年高考英語寫作讀后續(xù)寫真題分析及范文一．續(xù)寫原文ImetGunteron

acold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflyViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeen

delayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueuestillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface."Wemadeit,"hesaid.JustthenIrealizedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.Thereattheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:"Outoforder.Sorry."

注意:1.

續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Para1:IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Para2:Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.

二、文本分析故事發(fā)生在一個(gè)濕冷的九月晚上，我原計(jì)劃從維也納乘飛機(jī)，然后再乘巴士前往布拉格參加會(huì)議?？墒牵捎诖箫L(fēng)暴，飛機(jī)晚點(diǎn)了一小時(shí)半，使得我剩30分鐘去趕最后一班前往布拉格的巴士。在機(jī)場(chǎng)，我急忙跳上了第一輛出租車，遇到了司機(jī)Gunter。Gunter不熟悉巴士站的位置，但在通過電話求助朋友后，他成功將主角及時(shí)送到了巴士站。然而，我發(fā)現(xiàn)自己沒有現(xiàn)金，而且銀行卡在出租車上的刷卡機(jī)上無法使用。在Gunter的指引下，我跑到取款機(jī)處，卻發(fā)現(xiàn)機(jī)器故障。無奈之下，我打算告訴Gunter這個(gè)事情。三、讀原文

理解基本要素和2情線1)

Characters:IandGunter(ataxitdriver)2)

When:

acoldandweteveninginSeptember3)

Where:inthebusstation4)

What:

我發(fā)現(xiàn)機(jī)器故障，沒有現(xiàn)金，只能告訴司機(jī)實(shí)情并向司機(jī)承諾會(huì)在四天后歸還錢。想不到司機(jī)答應(yīng)了，我們倆最后赴約。5)

2情線：情節(jié)線：趕去車站——沒有現(xiàn)金——機(jī)器出故障——向司機(jī)說實(shí)情——四天后，赴約還錢情感線：worried——embarrassed——relieved——moved——grateful四、思續(xù)寫情節(jié)銜接1：根據(jù)句1

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.

可知，接下來可寫：告訴實(shí)情，取不出錢——我的情緒——司機(jī)如何回復(fù)——我的反應(yīng)——我作何回應(yīng)銜接2：根據(jù)句2

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.

可知，在第一段要講到司機(jī)不收取我的費(fèi)用，但我承諾會(huì)還錢給他。我們相約四天后見面。銜接3：開頭銜接句2的

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.

可知，四天后我們見面?？衫m(xù)情節(jié)為：見面場(chǎng)景（天氣？?jī)扇饲榫w？）——作者還錢（動(dòng)作？）——表達(dá)感激——增強(qiáng)彼此認(rèn)識(shí)（多了個(gè)朋友？）——感悟五、思伏筆巧協(xié)同原文伏筆情節(jié)協(xié)同Para.2

soIexplainedagain

moreslowly

第一段：可協(xié)同寫我著急地又難為情地向他解釋機(jī)器出故障了。Para.4

Afeelingofhelplessnesswashedoverme

第一段：可協(xié)同寫我講完實(shí)情后，一股不安且尷尬的情緒席卷而來。還可以用在司機(jī)同意四天后還錢，我感到一股暖意和感激涌上來。Para.1Thankfully,therewasa

longqueuestill

第一段：可協(xié)同寫我很感激司機(jī)的慷慨Para.1

Iranlikecrazy

throughtheairport

第二段：可協(xié)同寫我瘋狂地表達(dá)對(duì)他的感謝和理解Para.1

ImetGunteron

a

cold,wetand

unforgettable

eveninginSeptember第二段：可協(xié)同寫四天后我們見面那天天氣比較溫暖、沒那么寒冷的早上。Para.1

ThemomentIgotoff

theplane

第二段：可協(xié)同寫我一見到他，就熱情跟他打招呼，并表示感謝主題的協(xié)同：

協(xié)同原語言風(fēng)格多個(gè)形容詞描述凸顯環(huán)境：原文第一句ImetGunteron

acold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.

在續(xù)寫兩段也可以參照這樣的方式描述。如作者描述機(jī)器取不出錢時(shí)的情緒，可用多個(gè)形容詞并列增強(qiáng)效果，如anxious,nervousandembarrassed。也可以描述第二次見面時(shí)的場(chǎng)景，a

warmer,sunnyand

refreshingmorning一個(gè)溫暖，陽光而又令人神清氣爽的早晨，這樣與原文形成對(duì)比。副詞凸顯人物情緒：原文用如slowly,thankfully等突出人物情緒。如可寫Thankfully,heagreedwithmypromise

topaylater.無靈句的使用：Afeelingofhelplessnesswashedoverme。在續(xù)寫文章中也可以使用這一句型進(jìn)行改寫。如：Afeelingof

gratitude

washedovermeas

I

heard

hiswordsof

kindness.4)狀語從句的使用：ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.續(xù)寫過程中，也可使用Themoment/minute/instant等引導(dǎo)狀語從句來突出情節(jié)。七、范文IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.

Hesitant,anxiousandembarrassed,

I

explainedto

him

whathappened

slowly

but

uneasily,headlowered.

"Woulditbepossibleformetopayyoulaterbecauseofmyhurrytotheconference?"I

blurtedout

thosewordsof

awkwardness,myvoicetremblingwith

afeelingof

shame

washing

overme

like

relentlesswaves.

Afterwhatseemedlikea

century,

neverhadI

expected

that

heagreed

withmy

plan.

Overflowingwitha

senseofreliefmixedwithgratitude,

I

wrotedown

hisphonenumber,

promised

to

meethimfourdayslater

and

wouldpayfor

his

unexpected

generosity.Fourdayslater,whenIwasback

in

Vienna,

I

calledGunteras

promised.Itwas

awarm,sunnyand

refreshingmorning,

astarkcontrastto

thatbitterlycoldevening,which

was

freshinmymind.

Themoment

Gunter

showedhisappearance

attheappointed

spot,

I

quickened

mysteptowardhim,

clasped

hishandsgratefully

and

fishedout

themoneyIowedhim.Aftera

heartfelt

conversation,

wegot

toknoweachotherbetterand

beganour

journeyof

friendship.

Itwasatthatmoment

that

I

cametorealizethat

without

Gunter's

absolute

trustandmy

integrity,

wecouldn'thave

had

suchanunforgettable

andmeaningfulencounter,

alesson

lasting

foreverinmylife.附：短文續(xù)寫原文中的精彩表達(dá)分析1.

touchdown

指（飛機(jī)等）降落、著陸，給人一種觸摸地面的感覺，比起使用arriveat更加生動(dòng)?？商鎿Q詞組還有l(wèi)and

down。此外，在很多科技類文章里常使用touchdown來表示航天器等登陸、著陸。【示例】TheTianwen-1landertoucheddownonSaturdaymorning.天問一號(hào)著陸器于周六上午著陸。TheprobecarryingZhurongtoucheddownonMarsonMay15th.搭載“祝融號(hào)”的探測(cè)器于5月15號(hào)在火星上著陸。2.

run(ran)likecrazy

瘋狂地跑，非?？斓嘏?。巧妙地表達(dá)作者之急。近義詞組為

sprintedquickly。此外likecrazy是個(gè)地道短語，表示“瘋狂地、拼命地”，其同義詞組有l(wèi)ikehell,like

mad等，可以跟任意動(dòng)詞搭配，即{動(dòng)詞+likecrazy/hell/mad}【示例】She

ranlikecrazy(hell/mad)

tocatchthetrainthatwasabouttoleave.她瘋狂地跑著去追即將離開的火車。Duringthe

shoppingspree,

millionsof

onlinebuyers

shoppedlikecrazy(hell/mad)

forwhattheywanted.

在購物狂歡中，幾百萬的網(wǎng)購者瘋狂購買他們想要的物品。3.

withoutasecondthought

毫不猶豫地。要不是想都不想就上車了，或許就不會(huì)有這次奇遇了吧。近義詞組

withouttheleasthesitation?！臼纠縃edivedintothewater

withoutasecondthought

tosavethedrowningchild.他毫不猶豫地跳入水中去救那個(gè)溺水的孩子。4.

fishout

原指魚跳出水面，后來延伸為“撈出、取出”，常有費(fèi)力地、摸索拿出某物之意。同樣比takeout更為生動(dòng)。近義詞組feelfor摸索找某物?！臼纠縎he

fishedout

herkeysfromthebottomofherbag.她從包底部費(fèi)力地找出了鑰匙。5.

whatseemedlikeacentury

此句型用來形容感覺時(shí)間非常漫長(zhǎng)，仿佛像一個(gè)世紀(jì)般，century可以用eternity(永恒)來替換。具有同樣效果的短語還有at

asnail'space

以蝸牛的步伐，形容動(dòng)作等十分緩慢，說時(shí)間像蝸牛一樣慢：Time

dragsata

snail'space.【示例】Afterwhatseemedlikeacentury/eternity,theresultarrived.仿佛過來一個(gè)世紀(jì)似的，結(jié)果出來了。6.

Withjusttwominutestospare

剛好來得及，只剩下兩分鐘。spare此處作為動(dòng)詞使用，表示“抽出、騰出”，原文用來強(qiáng)調(diào)時(shí)間之少。以后表達(dá)“時(shí)間不多”，可以考慮使用“with+時(shí)間+tospare”【示例】Wearrivedatthemeetingwithjusttwominutestospare.我們剛好提前兩分鐘到達(dá)了會(huì)議。7.

rollinto

駛?cè)?，進(jìn)入某個(gè)地方。其實(shí)作者可以使用driveino/enter之類，但是還是選擇rollinto這短語，想必也是為了突出時(shí)間之急、情況之急。roll“滾動(dòng)，翻滾"，體現(xiàn)“匆匆忙忙”的感覺，十分形象?！臼纠縏hesunrolledintoview,castingawarmglowoverthetown.太陽升起，給小鎮(zhèn)披上了一層溫暖的光輝。8.

makeit

成功到達(dá)或完成某事。近義詞組:achieve,reach。makeit十分常見，閱讀完形也喜歡出現(xiàn)。不想說succeed時(shí)，這是個(gè)不錯(cuò)的替換表達(dá)。【示例】Aftermonthsofpreparation,theyfinallymadeittothesummit.

經(jīng)過數(shù)月的準(zhǔn)備，他們最終成功登頂。9.

flashanapologetic

smile

快速露出歉意的微笑。{flasha(n)+形+smile}就可以表示“快速露出的微笑”，如flashabrilliant/warmsmile露出燦爛的/溫暖的微笑。近義詞組:

giveaquickgrin。【示例】Sheflasheda

brightsmileatherfriendbeforeenteringtheroom.她進(jìn)入房間前向朋友快速露出了燦爛的微笑。10.

playalong

合作，順應(yīng)情況。這個(gè)短語在這里用得很妙，有點(diǎn)幽默味道。作者在這樣的情況下，還不忘風(fēng)趣幽默一番，有點(diǎn)心酸?！臼纠縄wasthrilledthathewasplayingalong,butItriedtoseemcasual.我對(duì)他的合作感到很震驚，但我力圖表現(xiàn)得不經(jīng)意些。11.

Afeelingofhelplessnesswashedoverme

一種無助之感席卷而上。這個(gè)句型可以說見得不少了，其中afeelingof

可替換為

asenseof/awaveof/afloodof等，washover

也可以用spreadover/runover/overwhelm等等替換。整個(gè)結(jié)構(gòu)為：{afeelingof+情緒名詞+washedoversb.}【示例】Whenthepowerwentoutduringthestorm,afeelingofhelplessnesswashedovertheentirefamily.當(dāng)風(fēng)暴期