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JayceCrowderbegannoticingwhenhewasinkindergartenthathelookeddifferentfromhis

classmates.Theyhadtwohands.Hehadone."Itstartedwhenoneboyteasedsayshis

mother,CortneyLewis.Jayce'sbubblyenthusiasmsouredtosunenness（活潑的熱情變成了悶

悶不樂(lè)）.He'dreturntotheirDesMoines,Iowahomewithquestions:WhyamIdifferent?Why

me?Why?”HeactuallytoldushewasmadatGodformakinghimthatway,“hismother

says."Thatwasahugedaggertotheheart."（像一把匕首刺痛我的心）Lewisadmitsshedidn't

knowwhattodoatthatpoint.HowcouldsheprovideanswerstoherSOL'Squestionswhenshe

hadneverfoundthoseanswersherself?Afewweekslater,Lewiscamehomefromherjobasan

orthodonticassistantandturnedontheTVtoanewsstoryaboutasix-foot-threeeighthgrader

fromWashington,Iowa.TrashaunWillis,then14,hadbecomeanInternetsensationafterposting

videosofhisslamdunks,and,likeJayce,hewasmissingmostofhisleftarm.LewiscalledJayce

in.Hewasriveted（被吸引）,watchingdunkaftermonstrousdunk.（他全神貫注地看著一

個(gè)又一個(gè)可怕的扣籃。）Atthetime,itseemedthatwatchingTrashaunwouldsimplybean

inspiringmomentforJayce-he'dseeathrivingrolemodelwithaseeminglysimilar

similardefect.Andhaditstayedjustthat,Lewiswouldhavebeenhappy.Butlittledidsheknow

thatafamilyfriendhadalreadyreachedouttotheDesMoinesRegister,askingthenewspaperto

helpsetupameetingwithTrashauntobuildJayce'sconfidence.

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TheboysmetatWashingtonMiddleSchoolonaSaturdayafternoona

coupleofmonthslater.

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Sincethatmeeting,Lewishasseenapronounced/noticeabledifferencein

herson.

語(yǔ)篇分析

故事梗概

這篇文章講述了Jayce,一個(gè)因天生缺失左臂而感到自卑的男孩，在遇到同樣身有殘

疾但充滿自信的籃球少年Trashaun后，受其鼓勵(lì)和指導(dǎo)，不僅學(xué)會(huì)了接納自己，還逐漸找

回了自信。這是一則關(guān)于自我接納、努力和榜樣力量的成長(zhǎng)故事。

人物分析

JayceCrowder

主人公，一個(gè)因天生缺失左臂而感到困惑和低落的男孩。經(jīng)歷了從自我懷疑到被鼓勵(lì)和找

到榜樣的轉(zhuǎn)變。

CortneyLewis

Jayce的母親，深切關(guān)心兒子的情感與成長(zhǎng)，但面對(duì)兒子的問(wèn)題感到無(wú)助，后來(lái)通過(guò)行動(dòng)

幫助兒子找到解決方法。

TrashaunWillis

Jayce的榜樣，一個(gè)因天生殘疾仍能取得卓越成就的籃球少年，激勵(lì)了Jayce接受自己并

重拾自信。

情節(jié)分析

?Jayce在幼兒園意識(shí)到自己和他人的不同，并因此感到沮喪與憤怒。

?母親無(wú)意中看到關(guān)于Trashaun的新聞，并讓Jayce看了相關(guān)視頻，點(diǎn)燃了Jayce的興趣和

希望。

?一位家庭朋友促成了Jayce與Trashaun的會(huì)面，幫助Jayce建立了自信。

情緒發(fā)展

前期：Jayce感到失落、憤怒、不安，母親同樣感到無(wú)助。

中期：母親試圖為Jayce找到一個(gè)榜樣，情緒逐漸轉(zhuǎn)為希望。

后期：Jayce通過(guò)榜樣的激勵(lì)變得積極樂(lè)觀，情緒達(dá)到了愉悅與滿足的高潮。

主題分析

?接受自我：通過(guò)榜樣的影響，學(xué)會(huì)欣賞和接受自己的獨(dú)特之處。

?鼓勵(lì)與支持：他人的關(guān)愛(ài)和榜樣的力量可以幫助我們戰(zhàn)勝內(nèi)心的掙扎。

?克服自卑：無(wú)論先天條件如何，每個(gè)人都可以通過(guò)努力超越自我。

續(xù)寫方向

1.第一段描寫meeting的情節(jié)

描述在此次會(huì)面的情景，包括人物的情緒動(dòng)作表情等，其次是Trashaun如何幫助

Jayce找到whyamIdifferent的答案，也正好呼應(yīng)前文母親的疑問(wèn)HOWcouldsheprovide

answerstoherson，squestionswhenshehadneverfoundthoseanswersherself;以

及Tashaun如何鼓勵(lì)Jayce直面殘疾，克服自卑，收獲自信。

2.詳細(xì)描述這次meeting帶來(lái)的影響

Jayce產(chǎn)生了什么樣的變化，可以是情緒上的，與媽媽相處上的，對(duì)自己先天缺陷認(rèn)知上

的，受到Trashaun影響收獲的興趣愛(ài)好，面對(duì)同學(xué)的嘲笑等等。最后可以回扣文章的主題

Trashaunhelpedhimseethattheirshareddifferenceisnohandicapto

succcess.He'snotalone,andhehassomeonetolookuptowho'sjust

likehim.

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TheboysmetatWashingtonMiddleSchoolonaSaturdayafternoonacoupleof

monthslater.Thedaywasnotspentwallowinginself-pity-itwasdedicatedto

fun.Thetwoboyswereinstantlybonded.Theyrodebikesaroundtheschool's

hallways,tookphotos,playedhide-and-seek,andshotbaskets.TrashauntaughtJayce

tofinishwithahighreleaseandputsomebackspinontheball.Atonepoint,Trashaun

didgetseriouswithJayce.HetalkedabouttheirJeftarms-orlackthereof.Hetold

JaycehewasperfectthewayGodmadehim.Hesaidnottoletanyonedraghim

downandthatwordsdon'tneedtoshakehisconfidence.

Sincethatmeeting,Lewishasseenanoticeabledifferenceinherson.Jayeehas

becomemoreconfident,outgoing,anddeterminedthaneverbefore.Heisnolonger

ashamedofhisdifferencesandinsteadembracesthem,usingthemasasourceof

strengthandinspiration.Herecentlyevenhasstartedwrestlingandlovesit.

Lewiswatcheswithprideandamazementashersoncontinuestogrowand

thrive.SheknowsthatthechanceencounterwithTrashaunhaschangedhislife

forever,andisgratefulforthekindnessofthefamilyfriendwhohasmadeitall

possible.

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TheboysmetatWashingtonMiddleSchoolonaSaturdayafternoonacoupleof

monthslater.AtthesightofTrashaun——tall,confident,andsmiling——Jaycehesitated,

unsureofwhattosay.Sensinghisunease,Trashaungreetedhimwithawarm

smileandafistbump,puttinghimatease.Thetwowereinstantly

bonded,embracingtheirshareddifference,orratheruniqueness.Trashaunshared

hisjourneyofovercomingchallengessimilartothoseJaycewasexperiencing."I

knowhowitfeelstowonder,"WhyamIdifferent?9Butletmetellyouit'snotabout

whatwedon'thavebuthowweusewhatwe'vego/"Thesewordsresonateddeeply

withJayce.Forhours,theytalked,laughed,andplayedbasketballtogether.Bytheend

oftheafternoon,Jaycewaslaughingandsmiling,hisconfidencealreadybeginning

tobloom.(115words)

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Sincethatmeeting,Lewishasseenapronounceddifferenceinherson.Jayce

hasregainedhisbubblyenthusiasm.Nolongerdoeshereturnhomesullen,but

speaksofhisdreamswithnewfoundenthusiasmandconfidence.Nordoesheshy

awaywhenaskedabouthisarm;instead,hetalksabouthisfriendTrashaunandthe

amazingthingshecando.He'stakenupbasketballwithrenewedpassion,practicing

everydayandshowingoffhisimprovingskillswithpride.t6IfTrashauncandoit,so

canI,“heoftensays,hisfaceglowing/radiatingwithdetermination.ForLewis,the

changeisnothingshortofmiraculous.Thatmeetingchangedeverything-Jayceno

longerquestionswhyheisdifferent-instead,heembracesit,knowingthathis

uniquenessmakeshimcapableofextraordinarythings.(115words)

一些找回自信的語(yǔ)料積累

Onceatimidindividualwhoavoidedeyecontactandmumbleduncertainly,Sarah

transformedafterregainingherconfidence.Now,hervoiceissteadyandresonant,her

wordsbrimmingwithassurance.Shestandstall,herbackstraightandhershouldersrelaxed,

asifshecarriestheworldwithease.Herbrightsmileandsparklingeyesexudewarmth,

drawingpeopletowardher.Eachstepshetakesispurposeful,andhergesturesareopen,

radiatingtrustandoptimism.薩拉曾經(jīng)是一個(gè)膽小的人，避免目光接觸，含糊不清，在

恢復(fù)信心后，她改變了。現(xiàn)在，她的聲音穩(wěn)定而洪亮，她的話語(yǔ)充滿了自信。她站得

高高的，背挺直，肩膀放松，好像輕松地扛起了整個(gè)世界。她燦爛的笑容和閃閃發(fā)光

的眼睛散發(fā)著溫暖，吸引著人們。她邁出的每一步都是有目的的，她的姿態(tài)是開(kāi)放的，

散發(fā)著信任和樂(lè)觀。

Jayce'stransformationwasevidentineveryaspectofhisdemeanor.His

posture,onceslouchedandhesitant,becameuprightandassured.Hewalked

throughtheschoolhallwayswithabounceinhisstep,hisheadheldhigh,and

asmilethatseemedtoradiatewarmthandpositivity.Hiseyes,whichhadonce

dartedaroundnervouslytoavoidmakingcontact,nowsparkledwithdetermination

andenthusiasm.

Inconversations,Jayce'stonewaslivelyandupbeat.Hebegantocrackjokes

withhisclassmates,oftenmakinglightof