高二年級組寫作講座---

如何進(jìn)行有效拓展Teachingaims:1.Togetstudentstoknowsomethingaboutthescoringcriteriainwriting;2.Togetstudentstomasterthefourwaystoaddmoreeffectivedetaistotheirwriting;3.Toenablestudentstowritemore.【課前先學(xué)檢測案】漂漂亮亮明明白白1.Learnaboutthescoringcriteria2.GradethefollowingpassagePassage12018年新課標(biāo)全國卷I假定你是李華，你的新西蘭朋友Terry將去中國朋友家做客，發(fā)郵件向你詢問有關(guān)習(xí)俗。請你回復(fù)郵件。內(nèi)容包括：1.到達(dá)時間；2.合適的禮物；3.餐桌禮儀。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。2.GradethefollowingpassageDearTerry,

Howareyoudoing?Inyourlastletter,yousaidyouwillvisitaChinesefriendandyouwanttoknowsomethingabouttheChinesecustoms.Myadviceisasfollows.

First,youshouldarrive5to10minutesearlier.Second,youshouldbringsomegiftswithyou.Finally,youshouldpayattentiontotablemanners.

Hopefully,thesesuggestionswouldbehelpfulforyou.

Yours,

LiHua16points64pointsHowcanweimprovethepassage?

Fourwaystoaddmoreeffectivedetailstoyourpassage.【課中活動探究案】1、追加成分。在要點(diǎn)基礎(chǔ)上適當(dāng)增加合乎邏輯的附加成分，如定語（從句）、狀語（從句）、非謂語動詞、獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)等。其中定語從句常用______________________________________

添加背景和原因，說說目的和結(jié)果which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句a.I'mwritingtoinviteyoutocelebratetheDragonBoatFestivalwithus.b.I'mwritingtoinviteyoutocelebratetheDragonBoatFestivalwithus,whichisanimportantfestivalforChinese.非限制性定語從句，解釋說明。非謂語動詞短語作狀語，表明找兼職的目的。a.I'mwritingtoinviteyoutotakepartinthepapercuttingexhibition.b.KnowingthatyouarefondofChinesepapercutting,I'mwritingtoinviteyoutotakepartinthepapercuttingexhibition.非謂語動詞短語作狀語，表明寫信的原因。吸人眼球的定語從句whichmakesmebelievethatIcanactasatranslatorinyourrestuarantwhichisoneofthemosteffectivewaystokeepfigureandcanbringyouagoodmood用非謂語動詞(todo,doing/done)完成下列句子：3)LiMingreadsEnglishaloudeveryday____________________________________(以提高他的口語).4)_______________________(做志愿工作)，

youcanbroadenyourhorizons.彰顯水平的非謂語動詞toimprovehisspoken/oralEnglishDoingvoluntarywork2、補(bǔ)加語句。根據(jù)行文走向，適當(dāng)增加一些與主題相關(guān)的語句，既能起到前后關(guān)聯(lián)的作用，又能補(bǔ)充一些相關(guān)的信息，幫助讀者理解所寫內(nèi)容。常用句式有__________________________________________________________

。要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容具體化，舉例說明更清楚a.Youcantakeexercise.b.IfIwereyou,Iwouldtakeexcerciseregularly,suchasplayingbasketball,runningandswimming.舉例說明細(xì)化“exercise"suchas...forexample

Whatmakessb.adj.isthat...Exercise：1)_____________________________(這是可以理

解的)everygirlhopestobeslim.2)______________________________(讓我感到

高興的是)Ipassedtheimportantexam.ItisunderstandablethatWhatmakesmehappyisthat3、添加過渡。根據(jù)行文或段落需要，在句與句或段與段之間適當(dāng)增加過渡詞語，甚至過渡句,這樣可以使文章渾然一體，同時又能充實(shí)文章。常用過渡詞有:運(yùn)用必要過渡詞，文章結(jié)構(gòu)有層次firstofall,tobeginwith,inthefirstplace,firstandforemost,besides,what'smore,lastbutnotleast...連句成篇，行文流水4、不忘收尾。書信中“適當(dāng)?shù)慕Y(jié)尾”也是必須的，它不僅能呼應(yīng)開頭，深化主題，還能表達(dá)祝愿，闡述愿望。你會用的結(jié)尾有：Ihavetheconfidencethatyouwillhaveagoodtime.Iwishyouractivitywillbesuccessful.Ihopeyouwillmakegreaterprogress.文章收尾談感受，套套近乎也無妨4月考作文結(jié)尾：期望+祝愿Ihopemysuggestionswillbeofhelptoyouandwishyouractivitywillbesuccessful.回歸主題，表達(dá)祝愿Fourwaystoaddmoredetailstoyourpassage1、追加成分

添加背景和原因，說說目的和結(jié)果

2、補(bǔ)加語句

要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容具體化，舉例說明更清楚3、添加過渡運(yùn)用必要過渡詞，文章結(jié)構(gòu)有層次4、不忘收尾文章收尾談感受，套套近乎也無妨Nomatterwhichwayyouuse,makesurethatthedetailsareeffeictive.Payattentionto"effective"noteffective點(diǎn)評：不管外教來不來，比賽都將如期舉行。Payattentionto"effective"2:介紹個人優(yōu)勢和能做的事情（李華在倫敦申請做中國畫展的志愿者）Icanspeak

fluentEnglishandgetalongwellwithothers.Myhobbyisplayingbasketball

andIreallylikedrawing.noteffective點(diǎn)評：打籃球與畫畫無關(guān)。IcanspeakfluentEnglishandgetalongwellwithothers.IamlearningdrawinginanartschoolinLondonandIreallylikedrawing.Payattentionto"effective"3：介紹端午節(jié)活動安排（邀請交換生參加活動）DuringtheDragonBoatFestival,wewillwatchthedragonboatraceandtastesomedelicious"zongzi",whichisakindoffoodto

memorizeanancientpoetnamedQuYuan.effective點(diǎn)評：適當(dāng)擴(kuò)展文化知識，輸出中國文化。小牛試刀Usethefourwaystoimprovethepassage.DearTerry,Howareyoudoing?Inyourlastletter,yousaidyouwillvisitaChinesefriendandyouwanttoknowsomethingabouttheChinesecustoms.Myadviceisasfollows.First,youshouldarrive5to10minutesearlier.Second,youshouldbringsomegiftswithyou.Finally,youshouldpayattentiontotablemanners.

Hopefully,thesesuggestionswouldbehelpfulforyou.Yours,LiHua16pointsImprovethefirstparagraphtogether.DearTerry,Howareyoudoing?KnowingthatyouwillvisitaChinesefriendandyouwanttoknowsomethingabouttheChinesecustoms,I'dliketoofferyousomesuggestions.AsampleversionDearTerry,

Howareyoudoing?_____________________________________________________________________________(聽說你對于如何到中國朋友家做客感到很困惑；非謂語),Iamwritingtoputforwardsomeadvice.

Firstandforemost,______________(我想建議你)youarrive5to10minutes

earlier,________________________________

____________(這在中國文化里很常見；非限).Inaddition,______________(如果我是你),IwouldLearningthatyouare

confusedabouthowtobeaguestinyour

Chinesefriend’shomeI’dliketosuggestculturewhichisverycommoninChineseifIwereyou1、追加成分2、補(bǔ)加語句1、追加成分2、補(bǔ)加語句bringsomeappropriategiftswithme,___________________________________________________(比如水果或我國家的紀(jì)念品).___________________________________(重要的是)youshouldpayattentiontotablemanners.________________________________________________________________________________________________

(例如，當(dāng)你吃飯的時候，你要避免發(fā)出聲音).suchassomefruitsorsouvenirsfrommyowncountryWhat'sequallyimportantisthatForexample,whenyouare