高考讀后續(xù)寫素材積累：動(dòng)作與神態(tài)描寫1Nanacollapsingsuddenly,

herbody

tightening,

becomingrigid(僵硬的),

hereyesrollingback,

herarmsandlegs

shaking

asifsomethingwerethrottling(壓制)

herfromtheinside,

thefroth(泡沫)

atthecornersofhermouth,white,sometimespinkwithblood.

描述可憐的Nana發(fā)病時(shí)的狀態(tài)：herbody--tightening,

becomingrigid(僵硬的)；hereyes--rollingback；herarmsandlegs--shaking；

thefroth(泡沫)

atthecornersofhermouth--white,sometimespinkwithblood.作者從Nana身體的各個(gè)部位進(jìn)行描述，給人以真實(shí)感,人物造型栩栩如生,使文章生動(dòng)形象。2WhenMariamspoke,hisattentionneverwavered動(dòng)搖.He

noddedslowly

and

smiledwithalookofgratitude,asif

hehadbeengrantedacoveted渴望的

privilege.ItwaseasytotellMullahFaizullahthingsthatMariamdidn’tdaretellNana.本句描述了師生的關(guān)系和諧，其中在描述老師傾聽

Mariam講話時(shí)的神態(tài)特別形象：noddedslowly

and

smiledwithalookofgratitude描寫動(dòng)作時(shí)，為了讓動(dòng)作更豐滿，更靈動(dòng)，可以適當(dāng)運(yùn)用副詞，介詞短語等來補(bǔ)充說明。比如本句中：noddedslowly；根據(jù)情景我們還可以用noddingquickly等等。再比如，在表達(dá)微笑的時(shí)候，本句中smiledwithalookofgratitude=smilegratefully；根據(jù)情景，還可以有smilebroadly,開懷地笑。smilecharmingly迷人地笑.smilecunningly狡猾地笑。smilepleasantly令人愉快地笑smilefaintly微微一笑；等等。3“Isthatwhatyouwant?”MullahFaizullahsaid,

lookingatherwithhissoft,wateryeyes,

hishandsbehindhisstoopingback,theshadowofhisturbanfallingonapatchofbristlingbuttercups.對(duì)老師講話時(shí)的神態(tài)描寫：眼睛lookingatherwithhissoft,wateryeyes手：hishandsbehindhisstoopingback4Whenshelaughed,she

coveredhermouthwithafisttohidethebadtooth.娜娜笑的時(shí)候的神態(tài)描寫：coveredhermouthwithafisttohidethebadtooth.用拳頭蓋住她的嘴巴以掩飾她糟糕的牙齒，體現(xiàn)了她愛美，又不太自信的神態(tài)。5She

waiteduntilherlegswerestiff(堅(jiān)硬的).Thistime,shedidnotgobacktothekolba.

She

rolledupthelegsofhertrouserstotheknees,

crossed

thestream,and,forthefirsttimeinherlife,

headeddown

thehillforHerat赫拉特(阿富汗西北部城市)用動(dòng)作表達(dá)她內(nèi)心的掙扎與果敢：waiteduntilherlegswerestiff(堅(jiān)硬的)rolledupthelegsofhertrouserscrossed

thestreamheadeddown6Finally,onThursdays,allshecoulddowassitagainstawall,

eyesgluedtothestream,andwait.IfJalilwasrunninglate,

aterribledreadfilledherbitbybit.Herkneeswouldweaken,andshewouldhaveto

gosomewhereandliedown.等候父親的神態(tài)描寫：eyesgluedtothestream體現(xiàn)了她的渴望;aterribledreadfilledherbitbybit;Herkneeswouldweaken;...gosomewhereandliedown用具體的身體反應(yīng)與動(dòng)作表達(dá)她的恐懼與焦慮。7

Alookofconfusioncrossed

thegirl’sface.Then,

aflashofrecognition.Therewas

afaintsmile

onherlipsnow,and

anairofeagerness

abouther,ofanticipation.“Waithere,”thegirl

saidquickly.神態(tài)的細(xì)微變化：先是Alookofconfusioncrossed

thegirl’sface然后aflashofrecognition.之后是

afaintsmile

再是

anairofeagerness

最后是thegirl

saidquickly.一連串的神態(tài)變化，細(xì)微的表情特寫，最后輔以動(dòng)作。就像是看電影，有木有？8She

swung

herfeetoverthesideofthebedandhurried

over.She

kissed

hishandasalwaysand

heherbrow.She

pulled

himup

achair.一連串的動(dòng)作描寫：

swung--hurried

over--kissed

--heherbrow(kiss)

--pulled

himup

這一連串的動(dòng)作將瑪麗亞姆對(duì)父親到來的熱情與愛表達(dá)出來了。9Jalil’seyes

liftedslowly,

metMariam’s,lingered

foramoment,thendropped.

He

openedhismouth,

butallthatcameforthwas

asingle,painedgroan.細(xì)膩的神態(tài)描寫：父親Jalil的反應(yīng)：

Jalil’seyes--

liftedslowly--metMariam’s--lingered

foramoment--dropped--

openedhismouth--asingle,painedgroan描寫了父親對(duì)女兒要出嫁的復(fù)雜心情，這些動(dòng)作描寫表現(xiàn)了人物的內(nèi)心世界，以外顯內(nèi)。10Theirgazes

metbriefly

intheglassand

slidaway.細(xì)膩的神態(tài)描寫：陌生不自在的碰撞：metbriefly--slidaway11He

crossedanduncrossed

hisarms.他手臂交叉在胸前，又放了下來。動(dòng)作描寫：將一組相對(duì)的詞“交叉cross"與"使不交叉，放下uncross”放在一起表達(dá)，表達(dá)了人物的矛盾心理。12Jalil

lookeddown,and,likeanovergrownchild,

dugat

somethingwiththetoeofhisshoe.Jalil，（瑪麗亞姆的父親）朝下看，用鞋尖磨蹭地面什么的dugatsomethingwiththetoeofhisshoe。本句用了比喻的手法，

likeanovergrownchild就像一個(gè)大孩子，形象地描寫了父親感到愧疚的神態(tài)。13

Aloneinthehouse,Mariam

pacedrestlessly,fromthekitchentothelivingroom,upthestepstoherroomanddownagain.She

endedupback

inherroom,

doingherprayersorsitting

onthebed,

missing

hermother,

feeling

nauseatedandhomesick.描述Mariam一個(gè)人在家無聊的場(chǎng)景一、動(dòng)作的不斷變換：不安地走動(dòng)pacedrestlessly；endedupback返回；doingherprayers祈禱orsitting

onthebed坐在床上,同時(shí)想念母親missing

hermother...想家

feeling

nauseatedandhomesick...

二、場(chǎng)景的不斷變換fromthekitchentothelivingroom從廚房到客廳,upthestepstoherroomanddownagain去樓上房間又下來...這些并不是累贅的文字，這些文字讓讀者更加了解瑪麗亞姆在家無所事事百無聊賴的心情。我們似乎看到了瑪麗亞姆在陌生的家里孤單的身影。14

She

pushed

untilsomehowshewasintheclearandthenshe

ranup

thestreet.Itwasn’tuntilshe’d

reached

theintersectionthatshe

realized

she’drunthewrongway.She

turnedaround

andranback

intheotherdirection,

headeddown,

tripping

onceand

scrapingherkneebadly,thenupagainand

running,bolting

pastthewomen.形象地描述Mariam慌不擇路的窘態(tài)：逃跑，方向錯(cuò)了，返回跑，又摔倒受傷了。

15

He

gave

hera

woundedlook.經(jīng)過一系列的事情，瑪麗亞姆感覺父親并不真正愛她，內(nèi)心極度受挫極為傷心。她說她永遠(yuǎn)不要聽到他消息。這時(shí)，父親傷心地望了她一眼。這一眼，體現(xiàn)了父親怎樣復(fù)雜的感情呢？16

“Don’tleavelikethis,”he

saidinathinvoice.瑪麗亞姆憎恨父親將她嫁出去，拒絕與父親交流。在出嫁那天與父親分別時(shí)，態(tài)度冷漠，于是父親軟弱無力地說：別這樣離開我。用"thin"這個(gè)詞來表達(dá)他內(nèi)心的那種傷感，內(nèi)疚與心虛。17

Rasheed

buried

hisfaceintoherpillow,andMariam

stared,

wide-eyed,attheceilingabovehisshoulder,

shivering,lips

pursed,feelingtheheatofhisquickbreathsonhershoulder.描述瑪麗亞姆與丈夫首次身體的接觸，后面幾句都是類似的。大家可以酌情處理。這類描述也可以用在其他情景中，如某人很興奮，很恐懼等。18Hishandwasonherrightbreastnow,squeezingithardthroughtheblouse,andshecouldhearhim

breathingdeeplythroughthenose.19.Therewasamomentofhesitation,andthenhishandwasonherneck,histhickfingers

slowlypressing

theknobsinthebackofit.Histhumb

sliddown,andnowitwasstrokingthehollowabovehercollarbone,thenthefleshbeneathit.Mariambeganshivering.Hishand

crept

lowerstill,lower,hisfingernailscatchinginthecottonofherblouse.20

Mariam

closed

hereyes,

grittedherteeth（咬緊牙關(guān)）.21.Mariamsatonhisbed,embarrassedandconfused.Shecuppedherfacewithherhandsandclosedhereyes.Shebreathedandbreatheduntilshefeltcalmer.神態(tài)描寫：困擾與尷尬。作者是這樣描述的：雙手捧住臉，閉上眼睛cuppedherfacewithherhandsandclosedhereyes.然后她不斷地呼吸直到感覺平靜些Shebreathedandbreatheduntilshefeltcalmer。這種具體的神態(tài)與動(dòng)作描寫把她的尷尬與困惑形象地表達(dá)出來了。22Hungermadehimcurt,irritable,impatient.饑餓帶來的反應(yīng)。簡(jiǎn)單粗暴，易怒，沒有耐心：curt,irritable,impatient.23Meanwhile,achangehadcomeoverRasheedeversincethedayatthebathhouse.Mostnightswhenhecamehome,hehardlytalkedanymore.Heate,smoked,wenttobed,sometimescamebackinthemiddleofthenightforabriefand,oflate,quiteroughsessionofcoupling.瑪麗亞姆丈夫Rasheed在她流產(chǎn)后，對(duì)她的態(tài)度發(fā)生了極大變化。回家后，很少講話。他就是吃飯，抽煙。上床睡覺，或者午夜回家一會(huì)兒。動(dòng)作描寫很簡(jiǎn)單ate,smoked,wenttobed,，但我們能深刻體會(huì)到這種壓抑的生活氛圍，以及瑪麗亞姆在這種環(huán)境下生存，該多么不易。24Occasionally,hetookheraroundtownonFridays,likeheusedto,butonthesidewalkshewalkedquicklyandalwaysafewstepsaheadofher,withoutspeaking,unmindfulofMariamwhoalmosthadtoruntokeepupwithhim.Hewasn’tsoreadywithalaughontheseoutingsanymore.Hedidn’tbuyhersweetsorgifts,didn’tstopandnameplacestoherasheusedto.Herquestionsseemedtoirritatehim.丈夫Rasheed在她流產(chǎn)后的又一表現(xiàn)：帶她上街少了Occasionally,hetookheraroundtown。即使在街上，走路很快，不顧瑪麗亞姆能否跟上。事實(shí)上，瑪麗亞姆跟不上，要跑著才能跟上他walkedquicklyandalwaysafewstepsaheadofher,withoutspeaking,unmindfulofMariamwhoalmosthadtorunt。而且不講話，不買禮物給她了，也不停下來介紹地名給她didn’tbuyhersweetsorgifts,didn’tstopandnameplacestoherasheusedto，瑪麗亞姆如果問問題，似乎也會(huì)激怒他irritatehim。足見他的不耐煩，以及對(duì)瑪麗亞姆的嫌棄。他對(duì)瑪麗亞姆已經(jīng)沒有愛了。25Hedidn’tlookatherwhenhesaidthis.Thesedays,heneverdidanymore,andMariamwasn’teversureifshewasbeingspokento.丈夫Rasheed對(duì)瑪麗亞姆的冷漠的態(tài)度：說話不看她，而且有一段時(shí)間了，Hedidn’tlookatherwhenhesaidthis.Thesedays,heneverdidanymore,這相當(dāng)于冷暴力。26Itwasn’teasytoleratinghimtalkingthiswaytoher,tobearhisscorn,hisridicule,hisinsults,hiswalkingpastherlikeshewasnothingbutahousecat.可憐的Mariam要容忍丈夫?qū)λ睦淠c侮辱:bearhisscorn,hisridicule,hisinsults；這里多個(gè)his的重復(fù)，是修辭中的平行對(duì)照手法，形式整齊勻稱，音律節(jié)奏鏗鏘，富有感染力。在燦爛千陽中，類似的句子表達(dá)有很多。在這里，我們可以感受到她丈夫?qū)Υ拖穹孔永锏囊恢回?，不把她?dāng)人看待，讓我們對(duì)瑪麗亞姆的命運(yùn)產(chǎn)生深深的同情。27Heputitinhismouth,chewedonce,thentwice,beforegrimacing（做鬼臉）andspittingitoutont