故事續(xù)寫教學(xué)研討故事續(xù)寫教學(xué)研討?題型分析?寫作技能?基礎(chǔ)夯實(shí)?沖刺提高?題型分析?寫作技能?基礎(chǔ)夯實(shí)?沖刺提高題型分析題型分析高考故事續(xù)寫發(fā)展歷程始于2016年10月時(shí)間：日?夜?日?夜?日地點(diǎn)：森林人物：夫妻事件：迷路高考故事續(xù)寫發(fā)展歷程始于2016年10月時(shí)間：日?夜?日?夜2017年6月時(shí)間：日地點(diǎn)：野外人物：朋友事件：遇狼2017年11月時(shí)間：日?夜?日地點(diǎn)：戶外人物：家人事件：旅行2018年6月時(shí)間：日?夜地點(diǎn)：草原?森林人物：父子事件：迷路Future?2017年6月時(shí)間：日地點(diǎn)：野外人物：朋友事件：遇狼2017時(shí)間日夜兼有地點(diǎn)戶外室內(nèi)？故事續(xù)寫人物夫妻朋友家人師生?總結(jié)故事續(xù)寫?？疾煊忻堋⒂形C(jī)的事件。情節(jié)矛盾（人&人）(人&動(dòng)物)(人&自然)時(shí)間日夜兼有地點(diǎn)戶外室內(nèi)？故事續(xù)寫人物夫妻朋友家人師生?總結(jié)題型分析：輸入文本輸入文本文本提示與結(jié)構(gòu)?續(xù)寫原文?Para.1首句?Para.2首句70%?十個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞題型分析：輸入文本輸入文本文本提示與結(jié)構(gòu)?續(xù)寫原文?Para?確定主題?根據(jù)Para.1與Para.2開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)的提示內(nèi)容以及原文最后一段的情節(jié)，確定Para.1開(kāi)頭與結(jié)束可能出現(xiàn)的情節(jié)?根據(jù)Para.2開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)的提示內(nèi)容以及文章的主題，確定第二段開(kāi)頭可能出現(xiàn)的情節(jié)以及結(jié)尾部分內(nèi)容?10個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞在一定程度上確定了情節(jié)發(fā)展的一些主要因素，包括了主要人物(maincharacter)、主要地點(diǎn)(place)、主要事件(event)以及主要場(chǎng)景(scene)等。所以，我們可以通過(guò)分析10個(gè)劃線關(guān)鍵詞預(yù)測(cè)續(xù)寫部分可能出現(xiàn)的情節(jié)，根據(jù)需要選擇關(guān)鍵詞?確定主題?根據(jù)Para.1與Para.2開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)的提示內(nèi)容以AVacationwithMyMother（2017.06）?Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusement,allbecauseofmymother---loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaselventellsalotabouther.?MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgoodbyetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwewouldeverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler‘schecksMomhadforgotten.?DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquite.”Wewereneveractuallyleftinastrangecity,butwewerenotabouttotakeanychance.?Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反對(duì)).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.AVacationwithMyMother（201注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5?主題：Avacationwithmyloving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetfulmum.?第一段情節(jié)：thebrand-newtent，forget,solvetheproblem?第二段情節(jié)：greatsightsindifferentstates?關(guān)鍵詞分類：whoMomDadDavidhowabsent-minded;forgetful;nicewhatcampingtroubletenttrip?關(guān)鍵詞分布：第一段：mom,dad,David，forget,tent第二段：trip,nice?主題：Avacationwithmyloving寫作技能Plots&Language寫作技能Plots&Language01Plots|情節(jié)推進(jìn)1.問(wèn)題鏈推進(jìn)2.時(shí)間推進(jìn)3.情感推進(jìn)01Plots|情節(jié)推進(jìn)1.問(wèn)題鏈推進(jìn)2.時(shí)間推進(jìn)3.情感推問(wèn)題鏈推進(jìn)通過(guò)故事“六要素”設(shè)計(jì)問(wèn)題鏈問(wèn)題鏈推進(jìn)通過(guò)故事“六要素”設(shè)計(jì)問(wèn)題鏈教學(xué)案例以人教版高中英語(yǔ)必修教材第三模塊Unit1UsingLanguage：ASADLOVESTORY為例，該文本是一篇典型的敘事類文本。上課教師根據(jù)“六要素”（5W1H）梳理已知文本情節(jié)，即：1.Whendidthestoryhappen?2.Wheredidthestoryhappen?3.Whowerethemaincharacters?4.Whathappenedonthatday?5.Whydidhedoso?6.HowcouldLiFangsolvetheproblem?教學(xué)案例以人教版高中英語(yǔ)必修教材第三模塊Unit1Usi最后一個(gè)問(wèn)題，HowcouldLiFangsolvetheproblem?其實(shí)是對(duì)下文未知情節(jié)的推斷。但是，問(wèn)題6的切口比較大，學(xué)生常常不知道該如何回答。因此，可以按照上文中對(duì)第二輪問(wèn)題鏈設(shè)計(jì)的思路，將疏導(dǎo)未知情節(jié)的問(wèn)題6再細(xì)化成：1.WhatwouldhesaytoHuJin?(HowwouldheexplainthesituationtoHuJin?)2.WhatwouldHuJinsayafterhearingthenews?3.WhatwouldLiFangandHuJindonext?4.Howdidtheyfeel?這些問(wèn)題更細(xì)化且切口更小，更容易回答。最后一個(gè)問(wèn)題，HowcouldLiFangsolve根據(jù)這樣的問(wèn)題鏈和討論的結(jié)果，學(xué)生撰寫了故事的結(jié)局。以下為學(xué)生習(xí)作：“Em…”LiFangfalteredwithembarrassment.“Tobehonest,Imadeamistake.Ithoughtweweresupposedtomeetatthecoffeeshop.”“Areyouserious?”SaidHuJin,“Howcarelessyouare!Didyoupayanyattentiontothisdate?Itwasawasteoftimewaitingforyou!“It'sallmyfault.”SaidLiFang,“I'msosorry,Iwasalwayscomplainingthatyoudidn'tturnup,butIhadnevermanagedtothinkthatitwasIthatmixedupwiththecoffeeandtea.However,Iboughtagiftforyou.Thoughitwasthrownbyme.CanIbuysomethingelseasanapologyforyou?Afterall,Iloveyou!”Afterhearinghiswords,HuJindidnotannoyanymore.Infact,sheknewthattheylovedeachother,soshesaid:”Yourapologyisaccepted.Ishouldhavecalledyoujustnow.Andway,Iloveyou,too.”Afteraconversation,theybrokedownthebarriersbetweenthem,andtheyleadahappylifeforever.根據(jù)這樣的問(wèn)題鏈和討論的結(jié)果，學(xué)生撰寫了故事的結(jié)局。以下為學(xué)時(shí)間推進(jìn)Inthemorning,theyawokeoutsideanotherHowardJohnson's,andthistimeVingowentin.Thegirlinsistedthathejointhem.Heseemedveryshy,andorderedblackcoffeeandsmokednervouslyastheyoungpeoplechatteredaboutsleepingonbeaches.Whentheyreturnedtothebus,thegirlsatwithVingoagain,andafterawhile,slowlyandpainfully,hetoldhisstory.HehadbeeninjailinNewYorkforthepastfouryears,andnowhewasgoinghome.----GoingHome時(shí)間推進(jìn)Inthemorning,theyawokeouts情感推進(jìn)分析各個(gè)角色的“情感線”情感推進(jìn)分析各個(gè)角色的“情感線”2016年11月高考續(xù)寫典型案例(段二)ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sunshineembracedtheforestplain.Inhersleepyeyes,ahelicopterwasrightinthesky.Wildwithjoy,shejumpedup,grabbingtheblouseandflourishingitwhilecrying.Thehelicopterspottedherandbegantolandonthegrass.“It'sTom!Iknowhewill…h(huán)ewillcome!”ApairofquiveringhandreachedJane'scheek.“ThankGod!Ifanythinghappenedtoyou,I'llneverforgivemyself.Theyhuggedmoretightly.I'msorry.Janesaid.情感可以是：adjectives,verbs,repetitions,conversations2016年11月高考續(xù)寫典型案例(段二)Itwasdaybr02Language02Language動(dòng)作描寫范例（頭部描寫范例）頭發(fā)：1.sthmakeone'shairrise使頭發(fā)豎起來(lái)（怒懼驚激）2.runone'sfingerthroughone'shair撩頭發(fā)3.comb梳頭發(fā)眉毛：1.sbfrown皺眉2.raise/cockone'seyebrows（表驚訝）/eyebrow（表懷疑）翹起眉毛/挑眉耳朵：1.one'searsperk/prickup/sbperk/prickupone'searsatthesoundof豎起耳朵聽(tīng)…眼睛：1.aflashof…crossone'seyes眼中閃過(guò)一陣…2.blink眨眼3.rollone'seyes翻白眼4.meetone'sgaze迎著/迎視某人目光5.eyesdarttowards眼睛掃向6.stareat凝視7.glareat怒視臉頰：sbwinceatasuddenpain畏縮，臉部肌肉的抽搐（疼痛/不安）動(dòng)作描寫范例（頭部描寫范例）頭發(fā)：1.sthmakeon2017年6月高考故事續(xù)寫習(xí)作范例“Hopin!”PaulroaredatMac.Sensingarayofhope,Macjumpedofthebikeandflungitatthewolfwithallhismight!Instantlyhestormedtowardsthecarathisdesperateeffort.Butthebikedidn'tmakeabigdifference.Thebeastchasedhimandplungedathim,bitinghisanklethemomentheflungopenthedoor.Asurgeofpainpiercinghisbody,Mactightenedhisgriponthedoorhandle.“Gotohell!”Hegaveaheavykickatitsheadandflunghimselfintothecar.Rightbeforehecouldslamthedoor,Paulsteppedhardonthepedalandthecarwhizzedoff,leavingthebeasthowlingbehind.“Damnit!”Mac,withallthebreathknockedoutofhim,laywherehefell,“JesusChrist!Thankyou!”2017年6月高考故事續(xù)寫習(xí)作范例“Hopin!”Paulr對(duì)話描寫：簡(jiǎn)短+地道+量少M(fèi)omandI,asurgeoffragrancesweepingover,trodlightlythroughdaisies,liliesandacoupleofunknownflowers.“Wow!”Imurmuredtomyself,“IwishIhadbeenhereearlier!”Pickingaflower,Idashedtomom.“Here!”Ireachedoutmyhand,“Thisisforyou.”Mom,withherfacecracking/broadeningintoabright/bigsmile,tookitover,“Thankyou,sweetheart!”Mombentdown,sweepingmeintoahug.Lookingupatthesky,wesawsunlightfilteringthroughoverlappedclouds.對(duì)話描寫：簡(jiǎn)短+地道+量少M(fèi)omandI,asurgeoff環(huán)境描寫：烘托氣氛、畫龍點(diǎn)睛從視覺(jué)角度描寫環(huán)境可以分類為社會(huì)環(huán)境和自然環(huán)境的描寫。其中，社會(huì)環(huán)境是指能反映社會(huì)、時(shí)代特征的建筑、場(chǎng)所、陳設(shè)等景物以及民俗民風(fēng)等。自然環(huán)境是指自然界的景物，如季節(jié)變化、風(fēng)霜雨雪、山川湖海、森林原野等，對(duì)表現(xiàn)人物身份、地位、行動(dòng)，表達(dá)人物心情，渲染氣氛都具有重要作用。在故事續(xù)寫中，自然環(huán)境的描寫更加易用，并且，一般來(lái)說(shuō)，故事續(xù)寫中的場(chǎng)景主要發(fā)生在戶外的大自然中，這也為自然環(huán)境的描寫提供了充分機(jī)會(huì)。環(huán)境描寫：烘托氣氛、畫龍點(diǎn)睛從視覺(jué)角度描寫環(huán)境可以分類為社會(huì)2016年10月高考一篇高分作文的開(kāi)頭首句：Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Clustersofstarsdecoratedthevastsky,weaklyshininginthemoon-eclipseddarkness.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sunshineembracedtheforestplain.2016年10月高考一篇高分作文的開(kāi)頭首句：Paragrap聲音描寫飛禽走獸花鳥魚蟲，金木水火土風(fēng)雷電聲音描寫飛禽走獸花鳥魚蟲，金木水火土風(fēng)雷電聲音描寫例句一、單獨(dú)成句，加感嘆號(hào)或者省略號(hào)Crack!Thestickbrokeintwo.二、擬聲詞可以做動(dòng)詞/名詞1.Thecockintheyardcroweditsfirstround.2.Hefeltasifhemustshoutandsing,heseemedtohearabouthimtherustleofunceasingandinnumerablewings.三、擬聲詞做副詞Thelogswereburningbrisklyinthefire.聲音描寫例句一、單獨(dú)成句，加感嘆號(hào)或者省略號(hào)Crack!T夯實(shí)基礎(chǔ)Input&Output夯實(shí)基礎(chǔ)Input&Output01Input1.教材2.課外素材01Input1.教材2.課外素材教材的使用ASadStoryHealthyEatingPowerofNature......教材的使用ASadStoryHealthyEating必修三課文拓展范例：“Em…”LiFangfalteredwithembarrassment.“Tobehonest,Imadeamistake.Ithoughtweweresupposedtomeetatthecoffeeshop.”“Areyouserious?”SaidHuJin,“Howcarelessyouare!Didyoupayanyattentiontothisdate?Itwasawasteoftimewaitingforyou!“It'sallmyfault.”SaidLiFang,“I'msosorry,Iwasalwayscomplainingthatyoudidn'tturnup,butIhadnevermanagedtothinkthatitwasIthatmixedupwiththecoffeeandtea.However,Iboughtagiftforyou.Thoughitwasthrownbyme.CanIbuysomethingelseasanapologyforyou?Afterall,Iloveyou!”Afterhearinghiswords,HuJindidnotannoyanymore.Infact,sheknewthattheylovedeachother,soshesaid:”Yourapologyisaccepted.Ishouldhavecalledyoujustnow.Andw