2025年新高考全國一卷讀后續(xù)寫一文多寫參考范文及范文解析參考范文情節(jié)構思第一段（內(nèi)心轉變）：聚焦于“我”的內(nèi)心反思，詳細描寫“我”如何認識到自己錯誤，愧疚感轉化為“必須去道歉”的行動決心。第二段（付諸行動與和解）：描繪和解場面，包括抵達時的緊張、真誠道歉、哥哥的反應，利用Toby的動作作為“催化劑”打破僵局，以象征和解的動作結尾。參考范文一P1Irealizeditwasmewhowasatfault.Ihadbeenutterlyselfishandthoughtless.Blindedbyconcernforthebaby,Ifailedmybrothercompletely.Iignoredhisprofoundgriefandloneliness,forgettingthatTobywashislifeline,hissolecomfort,hisconstantcompanion–theonethingkeepinghimgoinginhisfragilestate.Mybrotherneededunderstandingandsupport,notrejection.Iwasdeeplyashamedofmybehavior;Ihadactedwithalackofempathy.Theweightofmyguiltpresseddownonme,consumedbyremorse.P2Withthebiscuitsmywifehadmade,apeaceoffering,Iarrivedatmybrother'sdoor.Myheartpoundedwithnervousness.Takingadeepbreath,Irangthebell.Heopenedthedoor,metwithsurprise,hisexpressionguarded.Hiseyesheldamixofhurtandsomethingelse.“Iwaswrong,terriblywrong,”Isaidquickly.“Icametoapologizesincerely.Ifailedtoseethingsfromyourperspective.IcompletelydisregardedwhatTobymeanstoyou,especiallynow.Imissyou,andI'mworriedaboutyou.”Mybrothersigheddeeply,hisexpressionsoftenedslightly,andhiseyeswelledup.“Comein,”hesaidquietly,steppingasidetoletmeenter.Hereachedoutandgavemyshoulderasqueeze.Thetensionbegantoease,finallybrokenbyToby'senthusiasticgreeting.參考范文二P1Irealizeditwasmewhowasatfault.Myownprideandmyfocusonaperfecthousehadblindedmetohispain.IhadtreatedToby,hisonlysourceofcomfort,asasimpleinconvenience.Formybrother,whohadalreadylostsomuch,myrigidrulemusthavefeltlikeanotherrejection.Awaveofshamewashedoverme.Icouldn’tletmyfoolishnesscreateapermanentdistancebetweenus.Mywifeagreed,sayingitwastimetoapologizeandmakethingsright.P2Withthebiscuitsmywifehadmade,Iarrivedatmybrother'sdoor.Takingadeepbreath,Iknocked.Whenheopenedit,hiseyesshowedsurprise,followedbyafamiliarsadness.Beforehecouldspeak,Isaid,“Iamsosorry.IwasselfishandIhurtyou.”Hestoodsilentlyforamoment,hisshouldersrelaxingslightly.Justthen,Tobypushedpasthislegs,swinginghistailandgentlypushedhisheadagainstmyhand,asifhe’dalreadyforgivenme.Wesatdown,talked,andlaughedlikeoldtimes.Bytheendofthevisit,we’dagreedtohaveanothergathering—thistime,withTobywelcomeinside,too.二、參考范文一詞塊與長難句分析（一）核心詞塊分類情感表達類愧疚感：wasconsumedbyremorse（充滿懊悔）、theweightofmyguiltpresseddown（負罪感沉重）自責：utterlyselfishandthoughtless（極其自私欠考慮）、deeplyashamedofmybehavior（對行為深感羞愧）理解認知：blindedbyconcernforthebaby（被寶寶的關心蒙蔽）、forgottenthatTobywashislifeline（忘記Toby是他的生命線）動作描寫類心理動作：heartpoundingwithnervousness（心因緊張怦怦直跳）、tookadeepbreath（深吸一口氣）肢體動作：steppingasidetoletmeenter（側身讓我進門）、gavemyshoulderasqueeze（捏了捏我的肩膀）對話與和解類道歉語句：Ifailedtoseethingsfromyourperspective（未從你角度看問題）、Makingyouleavewasheartless（讓你離開是冷酷的）情感反饋：hisexpressionsoftened（表情軟化）、eyeswelledup（眼睛濕潤）（二）長難句解析分詞短語作狀語原句：Blindedbyconcernforthebaby,Ifailedmybrothercompletely.解析：Blindedby...為過去分詞短語作原因狀語，強調(diào)“被關心蒙蔽”的狀態(tài)，邏輯主語與主句一致，提升句式復雜度。并列復合句原句：Iignoredhisprofoundgriefandloneliness,forgettingthatTobywashislifeline,hissolecomfort,hisconstantcompanion–theonethingkeepinghimgoinginhisfragilestate.解析：forgettingthat...為現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語，后接賓語從句；破折號后補充說明“theonething”，通過并列名詞短語lifeline,solecomfort,constantcompanion強化Toby的重要性。三、參考范文二詞塊與長難句分析（一）核心詞塊分類情感沖突類自我批判：myprideandfocusonaperfecthousehadblindedme（驕傲與對完美房子的執(zhí)念蒙蔽雙眼）、treatedTobyasasimpleinconvenience（將Toby視為麻煩）決心表達：couldn’tletfoolishnesscreatepermanentdistance（不能讓愚蠢造成隔閡）、timetoapologizeandmakethingsright（是時候道歉彌補）場景互動類動作細節(jié)：Tobypushedpasthislegs,swinginghistail（Toby擠過腿邊，搖尾巴）、pushedhisheadagainstmyhand（用頭蹭我的手）氛圍描寫：hiseyesshowedsurprise,followedbysadness（眼中先驚訝后悲傷）、shouldersrelaxingslightly（肩膀微微放松）和解象征類約定場景：agreedtohaveanothergathering（約定再辦聚會）、Tobywelcomeinside（Toby被允許進屋）情感升華：talkedandlaughedlikeoldtimes（像從前一樣談笑）（二）長難句解析非限制性定語從句原句：Formybrother,whohadalreadylostsomuch,myrigidrulemusthavefeltlikeanotherrejection.解析：whohadalreadylostsomuch為非限制性定語從句，補充說明哥哥的處境，使“規(guī)則傷害”的邏輯更立體，符合高考對復雜句式的考查要求。無靈主語+隱喻原句：Awaveofshamewashedoverme.解析：以“wave”（浪潮）作主語，隱喻“羞恥感如潮水般涌來”，通過無靈主語（非生命物體作主語）增強畫面感，屬于高級表達技巧。四、兩篇范文對比總結維度參考范文一參考范文二故事山重點側重內(nèi)心愧疚的細節(jié)刻畫（如“負罪感沉重”）強調(diào)行動