專題10讀后續(xù)寫：銜接大法（解析版）在讀后續(xù)寫中，與開頭一樣，文章的結(jié)尾也是相當(dāng)重要的。成功的結(jié)尾，能使讀者更深入、更透徹地理解文章內(nèi)容，進(jìn)一步領(lǐng)會文章的主旨。精彩的結(jié)尾，能喚起讀者的思考與共鳴，增強(qiáng)文章的感染力。以2020浙江高考7月卷讀后續(xù)寫的尾句構(gòu)思舉例如下：▲第一段首句：銜接第一段段首語Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.思考：被噴霧刺痛眼睛的北極熊是什么樣的？思路：此時(shí)的北極熊肯定被激怒了，所以會更猛烈地襲擊圍欄。所以，銜接第一段的段首語可以從描寫北極熊開始，用非謂語動(dòng)詞開頭，如Angeredbythespray,thebeargreeteduswithahowlofrage.▲第一段尾句：銜接第二段段首語Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.思考：thatverymoment是什么時(shí)刻？思路：在第一段的結(jié)尾，可設(shè)計(jì)一個(gè)最危險(xiǎn)的時(shí)刻，此時(shí)北極熊馬上要破欄而入，呼應(yīng)thatverymoment，這樣銜接最流暢。可借助擬人化的手法，如Suddenly,thebearhadtornanarrowopeninginthefencewhichwouldcollapsesoonandwitnessthebeartearusintopieces.▲第二段首句：銜接第二段段首語Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.思考：聽到直升機(jī)的聲音，夫婦二人會做何反應(yīng)？思路：他們應(yīng)該會馬上跑回營地，聯(lián)系飛行員?？衫脛?dòng)作細(xì)節(jié)進(jìn)行描寫，如Hearingthehelicopter,weranbacktothecampswiftly,andradioedoursaviorinatremblingvoice.▲第二段尾句：這個(gè)尾句應(yīng)呼應(yīng)原文主旨以使續(xù)寫部分結(jié)構(gòu)完整合理。思考：在本篇故事中，夫婦二人的旅行目的是拍攝北極熊，那么遭遇北極熊襲擊圍欄的他們，能達(dá)到目的嗎？這樣的經(jīng)歷會給他們留下什么？思路：故事的結(jié)局是二人獲救了，但關(guān)于是否成功拿到北極熊的照片，可以有不同的設(shè)計(jì)：也許在直升機(jī)用噪音嚇走北極熊的時(shí)候，夫婦拍下了終生難忘的珍貴照片；也許在與北極熊周旋的過程中冒險(xiǎn)拍下。如利用非謂語動(dòng)詞作狀語，進(jìn)行描寫并回扣原文主題。Grabbingthecamera,Idashedoutandsnappedvaluablepicturesoftheescapingbear,makingthetripunforgettableforthewholelife.實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練：2021八省聯(lián)考原題：Duringthispastyear,I'vehadthreeinstancesofcartrouble.Eachtimethesethingshappened,Iwassickofthewaymostpeoplehadn‘tbotheredtohelp.Oneofthosetimes,IwasonthesideoftheroadfbrclosetothreehourswithmybigJeep.Iputsignsinthewindows,bigsignsthatsaidNEEDAJACK（千斤頂），andofferedmoney.Nothing.RightasIwasabouttogiveup,aMexicanfamilyinasmalltruckpulledover,andthefatherboundedout.Hesizedupthesituationandcalledfbrhisdaughter,whospokeEnglish.HeconveyedthroughherthathehadajackbutthatitwastoosmallfortheJeep,sowewouldneedsomethingtosupportit.Thenhegotasaw（鋸子）fromthetruckandcutasectionoutofabiglogonthesideoftheroad.Werolleditoverandputhisjackontop,andwewereinbusiness.Istartedtakingthewheeloff,andthen,ifyoucanbelieveit,Ibrokehistireiron.Noworries:Hehandedittohiswife,andshewasgoneinaflashdowntheroadtobuyanewtireiron.Shewasbackin15minutes.Wefinishedthejob,andIwasaveryhappyman.Thetwoofusweredirtyandsweaty.Hiswifepreparedapotofwaterforustowashourhands.Itriedtoputa$20billintheman'shand,buthewouldn'ttakeit,soinsteadIwentuptothetruckandgaveittohiswifeasquietlyasIcould.Iaskedthelittlegirlwheretheylived.Mexico,shesaid.TheywereinOregonsoMommyandDaddycouldworkonafruitfarmforthenextfewweeks.Thentheywouldgohome.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI'dhadlunch.Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.第一段第一句：WhenI

wasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.第二段第一句：Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.通過分析句子我們可以注意到：第一句給出了“是否吃午飯”的新情節(jié)，那么毫無疑問，第一段的展開應(yīng)該是圍繞午飯這個(gè)問題展開。第二句出現(xiàn)了“紙袋”的新線索，這是前面我們在理清文章脈絡(luò)中所沒有出現(xiàn)過的線索，而且出現(xiàn)的位置是二段首句，那么毫無疑問這個(gè)線索必須出現(xiàn)在我們所要續(xù)寫的一段中，而且我們也需要考慮：這個(gè)紙袋是做什么用的呢？為什么我有了這個(gè)紙袋？誰給的？諸如此類的問題。三、已知推未知所謂已知是指續(xù)寫時(shí)所提供的每段的首句話。所謂未知就是指我們需要續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容。推論的方法如下：第一段第一句

順推

第二句（根據(jù)所給的人物要么展開語言、動(dòng)作，要么描寫心理、表情等等）第二段第一句

逆推

第一段尾句，過渡句第二段第一句

順推

第二句（根據(jù)所給的人物要么展開語言、動(dòng)作，要么描寫心理、表情等等）第二段尾句總結(jié)或感慨。以8省聯(lián)考試題為例第一段第一句：WhenI

wasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.順推

第二句：我說沒吃。（為什么是沒吃呢？這就是二段一句中出現(xiàn)的“紙袋”所暗示的答案）第二段第一句：Afterthey

left,IgotintomyJeepand

opened

thepaperbag.逆推

第一段尾句：他們一家上了車順推

第二句：我看到袋子里有......第二段尾句：世上還是有一些樂于助人的善良人的！！”（他們一家?guī)臀倚蘖塑?，還留了一個(gè)紙袋所引發(fā)的感慨“）四、完善關(guān)系鏈所以，現(xiàn)在我們的任務(wù)就是將我們所推論出來的句子進(jìn)行關(guān)系鏈的完善問題。這個(gè)過程可以是動(dòng)作鏈的完善，也可以是心理歷程的完善。以8省聯(lián)考試題為例（第一段

第二句）我說沒吃他們給我張羅吃的我拒絕他們但是沒成功，留下了紙袋（第一段尾句）他們一家上了車這樣就構(gòu)成了第一段一個(gè)較為完整的關(guān)系鏈的閉環(huán)。參考答案：WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.Hearingwhatshesaid,IrealizedthatIdidn’thavelunch.Tobehonest,afterworkinghardforseveralhours,Iwassohungry.Feelingabitembarrassed,Ireplied:“no!”Thegirlsaidwithasmile,“eon!Joinus.TheMexiconsandwichisdelicious!”Withmovedtearsrollingaroundmyeyes,Itookthesandwich.Aftereatingitlikewolf,IfeltthatitwasthetastysandwichthatIhadeverhad.Whiledining,Italkedaboutmytroubleandfeelingsandtheysharedtheir

interestingstoriesinthelife.Then,thegirl’smotherhadanothersandwichandsomefruitplace

dinapaperbagandhandedittome,saying

gently:“Keepitandhaveitlater!Wehadtogonow.”

Ishowedmyheartfeltgratitudetothemandsaw

themdisappearinmysight.Aftertheyleft,Igotintomyjeepandopenedthe

paperbag.

Whatsurprisedmealotwasthattherewasasandwich,fruit

andthebillgivenbyme.Holdingthepaperbagtightly,Istoodstill,awarmcurrentrisinginmyheart.HowgratefulwasItothefamilyhelpingme.AlthoughmostofpeopleImetontheroadwereindifferent,therewerestillsomepeoplelikethisfamilywhowassohelpfuland

thoughtful.Fromthenon,Iplacedajackandsomemontoolsinmycar.Whenmeetingpeoplein

needontheroad,Iwouldtrymybesttohelpthemlikethefamily.Onlyinthisway,couldmoreandmorepeoplehelpeachotherinthefuture.模擬演練01讀后續(xù)寫

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

Ilookedoutatthesmilingfacespackedintotheschoolhall.Flashesfromcameraslitupinalldirections.Theapplause

(掌聲)

filledmyears.Ihaddoneit.Ihadreallydoneit.

Justafewmonthsearlier,Iwouldneverhavepicturedmyselfactinginaplayinfrontoftwohundredpeople.

"Notforamilliondollars,"Iwouldhavesaid.Butwhenthetimecame,Igotuponstageandfacedoneofmygreatestfears—anddiscoveredIcoulddomorethanIevergavemyselfcredit

(認(rèn)可)

for.Ifoundanewpersoninsideme,amuchmoredaring,outgoingperson

whohadbeenhiddenallalong,justwaitingfortheopportunitytoappear.

Ifnotfor

myteacher,Mrs.

Sather,

Imightneverhavefoundthatopportunity.

Inthefirstandsecondgrade,

Iwasextremelyshy.

Ihadfriends,butitjustwasn't

inmypersonalitytobeveryoutgoing,evenwhenIknewsomeonewell.IwasafraidIwoulddoorsaysomethingwrong,sousuallyIjustsmiledandlistenedtootherpeople'sconversations.IdidwellinschoolandIlovedtowrite.However,Iwouldescapeintomywriting,whereIcouldbemyselfandneverhadtoworryaboutwhatotherpeoplethoughtofme.Inmystories,Iwasnevershy.

Myteacher,Mrs.

Sather,alwaysencouragedmetowritemore.Shetoldourclasstogoafterourdreamsanddiginwithbothhands.Ithinkshewasoneofthefirstpeopletoseemyinnerstrength.Oneday,sheannouncedthatourclasswasgoingtoperformaplayshehadwritten.

"I'llbegintocast

(挑選演員)

everyonetomorrow,"shesaid.

"IneedsomeonewhoisnotafraidtobeonstageinfrontofalotofpeopletoplaytheleadpartofDorothy.Anybodywanttotry?"Afewexcitedhandsshotup—mine,ofcourse,wasnotoneofthem—andMrs.

Sathersmiled.

"We'lltalkmoreaboutittomorrow,"

shesaid.Thenthebellrangandmyclassmatesslowlylefttheclassroom.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左石：2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:WhenIwasloadingupmybackpack,Mrs.

Satheraskedmetogotoher.

______________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:HearingMrs.

Sather'swords,

Irealizeditwastimeto

makeachange.

______________________________________________________________________________________翻譯小練習(xí)：1.薩特太太凝視著我的眼睛，仿佛看到了我內(nèi)心深處的自我封閉。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.我希望你能幫我試試這個(gè)。但如果你真的不想，我不會逼你。這是你的選擇。”薩特太太要我演這個(gè)角色。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.她嚇了我一跳，因?yàn)槲乙恢笔莻€(gè)害羞的人，甚至不敢在公共場合大聲說話。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.我決定脫掉我害羞的斗篷。我想證明我也可以在公共場合做些好事。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.猶豫了幾秒鐘后，我自信地點(diǎn)點(diǎn)頭說：“薩瑟夫人，我想，不，我決心扮演這個(gè)角色。我會盡我所能把它做好?！盻_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.薩瑟太太面帶微笑地看著我說：“我相信你。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7.如果你遇到什么問題，你可以找我。”“謝謝！”我高興地離開了她的辦公室。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案：1.薩特太太凝視著我的眼睛，仿佛看到了我內(nèi)心深處的自我封閉。Mrs.Satherstaredintomyeyesasifseeingmyinnerselflockedawayinside.2.我希望你能幫我試試這個(gè)。但如果你真的不想，我不會逼你。這是你的選擇?！彼_特太太要我演這個(gè)角色。"Iwouldloveyoutogivethisatryforme.Butifyoureallydon'twantto,Iwon'tmakeyou.Itisyourchoice."Mrs.Satherwantedmeinthisrole.3.她嚇了我一跳，因?yàn)槲乙恢笔莻€(gè)害羞的人，甚至不敢在公共場合大聲說話。Sheshockedme,forIwasalwaysashyperson,notevendaretospeakloudinpublic.4.我決定脫掉我害羞的斗篷。我想證明我也可以在公共場合做些好事。Idecidedtothrowoffmyshycloak.IwantedtoprovethatIalsocoulddosomethinggoodinpublic.5.猶豫了幾秒鐘后，我自信地點(diǎn)點(diǎn)頭說：“薩瑟夫人，我想，不，我決心扮演這個(gè)角色。我會盡我所能把它做好。”Aftersecondsofhesitation,Inoddedmyheadconfidentlysaying"MrsSatherIwantto,no,Iamdeterminedtoplaytherole.AndIwilltrymybesttoperformitwell."6.薩瑟太太面帶微笑地看著我說：“我相信你。Loo