高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)災(zāi)難故事——64歲的Michael在鄰居遇到火災(zāi)時(shí)，不顧自身安危沖進(jìn)火海救人1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Atfirst,Michaeldidn’tseetheblacksmokeorflamesshootingfromthewindowsofhisneighbors’home.Heandhiswifehadjustparkedaroundthecornerfromtheirownhousewhentheygotacallfromoneofhisdaughters:“Thehousenextdoorisonfire!”Hewenttocheck.That’swhenhesawtwowomenandagirlhelplessandheartbrokenontheirdoorway.“Thebaby’sinthere!”oneofthewomencried.Thoughthefiredepartmenthadbeencalled,Michael,then64,immediatelyraninside.“Thebaby”was8-year-oldTiara,thewoman’sgranddaughterandaplaymateofMichael’sthreeyoungestkids.Enteringtheburninghousewaslike“runningintoabucketofblackpaint”.ThethicksmokecausedMichaeltostumbleblindlyaround,burnedhiseyes,andmadeitimpossibletobreathe.Theconditionswouldhavebeendangerousforanyone,butforMichael,whohasseverelungdisease,theywerelife-threatening.4續(xù)寫原文Afterafewminutesinthesmoke-filledhouse,heretreatedoutsidetocatchhisbreath.“WhereisTiara?”heaskeddesperately.“Thesecondfloor,”herauntshoutedback.Michaelknewhecouldn’tholdhisbreathforlong.However,takingadeepbreath,hewentinasecondtime.Thedarknesswasoverwhelming.Yetbecausethehousehadasimilardesigntohis,hemadeittothesecondfloor.Heturnedtotherightandwasmetbyintenseheat.Hewasalreadyoutofbreath.“Babygirl,whereareyou?”Histhroatandlungsburnedasifhe’dinhaledfireinsteadofthesmokeintheair.Everyblinkstunghiseyes.Allhecouldhearwasthecracklingandpoppingofburningwood.Thenasoftbutdistinctmoanemerged.Stillunabletosee,Michaelfelltohiskneesonthehotwoodfloor.Hecrawledtowardthesound,feelingaroundforanysignofthegirl.Anunluckythoughtcrossedhismind:I’mprobablygonnadieuphere.5段首句Paragraph1：Finally,Michaeltouchedsomething.Paragraph2：Suddenly,agunpointedatMorissot.6Part2題目分析7點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)8續(xù)寫思路分析這是一篇記敘文。講述了64歲的Michael在鄰居遇到火災(zāi)時(shí)，不顧自身安危沖進(jìn)火海救人的故事。9續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：Finally,Michaeltouchedsomething.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Michael摸到了什么東西”可知，第一段可描寫Michael找到了女孩Tiara并救助她的過程。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Tiarawassafenow;however,Michaelfainteddowntotheground,unconscious.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“幾天后Michael在醫(yī)院醒來了”可知第二段可描寫Michael救人后在醫(yī)院救治的情況，以及事情結(jié)束后的感悟。11續(xù)寫思路分析續(xù)寫線索找到女孩——搶救——醒來——Michael住院——救治——感觸12續(xù)寫素材可用詞匯：行為類①停車：stop/park/pullup②跑：run/rush③爬：crawl/climb情緒類①哭：cry/weep/sob②可怕的：terrible/horrible/frightening/scary13續(xù)寫素材可用句型：[高分句型1]Whenhewokeup,Michaelfoundhimselfinthehospital,surroundedbyhisneighborswhoconstantlysaidthank-youtothehero.（運(yùn)用了過去分詞作狀語以及who引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從句）[高分句型2]Thewomenstoodbehindhim,prayingsilently.（運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語）14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)Finally,Michaeltouchedsomething.Ashoe,thenanankle—ItwasTiara!Hescoopedherintohisarmsandstood.Turning,hefoughtthroughthesmokeandmadehiswaytotheoutside.MichaelputTiaradownonthedoorway.AndHestartedCPR—thefirsttimehe’deverdoneso.Thewomenstoodbehindhim,prayingsilently.SoonaslightcoughcamefromTiara’sthroat.Hegavefivemorebreaths.Sheopenedhereyesandtookabreathonherown.16范文呈現(xiàn)Tiarawassafenow;however,Michaelfainteddowntotheground,unconscious.Whenhewokeup,Michaelfoundhimselfinthehospital,surroundedbyhisneighborswhoconstantlysaidthank-youtothehero.Michaelspentoveraweekinthehospital.Tiarawasreleasedfromthehospitalafterafewdays.ThefiresickenedMichael’slungdisease,andhefeelstheeffectseventwoyearslater.“It’sasmallpricetopay,”healwaysreplies.“I’ddoitagaininaheartbeat.Wouldn’tgiveitasecondthought.”17范文譯文最后，邁克爾摸到了什么東西。一只鞋，然后是一只腳踝——是蒂亞拉！他把她抱在懷里站了起來。他轉(zhuǎn)過身來，在煙霧中奮力掙扎，向外面走去。邁克爾把蒂亞拉放在門口。他開始了心肺復(fù)蘇術(shù)——這是他第一次這樣做。女人們站在他身后，默默地祈禱。很快，蒂亞拉的喉嚨里傳來一陣輕微的咳嗽。他又做了五次呼吸。她睜開眼睛，自己吸了一口氣。18范文譯文蒂亞拉現(xiàn)在安全了；然而，邁克爾昏倒在地，不省人事。當(dāng)他醒來時(shí)，邁克爾發(fā)現(xiàn)自己在醫(yī)院里，周圍都是