敘事專題讀后續(xù)寫訓(xùn)練ContinuationWritingLead-in：ShareamovingstoryTherewasayoungcouple,JimandDella,wholedapoorlife,buttheylovedeachotherverymuch.WiththeapproachingofChristmas,Theywantedtobuyaspecialgiftforeachothersecretly…Canyouguesstheendingofthestory?Lead-in：Shareamovingstory

goldwatch

longblondhair

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watchchain

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InordertomatchJim’spreciousgoldwatchwithaperfectwatchchain,DellacutoffandsoldherlongblondhairtobuyagoldenchainasaChristmasgifttoJim.Inthemeanwhile,Jimsoldhisbelovedgoldwatchtobuyajewelhairpin(發(fā)夾)todressuphiswife’sbeautifulhair.OnChristmasDay,whentheymeteachotherinapark,theywerebothsurprisedtoknowthetruth.Itseemedthatthewatchchainandthehairpinwereuseless.Buttheyweretrulythemostpricelessgiftsforthepoorcouple,becausetheybothgaveuptheirmostpreciousthingstoloveeachother.TheGiftoftheMagiLead-in：ShareamovingstoryAgoodbeginningishalfdone,whileagoodendingmakesaperfectstory!Timeforpractice閱讀下面短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Lucy

wastheonlychildinherfamily.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandshe

ranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn'thelpweepingsorrowfullywhenshethoughtofthescold-

ingfromhermother.Havingwanderedaimlesslyinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryand

wishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedseller

busydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shegaveasighandhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethe

noodles?”“Oh,yes,butIdon'thavemoneyonme,”

shereplied.“That’snothing.I’lltreatyoutoday,”

saidtheman.“Comein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,thesmellsoattractive.Asshewaseating,Lucycried

silently.“Whatisit?”

askedthemankindly.WritingPractice:

“Nothing.ActuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”

saidLucyasshewipedhertears.

"Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutof

thehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomercilesscomparedtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlof

noodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.

Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitudetoher?”Lucysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedhermother'sfamiliarfaceand

weatheredhands.“Whydidn'tIthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeel

grateful.Whyhaven'tIthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme?”O(jiān)nthewayhome,Lucymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessas

soonasshearrivedhome.注意:1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好;Paragraph1:Approaching

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doorway,...____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:A

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Readformainidea--6WHquestions

ranoutofthehouseastrangermadeanapology...How:

stranger’swords,kindadviceStep1:Readformainidea--6WHquestions

angry

sorrowful/sad

touchedgratefulandregretfulspeechlessandnumbwithshock

why:

Step2Makepredictions

推測故事續(xù)寫發(fā)展(MindMap)BackgroundforPara1：Approachingthedoorway,…doorLucyHowdidshefeel?whatdidshedo?Lucy'smotherPara1：Lucyfelt_______________whenshewasinthedoorway.2.

WhatdidLucythinkabout?

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doorway,...

Step3:Gatherideasforwriting(GroupWork)3.

WhatdidLucydonext?

Lucy___________________.Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.Step2Makepredictions

推測故事續(xù)寫發(fā)展(MindMap)doorLucyLucy'smotherBackgroundforPara2：Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback…athomeHowdidshefeel?Whatdidshesay?Whatdidshesay?Whatdidshedo?

Step3:Gatherideasforwriting順延故事續(xù)寫1.

HowdidLucyfeelwhenshesawhermother?

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WhatdidLucysayordo?

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WhatdidLucy'smothersayordo?

Lucy'smother__________________Lucy___________________________.

Step3:Gatherideasforwriting(GroupWork)Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.upset/worried/nervous/不安的/擔(dān)心的/緊張的take

adeepbreath深呼吸beangrywith對...生氣careabout關(guān)心be/feltashamedof

感到羞愧gatherone’scourage鼓起勇氣tearsrolldownhercheeks眼淚從臉上滑下couldn’thelpdoing情不自禁做...hugsb.擁抱throwingoneselfintosb’sarms投入某人的懷抱expressgreatgratitudeto

對…表達(dá)感激

Step4:Draftacontinuation(起草續(xù)篇)TimeforPresentationHomework1.Finishyourwritingandpolishit.2.Sumtheskillsforcontinuationwriting.ThankYou!

[寫作提示]本文是一篇充滿教育意義的故事。Lucy因和母親爭吵而負(fù)氣離家,在街上得到陌生的面店老板贈予的面條而心生感激,在面店老板的提醒下,她終于認(rèn)識到了母親的偉大。原文最后一段提到Lucy決定回家向母親道歉,那么后文的續(xù)寫一定要圍繞這一線索展開。續(xù)寫第一段的提示句告訴我們這一段是Lucy到家門口后的情景,而又根據(jù)第二段的提示句“一個在她頭發(fā)上的溫柔的撫摸拉回了她的思緒”可知上一段最后一定要出現(xiàn)Lucy沉思的語境。充分利用這些信息并結(jié)合自己的想象應(yīng)該可以構(gòu)思出合理的結(jié)尾。本文原文的基調(diào)暗示整個故事是一個內(nèi)容健康向上,具有很好的教育意義的故事。所以續(xù)寫一定要延續(xù)這個主題。Approaching

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doorway,Lucywasverynervousandtookadeepbreath.Standinginfrontofthedoor,shewasafraidwhetherhermotherwouldforgiveherforherrudeness.ButwhenShethoughtofhermother’sfamiliarfaceandthenoodleseller’skindadvice,shedecidedtoknockonthedoorbravely.HermotheropenedthedoorbutLucywassoashamedthatshedidn’tknowwhattosay.

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Ishouldn’thaverunawayfromhome.Couldyouforgiveme?”Lucy’smotherwasmoved,saying“Goodgirl,nevermind,Ialsoshouldmakeanapologytoyouforscoldingatyouangrily.Iamveryworriedaboutyou.”Tearsrolleddownfrombothoftheirfacesandtheyhuggedeachothertightly.version2：Paragraph1Approachingthedoorway,Lucy

tookadeepbreath.Whensheknockedatthedoor,shefoundthedoorwaslockedandhermotherwasnoti