新課標I&Ⅱ卷

2024年高考英語作文真題

【應用文寫作】

【2024新課標Ⅰ&II卷】假定你是李華，上周五你們班在公園上了一堂美術課。請你給英國朋友Chris寫一

封郵件分享這次經歷，內容包括：

（1）你完成的作品；

（2）你的感想。

注意：

（1）寫作詞數(shù)應為80個左右；

（2）請按如下格式在答題紙的相應位置作答。

DearChris,

I’mwritingtosharewithyouanartclassIhadinaparklastFriday.

____________________________________________________________________________________________

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Yours,

LiHua

【文本解讀】

1、體裁：郵件。

2、主題：給好朋友Chris介紹上周五在公園上美術課的經歷。

3、內容要點：

①除了開頭語，需要具體描述完成的作品是什么樣子的，包括使用的色彩、呈現(xiàn)的內容等。

②詳細闡述自己對于這次在公園上美術課的感想，比如對戶外創(chuàng)作的感受、對藝術的新理

解等。

4、語言表達：

①要用較為流暢自然的英語來表述。

②注意時態(tài)，描述上周五的事情一般用過去時。

整體來說，這是一個比較常規(guī)的書信類寫作任務，重點在于如何清晰地描述作品和生動地

表達自己的感想，讓英國朋友Chris能較好地感受到這次特別的美術課經歷。

【思路點撥】

開頭：

在開頭部分，除了已給出的語句表明寫信目的是分享上周五公園美術課的經歷。還需要寫一句

過渡語銜接。（由于字數(shù)有限，一句即可。）

主體：

1、先描述自己完成的作品，包括作品的主題、主要元素、表現(xiàn)形式等，自己是如何創(chuàng)作的。

2、接著表達自己的感想，比如在公園上課的新奇感受，對自然之美的感悟，從這次經歷中獲

得的啟發(fā)等。

結尾：

可以詢問Chris對這種在公園上美術課的看法，或者詢問Chris有沒有類似在戶外上美術課的

情況。使郵件內容更加豐富。

四、相關的詞匯和表達

色彩：

vivid（鮮艷的）

rich（濃郁的）

dullish（有點暗淡的）

pastel（柔和的）

monochromatic（單色的）

線條與形狀：

curvy（彎曲的）

angular（有棱角的）

rounded（圓形的）

zigzag（之字形的）

整體效果：

fantastic（極好的）

spectacular（壯觀的）

charming（迷人的）

delightful（令人愉快的）

captivating（迷人的）

風格：

impressionistic（印象派的）

abstract（抽象的）

minimalist（極簡主義的）

細節(jié)與質感：

elaborate（精心制作的）

textured（有質感的）

rough（粗糙的）

smoothassilk（如絲般光滑）

氛圍與情感：

solemn（莊重的）

cheerful（愉快的）

mysterious（神秘的）

romantic（浪漫的）

melancholic（憂郁的）

【滿分范文】

范文一

DearChris,

Howiseverythinggoing?Hearingthatyouareanenthusiastinpainting,Icouldhardlywaittosharemy

delightfulexperiencefromourpaintingclass.

LastFridaywitnessedourventuringintothepark,auniquesettingthatinspiredmetocreateapaintingofthe

serenelakesurroundedbylushgreentrees.Thetranquilityofnaturewastrulycaptivating.

Notonlywaspaintingoutdoorsarefreshingchange,butitalsoallowedmetoseecolorsandshapesinanew

light.Moreover,itwasasensoryfeastthatheightenedmyperceptionandappreciationforthebeautyofournatural

worldevenmore.Needlesstosay,itwasadayfilledwithcreativityandasenseofpeace.

Lookingforwardtohearingaboutyouradventures!

Yours,

LiHua

范文二

DearChris,

How’sitgoing?OurclasshadauniqueexperiencelastFridaywhenwetookanartlessonintheparkinstead

oftheusualclassroomsetting.I'mexcitedtosharemyartprojectandthefeelingsitevokedinme.Theinstructor

askedustocapturetheessenceoftheparkinourartworks,emphasizingtheuseofcolorandshapetoevokeasense

ofpeaceandharmony.Mypaintingdepictsapathleadingtoascenicviewofthelake.Theartlessoninthepark

wasarefreshingchangefromtheusualclassroomsetting.Itfeltmorerelaxingandlessconstrained,allowingmy

creativitytoflowfreely.Ihopethisemailhasbrightenedyourdayasmuchasthatoutdoorartclassbrightened

mine.Lookingforwardtohearingaboutyourownadventures.

Yours,

LiHua

范文三

DearChris,

How’sitgoing?LastFriday,ourclassenjoyedaratherunusualartlessonlastweek.Insteadofthefamiliar

classroom,wefoundourselvespaintingintheopenairofthepark.I’mwritingtosharethisinterestingexperience

withyou,alongwithdetailsaboutmyartworkandmythoughtsonthewholeactivity.Theartlesson'sassignment

wastocreateapaintingthatembodiesthespiritofthepark,focusingonitsnaturalbeauty.Mypieceshowcasesa

bloomingcherryblossomtreeunderaclearbluesky,withafewpeopleadmiringtheview,reflectingasenseof

peaceandappreciationfornature.Theoutdoorartlessonwasnotonlyenjoyablebutalsoeye-opening.Itgavemea

newperspectiveonartandtheroleoftheartistincapturingandinterpretingnature.Ihopethisemailhas

brightenedyourdayasmuchasthatoutdoorartclassbrightenedmine.Lookingforwardtohearingaboutyourown

adventures.

Yours,

LiHua

范文五

DearChris,

IamwritingtosharewithyouanartclassIhadintheparklastFriday.LastFridaywitnessedanartclassina

park.Thewholeclasswasfilledwithcreativityandjoy.Ican’twaittosharemyextraordinaryexperiencewith

you.

Thetaskmyteachersetforuswastodrawthenatureinourownway.Imadeaworktitled“TheVibrant

Nature”.Istartedbysketchingthecontoursofthemainelements,suchastreesandflowers.ThenIuseddifferent

colorstofillintocreateavividatmosphere.Atlast,inordertomakethepicturemorelovelyandattractive,Ialso

addedsomebeautifulbirdsandbutterflies.Myworkwashighlypraisedbymyteacherandclassmates.

Takinganartclassinaparkgavemeanovelexperienceandtaughtmetolookattheworldfromadifferent

perspective.Wasitinterestingforyou?Iamlookingforwardtoyourreply.

Yours,

LiHua

【讀后續(xù)寫】

ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabus

toPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.Itoucheddownin

Viennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlike

crazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.

ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn’theardofthebusstation.Ithought

mypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwas

abouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Aftera

heateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.

Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueue(隊列)

stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabig

smileonhisface.“Wemadeit,”hesaid.

JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmy

Portuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.Afeelingof

helplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.

Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,attheentrance,wasacash

machine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthe

message:“Outoforder.Sorry.”

注意：

（1）續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右；

（2）請按如下格式在答題紙的相應位置作答。

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.

【文本解讀】

【故事梗概】

故事講述了一個乘客在一個寒冷潮濕的九月晚上，急匆匆地趕往布拉格參加會議的經歷。由于一場

大風暴，他的航班延誤了一個半小時，導致他到達維也納時只剩下30分鐘的時間趕上最后一班前往

布拉格的巴士。他急忙跳上了Gunter的出租車，告訴Gunter他的緊急情況，盡管Gunter最初并不

清楚巴士站的位置，但還是通過電話詢問朋友后，迅速駕車前往。

當他們終于在巴士出發(fā)前兩分鐘到達車站時，乘客卻發(fā)現(xiàn)自己沒有現(xiàn)金，而且他的葡萄牙銀行卡在

當?shù)氐目C上無法使用。在他感到無助的時候，Gunter指向了車站等候大廳入口處的現(xiàn)金機，但不

幸的是，現(xiàn)金機也出現(xiàn)了故障。整個故事描繪了在緊迫的時間壓力下，人與人之間的互助和善良。

后續(xù)應該是對這份善良的回報——即如約再遇，體現(xiàn)愛在身邊。

Who,What,How,andWhy:

1.Who:一位計劃前往布拉格參加會議的旅客，Gunter在維也納遇到的出租車司機。

2.What:主人公因暴風雪導致航班延誤，幾乎錯過了最后一班前往布拉格的巴士。在Gunter

的幫助下，他勉強趕上了巴士。

3.How:主人公在維也納下飛機后急忙跳上Gunter的出租車，盡管Gunter一開始不知道巴士站

在哪里，但通過打電話給朋友最終找到了巴士站。

4.Why:主人公需要趕往布拉格參加會議，而Gunter幫助他是出于職業(yè)責任和善意。

原文鋪墊信息：

1.主人公的緊迫時間表和對趕上巴士的迫切需求。

2.Gunter對路線的不熟悉以及他通過電話尋求幫助的情景。

3.找到一個現(xiàn)金機器，但發(fā)現(xiàn)它“暫停服務outoforder”。

語言風格和句式特征：

1.語言風格為敘述性和描述性，使用第一人稱視角。

2.句式多樣，包括簡單句、并列句、復雜句和倒裝句。

3.使用了生動的形容詞和副詞（如"cold,wet","unforgettable","likecrazy"）來增強情景描述，甚

至用了修辭。

4.明顯敘事類的語言

4.1ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedinto

thefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.從句；多聯(lián)動；修辭

4.2WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Aftera

heateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownand

startedthecar.從句；多聯(lián)動

4.3Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhis

face.三聯(lián)動謂語

4.4IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.無靈賓語

4.5AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.無靈主語

4.6Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoread

themessage:“Outoforder.Sorry.”三聯(lián)動謂語

4.7There,attheentrance,wasacashmachine.倒裝

5.包含了直接對話，增加了故事的真實感和緊迫感。

6.思維導圖-故事結構：

Beginning:介紹主人公的計劃和遇到的困難（航班延誤）。

Build-up:主人公與Gunter的相遇，前往巴士站。(交通問題+溝通障礙)

Climax:到達巴士站，但發(fā)現(xiàn)沒有現(xiàn)金支付出租車費用。（無法支付）

Resolution:承諾后期彌補。（完美解決：感恩信任）

【思路點撥】

故事背景維持：繼續(xù)使用第一人稱視角，保持故事的緊張和緊迫感。

角色發(fā)展：深入描述Gunter和主人公之間的互動，可能包括Gunter提出解決方案的場景。

情節(jié)推進：設計主人公解決支付問題的情節(jié)。

語言協(xié)同：續(xù)寫時應使用與原文相似的語言風格和句式特征，確保故事的連貫性。

沖突解決：設計一個合理的解決方案，讓主人公最終能夠趕上巴士并參加會議。

情感描述：加入主人公內心活動的描述，如焦慮、感激或其他情感。

結局展望：考慮給故事一個圓滿的結局，例如主人公成功參加會議并對Gunter表示感激。

首句探究：

Para1:IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.

Para2:Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.

續(xù)寫的中心線：

第一段：問題出現(xiàn)——情緒碰撞——商討解決；

第二段：電話約見——互動交流——內心感悟

問題鏈接：采用角色互動來推動情節(jié)發(fā)展是對故事最好的演繹

第一段

Q1:WhatdidIsayaboutthebadnews?

“Thecashmachineisn’tworking,”Imanagedtosay,disappointmentevidentinmyvoice.

Q2:HowdidGunterrespondbothinbehaviorandinemotion?

Helookedatmeindisbelief,buthisshockedexpressionquicklyturnedtounderstanding.Then,he

glancedatthenearlyemptybusqueueandbackatme,hisgazesteady.“Don’tworry,”hecomforted.

Q3:HowdidIcommunicatewithGuntertodealwithsituation?

Flashinghimanapologeticsmile,Iclarifiedmydeparture,beggedhimforadelayedpaymentand

meanwhileaskedforhisphonenumber.

Q4:HowdidGunterrespondatlast?

“Noproblem!”,hesmiled.

Q5:HowdidIrespondaccordingly?

Filledwithgratitude,Idashedthebus,stealingaquickglancebackatGunterwavingmegoodbye.

第二段

Q1:HowdidGunterrespondbothinbehaviorandinemotion?

Hardlyhadhehungupthephonewhenhedrovetothestationtopickmeup,alittlesurprisedbutvery

delighted.

Q2:HowdidIrespondthen?

Beamingawarmsmileathim,IgavehimabighugthemomentIsawhim.“That’sgreat!”Ishouted.

Q3:Whathappenedtouslater?

OurconversationflowedmerrilyandIexpressedmyprofoundgratitude,offeredtocoverthecostofthe

roundtrip,plusageneroustipthathehumblytriedtorefuse.Wewerechattingforhalfaday,yetitfelt

likeonlyafewminuteshadflownby.

Q4:WhatdidIlearnfromtheexperience?

Thisexperiencewasareminderthatwhateverobstaclesweencounter,actsofkindnesshavethepowerto

connectusallandbringoutthebestinhumanity.

范文一

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Hearingthenews,helookedabitdisappointedforawhile.I

rackedmybrainstofindawayout.Iaskedforhisphonenumber,tookmytopbrandwatchoffthewristand

handeditovertohim.tellinghimthatIwouldcontacthimafterthemeeting.Guntershookhisheadviolently,

squeezingthewatchbacktomeandpushingmeontothebusjustbeforeitstartedoff.Icriedatthetopofmyvoice

throughthebuswindowthatIwouldsurelypayhim.

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.Recognizingmyvoice,hesounded

pleasantlyamazed.Whileheaskedmenottobotherit,Iinsistedwemeetatthebusstationandgivehimwhathe

deserved.Aquarterofanhourlater,IrushedtoembraceGunter,paidhimthetaxifareandgavehimasouvenir

fromPrague.Hewassoexcitedandmurmured,“Yourintegritydeeplytouchesme!”Ithankedhimoverandover

againandinvitedhimtovisitPortugal.Eversincethen,wedevelopedaspecialcross-countryfriendship

范文二

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Ifinishedmywordswithdifficulty,staredatthecardinmyhand,

andthenlookedupintohiseyeswithshameandembarrassment.Tomysurprise,Guntercomfortedmewithabig

smile,whichcalmedmedown.Pluckingupmycourage,Iexplainedmysituationtohimandpromisedtopayoff

thefareandsomeextratipfourdayslaterwhenIwasbackinVienna.“Noproblem!”hesmiled.Havingleftmy

phonenumber,Ihurriedtocatchthebus.WhenIlookedback,Isawhimwavingmegoodbye.

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.ThemomentIsawGunter,Istrodeto

him,andgatheredhimintomyarmswithastrongembrace.Happyandexcited,HelaughedandsaidhethoughtI

hislittlephonewouldn'tshowup.Igavehimsomeextratipaspromisedbutherefused.SoItreatedhimtoacupof

coffeeinstead.Beforewepartedthatday,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneagain,pattedonmyshoulderand

smiled“Let'stakeapicturetogether,myfriend!”Thisphotoisstillonmydesktoday,whichservesasareminder

oftrustingothersandofferingkindness.EverytimeIthinkofcold,wetevening,awarmcurrentstillflowsthrough

mybody.

范文三

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Myheartsankwitheverypassingsecond.Hissmilefaded,

replacedbyalookofconcern."Don'tworry,"hesaidreassuringly,"We'llfindasolution."Gunter,withhiskind

heart,suggestedweaskaroundifanyonecouldhelpwithacashwithdrawal.Miraculously,akindtraveleragreed

towithdrawmoneyformeinexchangefortheequivalentineuros.Withthefreshlyacquiredcash,IpaidGunter,

addingageneroustipforhisunwaveringhelp.AsIboardedthebus,hewaved,hissmilebrighterthanever,"Safe

travels!"

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.Hisvoice,warmandfamiliar,greetedme

ontheotherendoftheline.Ithankedhimoncemoreforhisincrediblekindnessandinsistedonmeetinghimto

returnthe`favor.Wemetatalocalcafé,whereIpresentedhimwithasmalltokenofappreciation-abookon

Prague,whereourunlikelyjourneyhadaimed.Oversteamingcupsofcoffee,wesharedstoriesandlaughter,

forgingafriendshipbornoutofastormynight'schaos.Gunter'sactofkindnesshadnotonlygottenmetomy

destinationbuthadalsoopeneddoorstoafriendshipthattranscendedsborders.

范文四

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.“Thecashmachineisn’tworking,”Imanagedtosay,

disappointmentevidentinmyvoice.Helookedatmeindisbelief,buthisshockedexpressionquickly

turnedtounderstanding.Then,heglancedatthenearlyemptybusqueueandbackatme,hisgazesteady.

“Don’tworry,”hecomforted.Flashinghimanapologeticsmile,Iclarifiedmydeparture,beggedhimfor

adelayedpaymentandalsoaskedforhisphonenumber.“Noproblem!”,hesmiled.Filledwithgratitude,

Idashedthebus,stealingaquickglancebackatGunterwavingmegoodbye.

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.Hardlyhadhehungupthe

phonewhenhedrovetothestationtopickmeup,alittlesurprisedbutverydelighted.Beamingawarm

smileathim,IgavehimabighugthemomentIsawhim.“That’sgreat!”Ishouted.Ourconversation

flowedmerrilyandIexpressedmyprofoundgratitude,offeredtocoverthecostoftheroundtrip,plusa

generoustipthathehumblytriedtorefuse.Wewerechattingforhalfaday,yetitfeltlikeonlyafew

minuteshadflownby.Thisexperiencewasareminderthatwhateverobstaclesweencounter,actsof

kindnesshavethepowertoconnectusallandbringoutthebestinhumanity.

范文五

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Thoughembarrassedandreluctant,Iforcedmyselfto

raiseupmyheadandlookedintohisevessincerely,“Iknow,Gunter,we'vejustmet,butIamgoingtobe

backinViennain4daystime.CoulditbeOKwithyoutopayyouthemoneyin4days?I’lladdanextra

l0eurosforyourdelay."ItfollowedanuncomfortablepauseasIanalyzedGunter'sfaceforhisreaction.

Thentheimpossiblehappened.Henoddedhisheadsimply.“It'scool...Iacceptthissolutionandtrustyou.”

Igavehimthenameofmyhotelandandweexchangephonenumbers.1boardedthebusandgavehima

bighugewavetomynewestfriend.

Asfourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,andIcalledGunteraspromised.Hewashappytohear

fromme.Wemetattheappointedhotel.Weembracedlikelonglostfriends.Guntertoldmethathewasn't

sureifIwasgoingtoshowupbutwasexcitedtohearmyvoicewhenIcalledhim.IgaveGuntertheextra

€10tipIhadpromisedwhichhewouldnotaccept.HetoldmetocallhimthenexttimeIwasinVienna

andboughthimabeer,whichIhappilyagreedto.Ifmyfaithinhumanitywaswavering,Gunterrestored

it.GjunterwasdefinitelythenicestandthebesttaxidriveryouwouldmeetinViennaandmaybeAustria.

【原文結尾欣賞】

‘Outoforder.Sorry.’

Blooddrainsfrommyface.Gunter,pantingforbreath,shakeshishead.

Gameover.Fateseemedtobeconspiringagainstmetoday.

Inthedistance,Icantheluggagedoorofthebusclosing.Thelastremainingpassengersareaboutto

boardthebus.IlooktowardsGunter.

Ican’tremembertheexactwordsofwhatIsaidtohimthen.It’sabitofablur.

Itgoessomethinglikethis

‘IknowGunterwe’vejustmet.ButIreallyneedtogetonthisbus.OtherwiseIhavetospendthenight

herewhichwillbebloodyexpensive.Ihavetobuyanewbustickettomorrowmorning.Iknowwe’vejust

metbutIamgoingtobebackinViennain4daystime.Ifit’sokwithyouIcanpayyouthemoneythen.

I’lladdanextra10eurosforyourhassle.’

ThenanuncomfortablepauseasIanalyseGunter’sfaceforhisreaction.

Thentheimpossiblehappened.Henoddedhisheadsimply.

‘It’scool.Iacceptthissolutionandtrustyou.Givemezeenameofyourhotelandwecanmeetthere.’

Ilookathim.Biggestsmileyoucanimagine.Igivehimthenameofmyhotelandweexchangephone

numbers.Iboardthebusandgivehimabighugewavetomynewestfriendonplanetearth.

4dayslater….

IambackinViennatoattendtheWienerWiesnFestival.

Aspromised,IcallGunter.He’shappytohearfromme.

Wemeetattheairportwhereheworksfrom.Weembracelikelonglostfriends.

Guntertellsmethathewasn’tsureifIwasgoingtoshowupbutwashappytohearmyvoicewhenI

calledhim.

IgaveGuntertheextra€10tipIhadpromisedwhichhewouldnotaccept.Hetoldmetocallhim,the

nexttimeIwasinViennaandbuyhimabeer.

WhichIhappilyagreedto.

Ifmyfaithinhumanitywaswavering,Gunterrestoredit.

Thingshavechangedsincewewerekids.

Theytellmethatfairytalesexistnomore.

Well.Theyarewrong.FairytalesDOexist.Thankstotheinvisibleknightsinshiningarmour.Callthem

angelsorkindredspirits.Theyexistinthisworld.Wejustdon’tseethem.

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2023年高考英語作文真題

【應用文寫作】

【2023?新高考I&II卷】

假定你是李華，外教Ryan準備將學生隨機分為兩人一組，讓大家課后練習口語，你認為這樣分組存在問題。

請你給外教寫一封郵件，內容包括；

1.說明問題；

2.提出建議。

注意:

1.寫作詞數(shù)應為80個左右：

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

DearRyan,

I’mLiHuafromClass3.

____________________________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________________________

______________________________________________________________________________________

Yourssincerely,

LiHua

【文本解讀】

1.主題語境：人與社會——向外教的要求提出質疑并給出建議

2.文體：即寫作需要達成的目的，該文要求學生描述問題、提出建議；

3.對象：決定寫作的人稱和語氣，是該課最需要關注的點，也是學生最容易忽視或者無法促成交

際目的的點；

4.時態(tài)：關注事情是否發(fā)生；

5.要點：決定要點的完整性、主次順序和邏輯關系。

【思路點撥】

建議信一般使用第一、二人稱，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主。學生們在落筆前需要確定好每一段的中心內

容，列出提綱，從而避免跑題。

Para1：收到來信，得知……（問題）；安慰；寫作目的（提建議）；

Para2：具體的建議與理由；

Para3：希望采納并祝福，期待情況改善。

【滿分范文】

范文一

DearRyan,

IamLihua,oneofyourstudents.Ihavesomeconcernsaboutpairingupstudentsrandomlyforspoken

Englishtraining.WhileIappreciatetheideaofpromotinginteraction,Ibelievethere

arepotentialdrawbackstoyourapproach.親愛滴Ryan老師我是李華，你的學生。我對將學生隨機分

為兩人一組練習口語有一些顧慮。雖然我贊賞促進交流互動的想法，但我認為你的方法可能存在一

些潛在問題。

Firstly,randomlypairingstudentsmightresultinimbalancedskilllevelswithineachgroup.Some

studentsmightstruggletokeepup,whileotherscouldfindtheexercisestooeasy,whichcouldhinder

effectivelearningforbothparties.首先，隨機將學生分組可能導致每組內部的英語水平不平衡。有些

學生可能會感到跟不上，而其他人可能會覺得練習太簡單，這可能會影響雙方的有效學習。

Instead,IsuggestgroupingstudentsbasedontheircurrentEnglishproficiency.Thisway,they

canbenefitfrompracticingwithsomeoneofasimilarskilllevel,allowingformoremeaningful

interactionsandtargetedimprovement.相反地，我建議根據學生目前的英語水平來分組。這樣，他

們可以與語言水平相近的人一起練習，從而實現(xiàn)更有意義的互動和有針對性的提高。

Thankyouforconsideringthissuggestion.Ibelieveitcouldenhancethelearningexperiencefor

everyone.感謝您考慮我的建議。我相信這樣做可以提升大家的學習體驗。

Yours,

Lihua

愛你的華子

范文二

DearRyan,

IamLiHuafromclass3.Aimedatsharingmysuggestionsrelatetothegroupingmethodinarandomway

withthepurposeofgettingouroralEnglishenhanced,I'lldropyoutheline.

Whatcomesfirstisthatpairingoffarbitrarilymaynotnecessarilyservetopromoteitsoriginaleffectdue

tolackforscientificmethod.Providingtwostudentswithpoorspokenlanguagewereputtogether,they

wouldbestuckinimprovingtheirspokenlevel.AdditionallyStudents'interestsandhobbiesarenottaken

intoaccount.Iftwopeoplewithdifferentinterestsaredividedtogether,theyhavenocommoninterest,

leavingtheoralpracticetoastateofsilence.Therefore.Ican'twaittooffermypersonalopinion:itisa

fabulousideatoenablestudentstochoosetheirownpartnersfreely.Itallowsthemtolearninahappy

momentwhichnotonlycanitimprovethestudents’spokenabilitybutalsoitcanplayarolein

strengtheningtheirfriendship.

Hopemysuggestionwillexertaenormousfunctiononspokendrillandgettwicetheresultwithhalfthe

effort.Yourpromptreplywillbehighlyappreciated.

Yours

LiHua

范文三

DearRyan,

Iwanttodiscusstherandomgroupingstrategyfortheafter-classspeakingpractice.WhileIunderstand

yourintentionbehindthismethod,Ibelieveitmaycausesomeproblems.Firstly,itmightresultin

imbalancedgroups,whereonestudentleadstheconversationwhiletheotherstrugglestofollow.Besides,

somestudentsmayfeeluncomfortablepracticingwithcertainclassmates,whichmightreducetheir

motivation.

Todismisstheseconcerns,Isuggestconsideringdifferentgroupingmethods.Youcanarrangethestudents

withsimilarlanguagelevelstogether,orswitchgroupmemberseverytwoweeks.Inthisway,studentscan

benefitfromdiverseinteractionsandparticipatemoreactively.

Thankyouforconsideringmysuggestions.Ibelievetheseadjustmentswillenhancetheeffectivenessof

thespeakingpractice.

Yours

LiHua

范文四

DearRhan,

I'mLiHua,astudentfromyourclass.Iamwritingtodiscussthegroupingoftheoralpracticeclass.

YourmethodofaskingustopracticeinpairswillundoubtedlyimproveouroralEnglishfaster.However,

yourdecisiononrandomlyselectingtwotoformagroup,inmyopinion,isimproper.Foronething,the

twostudentsmaybestrangerstoeachother,whichwillgreatlyreducetheeffectofouroralpractice.For

another,ThetwostudentswithdifferentEnglishlevelsandinterestswillmakeitchallengeingtopractice

ouroralEnglish.Therefore,itispreferableforustochooseourownteammates,fromwhichwewillget

twicetheresultwithhalftheeffort.

Ihopeyouwillgivemyadviceyourfullconsideration.Thankyou!(130words)

Yours,

LiHua

范文五

DearRyan,

Iamveryglad/excitedtolearnthatyouaregivinganoralEnglishtrainingcourse.Iamsureitwill

greatlyhelpusimproveourspokenEnglish.Anditissaidthatyouwillrandomlypairupthestudentswho

participateintheoraltraining.Ithinkitisnotagoodideatodividethestudentsintopairsatrandom.

Randomlypairingupthestudentsmayleadtodifferentorimbalancedlanguageabilitieswithinthegroups.

Differentexpressiveabilitiesmaycanhinder/blocktheoralprogressofbothstudents,asthemore

advancedonemaydominatetheconversation,leavinglittleroomfortheotherstudenttoimprove.SoI

havesomesuggestionsforgroupingthestudents.

First,itisbettertoplacethestudentsofsimilaroralabilityintothesamegroupofthreeorfour,notonly

inpairs.SimilarEnglishproficiencylevelscancontributetotheirprogressandconfidence.AlsoStudents

canalsovolunteertoformgroups,sothatstudentswhoarefamiliarwitheachothercanpracticeina

groupwithmorepassion.

Tosumup,itisverybeneficialtoorganizeaspeakingtrainingprogramtohelpstudentsimproveour

spokenEnglish,butweshouldfocusmoreonthequalityofthepairingprocesstomaximizethelearning

outcomesofallparticipants.

Yours,

LiHua

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