讀后續(xù)寫作文單親爸爸的哭泣1試題再現(xiàn)2試題分析3寫作思路4范文賞析目錄CONTENTS10月聯(lián)考試題再現(xiàn)01

Asasinglefather,Isucceededinkeepingmytwokidsquietthatnight.ThenIroseslowlyandcarefully,tryingtoavoidmakingeventheleastsoundwhichmightmakethemawake.Iftheywereawake,theywouldaskformoresongsandmorestories.Igotoutoftheroomquietlyandwentdownstairs.Sittingatthediningroomtable,Isatdownheavilyinmychair,awarethatitwasthefirsttimesinceIcamebackfromwork.IwassobusythatIhadnotimetomyself.Ihadcookedsomefoodandservedthem,encouragingthelittleonestoeat.Ihaddonethedisheswhilerespondingtotheirrequestsforattention.Ihadhelpedwiththeirhomeworkandtheirbath.Ihadtoldthemstoriesbeforetheywenttobed.Thesilencewasareliefforthemoment.Thensuddenlytheseallcrowdedinonme:theextremetiredness,thepressureoftheresponsibilityandtheworryaboutbills.IfeltasifIwereatthebottomofagreatseaofloneliness.Isatthere,secretlycryingnottoletthemknowit.Justthen,apairoflittlearmswentaroundmymiddleandalittlefacelookedupatme.Iwasashamedtobeseencryingbymyson.“I'msorry,Ethan.I'don'tknowyouarestillawake.Idon'tmeantocry.I'msorry.I'mjustalittlesadtonight.”“Itdoesn'tmatter.It'sokaytocry.Youaremydadandalsoanordinaryperson.”Icouldn'texpresshowhappyhemademe,andthislittleboygavemepermissiontocry.HeletmeknowthatIdidn'thavetoalwaysbestrongandthatitwaspossibletoallowmyselftoletoutmyfeelingsonceinawhile.

作為一個(gè)單身父親，那天晚上我成功地讓我的兩個(gè)孩子安靜下來。然后我慢慢地小心地站了起來，盡量避免發(fā)出可能讓他們清醒的聲音。如果他們醒著，他們會(huì)要求更多的歌曲和故事。我悄悄地走出房間，走到樓下。

坐在餐桌旁，我重重地坐在椅子上，意識(shí)到這是我下班回來后的第一次。我太忙了，沒有時(shí)間獨(dú)處。我做了一些食物，端上來，鼓勵(lì)孩子們吃。我一邊洗碗一邊回應(yīng)他們的要求。我?guī)退麄冏鲎鳂I(yè)和洗澡。我在他們睡覺前給他們講過故事。沉默讓這一刻松了一口氣。

突然間，這些都涌上了我的心頭：極度的疲憊、責(zé)任的壓力和對(duì)賬單的擔(dān)憂。我覺得自己好像置身于孤獨(dú)的大海的底部。我坐在那里，偷偷地哭著不讓他們知道。

就在這時(shí)，一雙小胳膊繞過我的中間，一張小臉抬頭看著我。

我很慚愧被兒子看到哭了?！皩?duì)不起，伊森。我不知道你還醒著。我不想哭。對(duì)不起。今晚我只是有點(diǎn)難過。”

“沒關(guān)系?？逈]關(guān)系。你是我的爸爸，也是一個(gè)普通人?！蔽覠o法表達(dá)他讓我多么高興，這個(gè)小男孩允許我哭。他讓我知道，我不必總是堅(jiān)強(qiáng)，偶爾也可以讓自己發(fā)泄一下。10月聯(lián)考試題分析02ThatnightWhenWhereAthomeWhoThesinglefather,Ethan,youngerkidMainIdeaIwascryingsecretly.AndEthanfoundmecrying.WhatMainIdeaWhyI:becauseoftheextremetiredness,thepressureoftheresponsibilityandtheworryaboutbillsEthan:worryaboutthefatherandcareaboutthefatherHowEthancomfortedthefatherwiththefolloingwords:Itdoesn'tmatter.It'sokaytocry.Youaremydadandalsoanordinaryperson.AndEthanwantedknowwhyhisfathercried.(1)讀大意，抓中心主題

一位單親爸爸忙完工作后，晚上照顧倆個(gè)孩子入睡后，坐在椅子上休息時(shí)，被疲憊感，家庭責(zé)任的壓力以及生活支出費(fèi)用侵襲，情緒上頭，悄悄哭了。大兒子沒有睡，因?yàn)閾?dān)心父親和關(guān)愛父親，下樓找父親發(fā)現(xiàn)父親哭了。最后小兒子也醒了。(2)讀人物，找續(xù)寫人物讀續(xù)寫兩段的首句可知，singlefather,Ethan和youngerkid是續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的關(guān)鍵人物(3)讀時(shí)態(tài)，選續(xù)寫時(shí)態(tài)通讀全文可知，該故事主要是用一般過去時(shí)講述的，故續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的時(shí)態(tài)也應(yīng)一致。(4)讀結(jié)構(gòu)，辨劃分方式弄清故事的結(jié)構(gòu)特點(diǎn)及表現(xiàn)形式，選擇合適的方式劃分段落，常用的有4：①以時(shí)空變化劃分(指時(shí)間和地點(diǎn))；②以人物思想感情的變化來劃分；③按記敘內(nèi)容的變化來劃分；④按描述角度的變化、事情發(fā)展的階段來劃分。

再看回文章，一開始，就表明主人公是一位單親父親，不僅要工作，還要照顧兩個(gè)年幼的孩子，忙完一切后的疲憊感，難得的安靜，抑制不住情緒哭了。而由續(xù)寫兩段首句可知，續(xù)寫第一段年紀(jì)較大的兒子也從房間下樓來到爸爸身邊，第二段是小兒子也走過來了，也從樓上臥室下來了。人物所處地點(diǎn)不斷變化，由此可知,題目是按照時(shí)空變化來劃分的。而我們?cè)跇?gòu)思續(xù)寫內(nèi)容時(shí)也應(yīng)在這兩個(gè)地點(diǎn)的基礎(chǔ)上進(jìn)行拓展。(5)讀語(yǔ)言，定風(fēng)格特色

挖掘文本語(yǔ)言表達(dá)風(fēng)格，模仿原文語(yǔ)言寫句子。使續(xù)寫部分的語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格與原文的風(fēng)格相一致，以促進(jìn)語(yǔ)言協(xié)同。（考慮到小孩子的說話特點(diǎn)，Ethan比弟弟年紀(jì)大一點(diǎn)，更懂事了）elements1.personThesinglefather,Ethan,youngerkid2.place3.time4.Whathappened5.HowtodoAthomeAtnightIwascryingsecretly.AndEthanfoundmecrying.Ethancomfortedmewithwarmwords.伊森用溫暖的話語(yǔ)安慰我。10月聯(lián)考寫作思路03ImplicationfromthetwosentencesPara1"AreyoumissingMom?”SuddenlyEthanaskedmegently.Para2Thenoutcamemyyoungerkid.HowdidIknowtheyoungerkidwouldcomeout?我怎么知道年幼的孩子會(huì)出來WhatwouldEthandoandsaytocomfortme?伊森會(huì)怎么安慰我？WhatwasmyfeelingsafterEthan’sactionsandwords?伊桑的言行讓我有何感想？Whatwasmyreply?我的回答是什么？WhatdidIunderstandandrealizefromchildren’scare?我從孩子們的關(guān)心中了解和意識(shí)到了什么？Whatwouldtheyoungerkiddoorsayafterhearingourconversation?聽到我們的談話后，年幼的孩子會(huì)做什么或說什么？thepressureoftheresponsibilityoffamily.Chiildrendothedishesandtakeashowerbythemselves.Houseworkneedstobesharedbyeveryfamilymember.孩子們自己洗碗和洗澡。家務(wù)活需要每個(gè)家庭成員分擔(dān)。theextremetirednessChildren’sloveandcompany,Shareyouremotions,孩子們的愛和陪伴，分享你的情感，loneliness,pretendtobestrongProblemIhaddonethedisheswhilerespondingtotheirrequestsforattention.Ihadhelpedwiththeirhomeworkandtheirbath.Solution2023年10月聯(lián)考范文賞析0410班讀后續(xù)寫參考范文：

"AreyoumissingMom?”SuddenlyEthanaskedmegently.

“Yes!IreallymissyourMom”.Iheldhishandsandrepliedhimwithsmile.“Butdad，youstillhaveme,Iamstrongenoughtohelpyouwiththehouseworksothatyouwon’tbetootired.”Hisinnocenteyesandhisdeterminedwordswarmedmylonelyheart.Then,Ethan

pickedupthecleanerandbegantowork,tellingmethatitwashisdutyfromnowon.Ijoinedhimsilently.

Severalminuteslater,itseemsthatsomeonehasopenedthedoor.“你想媽媽嗎？”突然伊森溫柔地問我?！笆堑模∥艺娴暮芟肽銒寢?。”我握著他的手，微笑著回答他?！暗前职?，你還有我，我足夠強(qiáng)壯，可以幫你做家務(wù)，這樣你就不會(huì)太累了?！?。他天真無邪的眼睛和堅(jiān)定的話語(yǔ)溫暖了我孤獨(dú)的心。然后，伊桑拿起清潔工具開始工作，告訴我從現(xiàn)在起這是他的職責(zé)。我默默地加入了他的行列。幾分鐘后，似乎有人打開了門。

Thenoutcamemyyoungerkid.“Don'tforgetme.”Hecameovertome,andgavemeabighug.“IcancleantheplateswithEthanafterdinner.Icantakeashowerbymyself!”

Hearinghiswords,Ifeltmyheartmelted,tearswettingmyeyes.“Iamsoproudoftwoofyou,mysweetie.Now,it’stimetogotobedagain.”Howeverhardlifeis,westillhavelove,whichcanovercomeanydifficulty!然后我的小孩子出來了?！皠e忘了我?！彼叩轿颐媲?，給了我一個(gè)大大的擁抱?！巴盹埡笪铱梢院鸵辽黄鹣幢P子。我可以自己洗澡！”聽到他的話，我的心都融化了，眼淚打濕了眼睛?！拔覟槟銈儍蓚€(gè)感到驕傲，親愛的?，F(xiàn)在，該上床睡覺了。”無論生活多么艱難，我們?nèi)匀挥袗郏瑦劭梢钥朔魏卫щy！4班讀后續(xù)寫參考范文：

"AreyoumissingMom?”SuddenlyEthanaskedmegently.Yes!Ihadnoreasontodenyit.Itookhimintomyarmsandtappedhisbackgently.“Butdad，youstillhaveme,amantosharetheresponsibilityofourfamilywithyou.”Hisinnocenteyeslitmeupandhiswordswarmedmylonelyheart.Inawhile,Ethanbrokefreefrommyembrace,pickedupthecleanerandbegantowork,tellingmethatitwashisdutyfromnowon.Ijoinedhimsilently.Severalminuteslater,anoiseofadoorbeingopenedcaughtmyattention.

“你想媽媽了嗎？”伊森突然溫柔地問我。是