段段首語中的“verymoment”。2.二框二首正能量

(1)首句銜接段首語“thehelicopterarrived”可描寫人物“絕處逢生的喜悅”作為第二段開頭，接著敘述利用直升機(jī)的優(yōu)勢(shì)解決問題，如利用螺旋槳發(fā)出的巨大聲響嚇走北極熊成功脫險(xiǎn)等。

(2)尾句應(yīng)呼應(yīng)原文主旨：成功拍照第三步

原續(xù)兩“情”相悅

合理添加細(xì)節(jié)

1.兩“情”相悅續(xù)寫部分情節(jié)線的走向：雙方對(duì)峙→采用新辦法避險(xiǎn)→脫離險(xiǎn)境→拍好照片

續(xù)寫部分情感線的走向：緊張→恐懼→松一口氣但仍心有余悸

2.添加細(xì)節(jié)

(1)心理描寫：夫婦二人面對(duì)北極熊一定很恐懼，但脫險(xiǎn)后，心理活動(dòng)會(huì)有變化，既感慨逃過一劫又覺得不虛此行，可通過直接或間接的方式，刻畫人物心理。

(2)環(huán)境描寫：在渲染北極熊襲擊圍欄時(shí)的危險(xiǎn)場(chǎng)景時(shí)，可描寫時(shí)間緊迫或用擬人的手法描寫周圍的事物(如風(fēng)聲，草等)，間接烘托人物內(nèi)心的恐懼。第四步

沿原語言特點(diǎn)

完美連貫表達(dá)原文利用簡單句、并列句、非謂語動(dòng)詞和主從復(fù)合句，進(jìn)行動(dòng)作描寫、情感描寫和心理描寫，續(xù)寫部分可利用適當(dāng)?shù)牟⒘芯?、非謂語動(dòng)詞和主從復(fù)合句描寫動(dòng)作和情感?！炯磿r(shí)演練】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

(2024福建漳州一模)InJune’sroomstandsabrightblueclayvase.Notaperfectorbeautifulvase，itisbrokeninseveralplaces.Ithasbeenmended，butspiderlikecracks(裂痕)remain.Ittellsastoryoftwogirls’friendship.AmyandJunemetonaplanereturningfromBangkok，wheretheirfathers，businesspartners，attendedmeetings.JunesatbehindAmy.Midway，AmyhesitantlyturnedaroundandgaveJuneabrightblueclayvase.Itwasasmallgesture，butasimplefriendshipbetweentwo4-year-oldswasestablished.

Yearsflewby.AmyandJunegrewuptogether，playedtogether，studiedtogetherandbecameeachother’sclosestfriend.

However，peoplechangeastheygrowup.Eventhemostspecialfriendshipscanbedestroyed.AsAmy’sinterestsbroadened，shestartedtoseelossandlossofJune.Thoughhurt，Junetriedtobeunderstanding.ShewasstillthereforAmywhenAmyneededsupport.Butwhenshetriedtobringupherdifficulties，Amybrushedheroffbysaying，“Later.”Junecouldn’ttakeitanymore.SoonedaysheinvitedAmytoherhouse，hopingtofiguretheirproblemout.Instead，aterriblequarrelbrokeout.“WhatamItoyou？Yourfriendorjustyourlittledog？”Junecried.Tohershock，Amywasdefensiveandscreamedback.“June，Ihateyou！”Withthesewords，AmystormedoutofJune’sroom，shuttingthedoorhardbehindher.Abluevaseontheshelfjumpedandfellontothefloor，crashingintoseveralpieces.Afriendshipoftenyearswasbroken，justlikethevase.

Oneyearpassed.ItwasJune’sfifteenthbirthday.Insteadoffeelinghappy，Juneonlyfeltdepressed.Sherememberedherfourteenthbirthday.It’dbeenagreatone，andthey’dbeensohappy.BittersweettearsfilledJune’seyes.Shecouldstillremembertheimageoffour-year-oldAmyholdingoutthebluevasetoher.Suddenly，thedoorbellrang.Junejumpedupandrushedtoopenthedoor.注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。AtthedoorseepstoodAmy，holdingasmallpackage.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Amylookednervousandhesitant，butshemanagedasmallsmile.“Happybirthday，June，”shesaidsoftly.JunewastakenabackbutquicklysteppedasidetoletAmyin.TheystoodawkwardlyforamomentbeforeAmyhandedoverthepackage.“Iknowwehaven’ttalkedinawhile，butIwantedtogiveyouthis，”Amysaid，hervoicetre