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細(xì)節(jié)描寫SkillsofContinuationWriting---Learn“toshow”ratherthan“totell”

21.Tellthedifferencebetweentellingandshowing2.Masteradvancedwords,phrasesandfivesentencepatterns3.Write“toshow”sentencestodescribemoodsandactions.Learningobjectivesshowthereaderseverything,tellthemnothing

ErnestHemingway

“Show！Don'ttell”Writingskill必殺技ToShowToTellVS

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Toshow:towritewithmoresensory(感官的)details,allowingyourreaderstohear,see,taste,touchandsmellthesamethingsyourcharactersareexperiencing.

Howdidshefeel？

Shefelthappy/excited.abstract(抽象的）Totell

1.Hereyeswere__________(v.閃耀，發(fā)光)likediamonds.

Toshow

2.Hereyes____________________（v.閃亮，閃爍)withpleasure.3.She_________(v.咧著嘴笑，露齒而笑）fromeartoear.facegrinnedtwinkled/sparkled/shonesparkling/twinkling/shining在空格處填入恰當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~或短語(yǔ)表達(dá)喜悅。shinegrinsparkletwinklejumpupanddownjumptoone’sfeetclapgiggle82.Sohappywasshethatshe____________（跳起來）1.She_______(herhands（鼓掌）and_______________withjoy.（跳上跳下，欣喜若狂）Toshow

bodyclappedjumpedupanddownjumpedtoherfeet9ToshowShe_________(咯咯）withexcitement.voice寫作建議：心理描寫要抓住眼、嘴、手、腳等身體部位具體描述，會(huì)更加傳神！giggled

Totell:Hewasangry.Toshow:1.Hisface________（v.臉色陰沉下來）withanger.2.He__________me（怒視）withburningeyesandclenchedteeth.3.Hefeltsoangrythathe_______________theroom,___________(v-ing形式）thedoorbehindhim.(沖出教室，狠狠摔門）4.___________（v-ing形式）(怒火中燒）,he__________———————(緊握拳頭）。5.He_______（growl

咆哮）atmethroughclenchedteeth.在空格處填入恰當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~或短語(yǔ)表達(dá)憤怒。growlcloudglareatslamstormoutofclenchone'sfistsboilingwithrage

1.Hisface________（v.臉色陰沉下來）withanger.

2.He__________me（怒視）withburningeyesandclenchedteeth.3.Hefeltsoangrythathe_______________theroom,____________(v-ing形式）thedoorbehindhim.(沖出教室，狠狠摔門）4._______________（v-ing形式怒火中燒）,he______________(緊握拳頭）5.He_______（growl咆哮）atmethroughclenchedteeth.clouded

glaredat

stormedoutof

clenchedhisfists

growledfacebodyvoiceslamming

Boilingwithrage12Itisrainy.在空格處填入恰當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~或短語(yǔ)。twittergurglerustleflashingcrashingpouring

Icouldhearthe__________(嘰嘰喳喳的叫聲）ofbirds,the________（沙沙聲）ofleavesandthe____________（潺潺聲)ofthecreek.

twitterrustle

gurgleHappiness13Itisrainy.在空格處填入恰當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~或短語(yǔ)表達(dá)情緒。twittergurglerustleflashingcrashingpouring

Thethunderwas________（V.使發(fā)出巨響）,lightningwas_______(V.閃光、閃耀）intheskyandtherainwas_________(V.傾瀉）crashingAngerflashing

pouring14Itisrainy.FlowerThunderRainBird寫作建議：

通過風(fēng)雨、河流、陽(yáng)光等自然景象具體描述，來烘托人物的心情，會(huì)更加生動(dòng)！15Itisrainy.Inmother’sarmsFellasleepHadadeepsleepSleptsoundlyHeadontheshoulderTomHefeltverytired.totell:toshow:16Itisrainy.1.Tom

_____（get)tired,____（lie)inmother’sarmsand____（fall)asleep.gotlayfellliev.撒謊lied,lied

躺著lay,lain2.主句+with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)3.“So+adj./adv.+be動(dòng)詞or助動(dòng)詞+主語(yǔ)+that...”4.非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞“-ing/-ed/todo”做狀語(yǔ)5.雙形容詞作狀語(yǔ)1.三連動(dòng)（verb1+verb2+and+verb3)

Tom感到很累（exhausted),就在媽媽懷里睡著了，小腦袋靠在媽媽的肩膀上。主句+“with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)”補(bǔ)全句子2.Tomfeltexhaustedand

sleptinmother’sarms，_________________________________withhisheadonhershoulder.2.主句+with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)18Itisrainy.Tomfeltsoexhaustedthathelayinmother’sarms,sleepingsoundly.（改為so+adj/adv放在句首，倒裝句）3._____________________________helayinmother’sarms,sleepingsoundly.SoexhausteddidTomfeelthat3“So+adj./adv.+be動(dòng)詞or助動(dòng)詞+主語(yǔ)+that...”19Itisrainy.4.__________________________(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞作狀語(yǔ)“-ing/-ed/todo”)(感到又餓又累),Tomlayinmother’sarmsandfellasleep.Feeling

hungryand

exhausted4.非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞“-ing/-ed/todo”做狀語(yǔ)20Itisrainy.5.___________________(又餓又累）Tomthrewhimselfintomother’sarmsandfellintoadeepsleepinafewseconds.雙形容詞作狀語(yǔ)safeandsound(平安無事）,coldandwet（又冷又濕）delightedandshocked（既高興又震驚）Hungryand

exhausted,5.雙形容詞作狀語(yǔ)moodcharacterhimselfoutsideenvironmentvoiceflowers,birds,creek,thunderlightning,wind,rain,sun,air...facebodyShowing.Nottelling!Summary

eyesmouthhandsfeettonesparkle,twinkle,shinegrinclapjumpupanddownjumptoone'sfeetgiggleHappinessfacebodyvoiceSummary

faceeyeshandsfeettonecloudglareatslam/clenchone'sfistsstormoutofgrowlAngerfacebodyvoiceSummary24Itisrainy.Summary1.三連動(dòng)

（verb1+verb2+and+verb3)2.主句+with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)3“So+adj./adv.+be動(dòng)詞or助動(dòng)詞+主語(yǔ)+that...”4.非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞“-ing/-ed/todo”做狀語(yǔ)5.雙形容詞作狀語(yǔ)25Itisrainy.

NoDetails,NoStory!

Noshows,NoArt!HomewokScene1:1.WhenheheardthatUkraine(烏克蘭）wasadmittedtotheEuropeanUnion,Scene2:Whenheheardthattheofficermadeamistake,watchavideoclipfrom“ServantofthePeople”(人民公仆）whichZelenskiy(澤連斯基）,theUkrainianPresidentstarredin.Payattentiontothechangesofhismoods,actionsandthefountain.Trytousethewords,phrasesandfiveadvancedsentencepatternsthatwehavelearned.Createadetailedandvividdescriptionofthefollowingscenes.

27Itisrainy."Withoutgrammarverylittlecanbeconveyed;Withoutvocabularynothingcanbeconveyed."-----DavidWilkins

Buildupyourvocabulary興奮：悲傷：憤怒：焦慮：dancewithjoy;spring(sprang-sprung)up/risefrom;jumptoone’sfeet;one'seyeswereshining/sparklinglike...具有畫面感的心理描寫：griefcame