讀后續(xù)寫經(jīng)典續(xù)寫案例紅樓夢曹雪芹高鶚爭論點：契合度高低文學家：情節(jié)發(fā)展是否和原八十回一致語言學家：用詞用句是否和原八十回一致融洽度原敘事文本續(xù)寫高效度結(jié)尾讀猜兩個要弄明白的問題：原文有什么用？續(xù)寫要寫什么？原文理解續(xù)寫文模仿素材素材情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾故事框架語言設(shè)定潛伏信息樣題情節(jié)和語言特點分析情節(jié)基調(diào)的鋪設(shè)：“向心性”核心矛盾的預設(shè)：“發(fā)散性”故事框架的搭建：“順延性”隱含語言的定位：“一致性”情節(jié)基調(diào)“AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday”。funny:“趣”Afunnythingcauseamusement,laughter,etc.

(有趣的，可笑的)向心性MoneyorOtherthings核心矛盾“情節(jié)核”theyoungmanoranothermanThiefNotthief矛盾身份

矛盾中心

關(guān)鍵人物發(fā)散性

箱子里所屬人Youngman身份可能情節(jié)發(fā)展1Moneytheyoungmanthief碰巧抓住搶劫犯（即結(jié)尾1）2notthief碰巧把剛從銀行取錢趕路的人當劫犯，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯消息3anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人錢的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷4notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運裝滿錢的行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會5Otherthingstheyoungmanthief錯把普通小偷當劫犯，最后幫助抓到該小偷6notthief錯把路人當劫犯（即結(jié)尾2）7anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人東西的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷8notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運普通行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會故事發(fā)展時間：onArthur’swayhome地點：alongtheParkAvenueneartheFirstnationalBank背景：alongloudnoiseofanalarmfromthebankayoungmanArthurRunafterStop,stop!…?TothePS順延性故事框架Paragraph1:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”_______________________________________________Paragraph2:ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur..._______________________________________________順延故事發(fā)展創(chuàng)意故事結(jié)尾順延

逆轉(zhuǎn)語言定位記敘類故事文文體敘事文本敘事人稱敘事時態(tài)敘事方式第一、二、三人稱旁白/對白口語/書面語選詞用詞句式選擇一致性…語言定位記敘類故事文敘事人稱：比如，he,she,it,Afunnything,theyoungman,ParkAvenue,Arthur等敘事時態(tài)：

用過去式或者與過去式相關(guān)的時態(tài)（直接引語除外）比如wasontheway,walked,wassurprised,startedtorun等敘事方式：Notroubleatall,whathappenedGotothepolicestation,Stopstop,Helphelp。“第三人”的身份講述（第三人稱作為主語）（直接引語除外）轉(zhuǎn)述過去某個時刻所發(fā)生的事旁白+對白（間接引語+直接引語）[主次分明]語言定位記敘類故事文敘事文本定位：一組數(shù)據(jù)：結(jié)尾1（153）

advorprep(behind,suddenly,until,obviously,already,later),verb(might,realize,continue,jump,racelikethewind,learn,open,expected,describe,caught),nounornounphrase(alargesumofmoney,information)結(jié)尾2（158）behind,directlyoutsidebehave,realize,drive,follow,describe,voice,innocent,embarrassed,faster語言平實易懂的小故事小詞、常用詞以及常見短語12個新詞(組)18個新詞(組)funnyamusing，intriguing，divertingVS.語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：行為動作：“主語+謂語動詞+賓語”

材料Everyonehadadifferentanswer

結(jié)尾Thepolicecaughttherobber事物狀態(tài)：“主語+系動詞+表語”

材料Arthurwassurprised,ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore

結(jié)尾Themanshoutingbehindisthebankthief,Themanwasinnocent“清楚明晰地講故事”強調(diào)故事人物的行為和思想變化語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：一組數(shù)據(jù)：材料：12個含and的并列句式，結(jié)尾1(153字):6個并列句式；結(jié)尾2(158字):7個并列句式主從復合句(以時間狀語從句為主)材料：whenhewasonthewayto…,Ashewalkedalong…,Afterplacingitonthe…,JustasArthurpickedup…結(jié)尾：Ashewasrunning…,Themomenthegoto…,JustasArthurwasdescribing…時間提示詞如atthemoment,then,later等。主從復合句少，并列復合句多故事一環(huán)承接一環(huán)的時間發(fā)展和動作的延續(xù)讀后續(xù)寫策略情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾框架完整順延逆轉(zhuǎn)語言文體遣詞用句情節(jié)走向合情合理的創(chuàng)意不著痕跡情節(jié)內(nèi)容框架結(jié)構(gòu)語篇段落1、挖掘情節(jié)基調(diào)，廓清核心矛盾，創(chuàng)造合情合理的創(chuàng)意故事外延。2、理清敘事角度，把握順延逆轉(zhuǎn)，構(gòu)建張弛有度的完整情節(jié)框架。3、定位語言文體，模仿遣詞用句，續(xù)寫不著痕跡的語用敘事文本。讀后續(xù)寫策略“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合單元課文內(nèi)容M1U3TravelJournal–JourneydowntheMekongM2U4WildlifeProtection–HowDaisyLearnedtoHelpWildlifeM3U2HealthyEating–ComeandEatHereM3U5Canada“TheTrueNorth”–ATriponthe“TrueNorth”M4U4BodyLanguage–Communication,NoProblem?M5U3LifeintheFuture–FirstImpressionsM5U4MakingtheNews–MyFirstWorkAssignment

“Unforgettable”,SaysNewJournalistM7U2Robot–SatisfactionGuaranteed虛擬故事“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合1. M3U2Comeandeathere2. M7U2SatisfactionGuaranteed思維+語言虛構(gòu)+趣味“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合ComeandeathereWP+hisemptyrestaurantVisittoYH’s+gottheproblemDoresearchNewsignanddiscountCompetitionwasonWhatifwithnoresearchornofindings?WhatifWPjustcopyYH’sidea?一個可能需要增加的閱讀環(huán)節(jié)信息梳理FriendlycooperationHostilecompetitionPeacefulcoexistence+思辨發(fā)散alarmed,disturbing,trust“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合SatisfactionGuaranteed信息整理+思辨發(fā)散ClaireTonyGladysaccompanied,protected,helpenvyAsenseoffailureWhencomparedwithCurtainsopened+ApartyChangeheropinionAsweetvictoryAsenseoflossWhatif…?CurtainsclosedStillvictory?Loss?Tony’sReport?兩篇文本（節(jié)選）WangPengsatinhisemptyrestaurantfeelingveryfrustrated.Ithadbeenaverystrangemorning.Usuallyhegotupearlyandpreparedhismenuofbarbecuedmuttonkebabs,roastpork,stir-fliedvegetablesandfriedrice.Thenbylunchtimetheywouldallbesold.Bynowhisrestaurantoughttobefullofpeople.Butnottoday!Whywasthat?Whatcouldhavehappened?Clairedidn’twanttherobotinherhouse,especiallyasherhusbandwouldbeabsentforthreeweeks,butLarrypersuadeherorallowhertobeharmed.Itwouldbeabonus.However,whenshefirstsawtherobot,shefeltalarmed.HisnamewasTonyandheseemedmorelikeahumanthanamachine.Hewastallandhandsomewithsmoothhairandadeepvoicealthoughhisfacialexpressionneverchanged.兩個語篇的文本比較：SatisfactionGuaranteedComeandeathere旁白+對白（旁白為主）書面語+口語簡單句式，小詞常規(guī)詞行為變化全旁白的形式全書面語形式復合句式，較高級詞匯情緒（心理）表達敘事人稱：第三人稱；

敘事時態(tài)：過去式敘事順序：以時間發(fā)展

結(jié)尾方式：出人意料SatisfactionGuaranteedComeandeathereAweeklater,WangPeng’srestaurantwasagainquitefullandhefelthappier.HesmiledashewelcomethecustomerswarmlyatthedoorbutthesmilelefthisfacewhenhesawYongHuiwalkingin.Shedidn’tlookhappybutglareathim.“MayIaskwhatyouweredoinginmyrestauranttheotherday?IthoughtyouwerejustanewcustomerandnowIknowthatyouonlycame