熱考話題1挑戰(zhàn)自我[2022新高考Ⅰ]Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute（路線）throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid，whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong？Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent！Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened."Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim，"heexplaineduncomfortably."Igavehimthechoicetorunornot，andlethimdecide."Ibitbackmyfrustration（懊惱）.Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted，Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme，hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren，butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice，andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren，hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool，IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.Wesatdownnexttoeachother，butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.人物主要人物David：從文中的描述"smallfortenyearsold""bigtoothysmile""hadworkedsohardforthisevent""hadabraindisease""alwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisability"和"hadnotmissedasinglepractice"可知，David身患?xì)埣驳e極樂觀、意志堅(jiān)強(qiáng)。次要人物"I"：從文中的描述"makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted"和"familiarwiththechallengesDavidfaced""proudofhisstrongdetermination可以看出，"我"是一個(gè)關(guān)愛學(xué)生的老師，也暗示了續(xù)寫部分應(yīng)有"我"與David溝通并試圖勸說他參加比賽以及David聽從勸說并以堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的意志完成比賽的情節(jié)。原文最后一段中描述的"hisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid"表明，同學(xué)們對David態(tài)度友好，這也為續(xù)寫第二段David在賽場上時(shí)同學(xué)們的表現(xiàn)埋下了伏筆。情節(jié)及情感線越野賽前得知David決定不參加比賽（David情緒低落，害怕被嘲笑）→找教練獲悉原因，回想David雖患腦疾卻認(rèn)真積極訓(xùn)練（"我"為他感到自豪）→續(xù)寫第二段提示語，David走向起跑線（David重拾勇氣和信心）。主題根據(jù)讀后續(xù)寫"結(jié)局圓滿"的原則可知，David最終應(yīng)該完成了比賽。再結(jié)合原文中David遇到的困難——行走不穩(wěn)、害怕被嘲笑等可知，文章最終的主題應(yīng)該體現(xiàn)David直面挑戰(zhàn)、克服恐懼、戰(zhàn)勝自己。續(xù)寫第一段根據(jù)續(xù)寫兩段的提示語可知，本段主要描述David從不愿參加越野跑，到走向起跑線參加比賽的轉(zhuǎn)變過程。涉及的人物是"I"和David，主要故事情節(jié)："我"開導(dǎo)、鼓勵(lì)David以及他對"我"的勸說的反應(yīng)，側(cè)重人物對話、動(dòng)作、表情和心理描寫。尾句銜接第二段提示語：David最終決定參加越野跑。續(xù)寫第二段根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段提示語可知，本段的故事情節(jié)應(yīng)發(fā)生在越野賽跑線路上，涉及的主要人物是David，也可以呼應(yīng)原文，加入"我"、教練和學(xué)生們的反應(yīng)。主要故事情節(jié)：David在越野賽跑過程中的具體表現(xiàn)及比賽結(jié)果，側(cè)重人物在比賽過程中以及受到大家鼓舞后的動(dòng)作、心理描寫。最終升華主題，David戰(zhàn)勝了內(nèi)心的恐懼。1.Hewasinspiredanddecidedtohaveatry.①用形容詞作狀語改寫句子，使行文更連貫。Inspired，hedecidedtohaveatry.②運(yùn)用連續(xù)動(dòng)作描寫將David決定參賽這一過程細(xì)化。Inspired，hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage，"Iwillhaveatry."2.Theycheeredhimon.①將人群具體到個(gè)人或一些人，因?yàn)?我"尤為關(guān)注David，所以他一摔倒，"我"應(yīng)該是第一個(gè)作出反應(yīng)的人，緊接著是他的同學(xué)們。這樣使情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然順暢。Istartedtoshoutencouragementandhisclassmatesallappearedandcheeredhimon.②用as引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句改寫句①，并運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語改寫cheerhimon，使句子語法結(jié)構(gòu)更豐富。AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon.③為句②同學(xué)們的加油鼓勵(lì)增加具體的話語，使內(nèi)容更富有畫面感。AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon."Comeon，David.Youcandoit！"theyshoutedenthusiastically.3.Davidfinishedtherun.①使用具體的動(dòng)作描寫表示David完成比賽，切合當(dāng)時(shí)比賽的氛圍和場景。Davidcrossedthefinishline.②為句①增加對David通過終點(diǎn)線時(shí)人們的歡呼聲和喝彩聲的描寫，使情節(jié)自然，更具有畫面感。Davidcrossedthefinishlinewithwildcheersandapplause.Wesatdownnexttoeachother，butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Hiseyesdeliberatelyavoidedmine，withhislimbsunavoidablyshaking."It’snottherealyou，David，"Ipattedhimgentlyontheback（輕輕地拍了拍他的后背）andsaidquietly."Youhavepreparedsomuchforit.Lookatmyeyesandtellme.Doyouwanttorun？"Iheldmybreath（屏住呼吸）asDavidlookedup.Inspired，hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage（深吸一口氣，鼓起勇氣），"Iwillhaveatry."IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Thestarter’sgunsounded！Davidsparednoefforttorunasifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses，buthestilltrippedwithinafewkilometers.Myheartsank.AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon."Comeon，David.Youcandoit！"theyshoutedenthusiastically.Touched，hepickedhi